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came-out-of-the-coffin-desisted · 1 year

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writing dragon age fanfiction is so so so so hard for me because every time i spot another historical inaccuracy that’s like “i don’t care that it’s fantasy they have the same level of technology this is WRONG” i have to have a moment of like. “kaed NO ONE ELSE will EVER care about this. you watch ‘ranking period dramas on corset accuracy both in construction and writing’ videos on youtube for entertainment normal people simply do not give a FUCK about medieval castle layouts!”

and yet this cycle continues, because the dragon age devs so so so so clearly DID research but they did BAD research and it HAUNTS me. like WHYYYYY is there only one courtyard that isn’t even really a courtyard in castle cousland WHY is the “main hall” huge with no furniture while the great hall “dining room” is tiny as fuck and in a horrible to access spot WHY are there no ovens in the kitchens where the FUCK do they bake the breaaaad!! like ok fine cool servants get beds in thedas i’ll bite. that fucks hard, actually! but WHY are there more servant rooms than rooms for visiting nobles do you honestly think anybody in the middle ages fucking had servant rooms???? they slept on the FLOOR in the GREAT HALL! and WHY is there a fucking library and a ‘treasury’ (which what the fuck is THAT there should be a DON-JON in there you locked your valuables in the TOWER at the TOP, not in ONE room centrally located on the first floor with TWO guards!!) like i KNOW it was for level design i KNOW it was but oh my fucking g-d it’s gonna KILL ME to write out creeping through corridors when there WERE NO CORRIDORS! like look at this. look at this.

castle cousland: stupid, awful design, honestly they kinda asked to be coup’ed with their garbage unsurvivable castle that supposedly nobody sieges regularly even though it’s literally a death trap. there is ONE main exit, no way to trap your enemies, and only one official guard post that i can see. fuck awful.

harlech castle in wales: it took 115 years for someone to successfully take this castle, and it’s withstood COUNTLESS sieges, you can go visit it right the hell now if you go to wales (not at all getting into the evilness of the english building castles in wales, that’s not the point i’m trying to make.) see how the outside makes it so that even if your enemies breach the walls, to actually reach anyone important they have to survive the volleys of arrows from the ramparts? and then presumably kill everyone ON the ramparts, or the minute you go to open a door or try to drag someone out, you’re going to get shot full of arrows. that’s after breaching TWO heavy doors (which would require a battering ram both times) which would wake up the entire castle LONG before they got anywhere NEAR the heir to the castle’s wife and child.

and before somebody says “oh well kaed maybe you just don’t know your castle building periods very well” think again. i know my castle building periods. that style above is concentric (harlech castle’s initial construction was finished in 1289 and was one of the first finished castles in england in this style,) which came after the keep and bailey style, which came after the motte-and-bailey style, which came after the burh (which arguably WASN’T a castle but whatever,) etc. there are no fortified castles in english history that look like castle cousland, because it’s fucking indefensible. now, this does lead to the question of “oh, well, what is the timeline for the game, maybe there’s something you missed!” so let’s examine the time period of origins:

