“Start with action! You need a big action scene at the get-go or readers will think you have no story!”
…respectfully, no.
What makes a good opening isn’t “convince the reader there’s a story here.” They picked up the book. They know there’s a story in it, that’s what books are for. What makes a good opening is “convince the reader to listen to your story.” Why should they keep reading? Why should they buy your book, or check it out from their local library?
Don’t start a fight, plant a bomb.
Starting with decontextualized action, like an unprompted fight scene, doesn’t grab attention the way it might in film or television. If you have to rewind and explain how you got here, then you just have a jumbled opening with minimal payoff. Good openings set up a thread to follow, one you’d better pay off soon. You plant a bomb, show it to the reader, and let them watch it tick down until it explodes. Setup > payoff, enough to get them interested in what’s next.
Example:
“The wolf lay dead, black blood oozing from its mouth.”
Setup: dead wolf. what killed it? what’s wrong with its blood?
The reader is asking questions. Good. Because now you can answer them. That’s your payoff. Now you’ve got an inciting incident and the beginning of your plot. You’ve established the story and the reader is interested. Mission accomplished 😎
Now, different openings will work better for different stories. A slow-build spec fic might have a subtle first line that gets you interested enough to go on. An action-heavy novel might start with an infiltration, building up tension and dropping lines about the protagonist’s purpose until the plan fails and they have to fight their way out. Whatever it is, it should introduce the world and story they’re getting into and do so well enough to get them invested. Set up a thread, follow it through, and pay it off.
Plant a bomb.
Then blow it up.
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The wingfeather saga book one: dark darkness of darkness was a book that stressed me out: a List
Stop blaming Janner every time his siblings do something stupid and get themselves in trouble?? For fucks sake they're not toddlers THEY should learn to maybe NOT act stupid? My god I feel so sorry for the poor kid I hope he tells them all to go fuck themselves and fucks off somewhere to go be his own person
Tink is just lowkey annoying and not even funny. NEXT
If I found any pests in my garden I'd be gladly hurling them over a cliff to certain death, (you have never lived through hell until geckos shit all over your fucking house, birds come to steal your garbage and scope out your house like they're going to rob you, and ants get in your water WHILE YOU'RE STILL ACTIVELY DRINKING FROM IT) Leeli can go fuck herself
Also Leeli is a stupid ass name. It's the exact same fucking name I used in sentence writing exercises when I was like. Fucking seven
STOP BRINGING YOUR FUCKING DOG EVERYWHERE IF YOU DON'T HAVE A WAY TO CONTROL IT ITS GOING TO BITE ANOTHER LIZARD PERSON AND THEN YOU'LL GET JAILED AGAIN YOU STUPID
Peet mcsockguy has the same vaguely fuckable blorbo guy vibes as Bruno from Encanto
The grandpa is also fucking annoying
There is a DIFFERENCE between being brave and JUST DOWNRIGHT STUPID!! When the enemy outnumbers you AND has your family hostage AND is armed and you deliberately provoke them, it's called being STUPID!!
I hope their grandpa dies
I feel like in fiction a lot of the time this kind of loud blustery bravery is like disproportionately glorified? As if being LOUD and OUT THERE and IN YOUR FACE is the only good, honorable way to be. I don't like it. Sometimes bravery is keeping your head down until the right time comes to strike. Sometimes bravery is struggling along in a difficult world in your own little way
They keep getting captured, then saved by pete sockguy, then captured again and saved again and it's tedious to read through. I wish they'd just get captured and executed and be done with it
The author keeps doing this thing where some character dies/nearly dies and then oh look...they didn't really die after all...and I don't like it. If they die, they should DIE and stay dead. I don't think that's a lot to ask for
I did not like the "ooh look how DISGUSTING the evil bad guys are even the food they eat is GROSS AND YUCKY bleargh" thing...like..."this is a race of evil people who are all evil, they're gross and their food is gross" feels...uh... look, fish innards actually sounds pretty good to me, OKAY? And I'm sick and tired of white people acting like every meat tastes like chicken, and every food that is a little bit foreign to them is like eating garbage, and people who eat food they think is weird are also weird. I know the author probably didn't mean for it to come across that way, but like try eating some pork intestines and then maybe you'll be normal someday
(^ when I was like 8 I found a book titled something along the lines of GROSS FOODS FROM AROUND THE WORLD and I was like "oh SICK can't wait to learn what kind of manmade horrors people are eating around the world" but then it was just. Normal Stuff. Like chicken feet. Innards. Various fermented foods. And for each entry the author gave it a rating on the fuckin vomit-o-meter or something like that. And I think I never really got over that. And now every time youtube recommends me a video of someone gagging over durian it feels like a hate crime)
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