at the very, very latest, origins could be based off of the BEGINNING of the british “wars of the roses” (the civil wars between the various members of the house plantagenet) which began in the 1450s— this is personally what /i/ think origins is based off of, for a couple reasons. 1) trevelyan was a real person— g.m. trevelyan was a british historian who wrote about the wars of the roses, and in one instance there’s a quote of his the devs almost verbatim used for the design of the free marches: “the Wars of the Roses were to a large extent a quarrel between Welsh Marcher Lords, who were also great English nobles, closely related to the English throne…” they ixnayed the part about the marcher lords being ferelden nobles, i imagine because it was too complicated, but trevelyan? marcher lords? a close relationship with this country? (i.e. like somewhere that might take in their refugees after a catastrophe?) cmon. 2) because ferelden is fucking huge and the histories are kinda weird, because they aren’t 1 for 1, i’m gonna say that we have to use the norman conquest of england as our unification date. in other contexts i wouldn’t try to argue this, but in this one, i’m saying 1066 is the unification date of the anglo-saxon kingdoms into england. calenhad gives us a hard unification date for ferelden— the first landsmeet was in 5:42 exalted, ergo origins is 388 years later. the wars of the roses started in 1455, 389 years after the norman conquest ended. 3) the wars of the roses happened because of a succession crisis— admittedly, these two succession crises are very, very different, but there are definitely parallels between loghain and henry vi and alistair and edward iv. henry vi was crowned at a young age (loghain largely ruled for maric at various points in his life, starting when he was very young,) and was very ineffectual— he suffered from an unknown mental illness which made him extremely unstable and unable to rule for large periods of time. loghain, on the other hand, ruled when the /theirins/ weren’t stable, so you argue he had the opposite— meanwhile, his policies WEREN’T sustainable, whatever you might think of him. loghain is too shaped by his own experiences to be a truly good leader, and by the time his rule/anora’s rule is threatened by cailan, he’s sacrificed enough of his principles that he’s willing to commit atrocities (notably, margaret of anjou ruled during the worst parts of her husband’s mental instability, which again could apply to loghain OR anora, as they ruled fairly jointly after a certain point.) edward iv was the son of richard of york, who was eligible for the throne at a very young age (18 to alistair’s 19) because his father was dead. he was coaxed and led into battle by his cousin, the earl of warwick (also known as the kingmaker— sound like a protagonist you might know?) that’s about where the similarities end, but that’s largely because alistair is a grey warden— if he weren’t, he’d probably be able to have kids and end the question of succession. but he can’t, which, assuming the devs eventually remember, WILL lead to another civil war. hence why i say this is at the BEGINNING of the wars of the roses.

another option that could be argued but makes much less sense and i have no evidence for is that alistair has similarities to edward ii (second son who only became king because his brother died, married a more powerful woman to consolidate power, not very good at ruling, no offense to alistair,) but that still puts origins at like 1307-1327. in either case, they would have been using concentric castles— and given what time period castle cousland was originally built in, it would have been built as a motte-and-bailey, which would NOT have lasted four hundred years. so the castle had to have been rebuilt, and bryce cousland would have had to update that rebuilt castle, because no one lived in it during the orlesian occupation. so where the hell does this winding, weird multi-level design come from?

i GUESS— and this is SO charitable— they could have designed castle cousland based off of a country house design from the mid 1500s, but none of them look like that, either. they’re exclusively rectangular, for one thing, and one of the huge bragging rights of owning one was that they weren’t fortified— they came into fashion during a period of relative stability under the tudor rule, when it was considered guache and maybe even treasonous to build a fortified castle. ferelden is NOWHERE NEAR a period of stability, if anything at the end of origins they’re entering their greatest period of INstability, given what happens in inquisition, and that no matter who ends up on the throne, there’s no way for them to have children. so there’s NO way this castle is a country house, or inspired by one.

leaving us with the final conclusion that a) the game devs definitely did do research into the time period because i can fairly directly trace a line between the event i think inspired origins and the plot, but they didn’t do enough research to figure out what the everloving fuck the BUILDINGS looked like. so these castles make no fucking sense and can’t possibly be called historically accurate even with the fantasy defense, and b) i care WAAAY too much about this for somebody who isn’t even a medieval historian. my area of expertise is the paleolithic, i have no clue why this bugs me so bad i spent four fucking hours writing this post.

#anyone: so what are you getting up to on spring break? me: uhhhhhhhhhhh *spends four hours writing a bioware calloit post about their #historically inaccurate castles* Normal Things #it took me four hours bc i had to pare it down like 8 times btw. i could have kept going #btw there are image descriptions on the maps #dragon age origins #dragon age #long post #actually i take it back i DO know why it bugs me and it’s because they made this g-dawful design part of the plot on every single occasion #like highever? would never have been sacked if not for this design. redcliffe? whole story is about infiltrating this castle through these #extensive dungeons they never would have fucking built bc there’s no use for them. the palace in denerim (which doesn’t even have a name)#is so so so fucked. we can’t even get into it but i HATE it. denerim is a city small enough that not all the banns arls and teyrns can have #their own estates in the city meaning they would need rooms in the palace dedicated to them. where are those rooms??? if’s tiny as hell. all #they needed to do was to put up some extra wings you can’t go into that’s all they needed. i’m so so so annoyed by this it’s such a pet #peeve of mine. especially since skyhold is SOOOOOO good if’s the pinnacle of dragon age buildings no one else will ever be her #there’s multiple courtyards. there’s a garden. there’s the stables centrally located there are concentric walls there’s that weird palace #thing in the center with the world’s hottest great hall. there’s a FORGE there’s a keep there’s a guest wing there’s a tabern there’s #ANOTHER tower you can build there are sentry posts there’s a gatehouse there’s a bridge no one will ever replace her in my heart i know this #skyhold baby you are so so so sexy and delicious and everything a fantasy castle in a video game should be MWAH

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melloianv2 · 1 year

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Dr. Abe's Laboratory

Game Concept (read needed so some bosses info makes sense)

BEFORE I START!! I ended up posting this of result of an comic was taking to long and i didn't want folks to think am dead are smth. this post is little rushed it self because I worked on this shit for too long.

And btw some of them I didn't draw all the attacks caused rushed and lazy 🥴.

btw this post is very long, so if you just stopped by the look at the bosses image then that's ok. But if you stay to read some lore and uhh attack movements and description then continue on

Anyway

warning for murder

Pepperman

The shy ego painter?

ah the first boss. Attacks the same way, same health, same everything. The only difference is phase 2. After phrase too, instead of being repeat, he ends up chasing you throughout the level, until you reach to the end. There is obstacles, like slopes.

No I didn't forget his clothes, he don't wear them well sense he's fighting actually I didn't feel like drawing it

Senoraki

certified weeb

Same health.

He uses pipe sword which kind of replaces revolver. But throwing spoon most likely does. pipe sword he goes towards the player.

Pipe bow replaces bazooka

Shuriken replaces dynamite.

soda nunchunks replaces flamethrower

Fork Sai sword doesn't replace nothing, its new ability. Similar to pipe sword expect he attacks 3 times.

Smoke bomb, senoraki just goes to the other side of the room.

Things that not shown in the image: His grandfather still attack. he calls for fox backup instead of cow

Straw dummies instead of targets men phase 2 happens the same however the defeat is different depending the choice you picked. if you joined the ninja squad by mr secrets (mr incognito) , then the duel would never happened, instead it cut to mr secret stopping the fight. If not, then the duel happened and senoraki gets defeated.

duel is basically draw.

Mechadragon

6 health

The map have platforms, top, middle, bottom

Mecha charges large laser blasts that can cover somewhat half the screen. either targets top, bottom or middle.

Ground pound

He has a tail mace, uses to hit the player, depending on which area platform he own.

He flies around with saw claws, usually above the player.

In phase two, he starts shooting the laser downwards.

He always shoots mini laser blasts.

Flower Lady?

"Flowers are blooming, waters are looming, as yellow as bee, as fast as I can flee, where can I go, what can I do, as grass are trembling, my mind is troubling, all I can see is dark, as it makes me irk. I yell for help but It sound like yelp. " - poetry one of the levels.

8 health

Flower lady mostly uses her parasol for attacks.

Most her attacks are sending big plants at you.

Midair is a laser attack.

Flower bomb is air and ground bomb

Vine attack is a ground attack

Groundbound

Spin attack

vulernable is when she starts thinking.

Phase 2 is the same, instead there's more added plant attacks.

she's using the parasol powers.

Beenadryl

Big fluffy bee

6 health

The picture explains for me. Giant bee flies around level cant get hit only by boxing glove. But the more the bee gets hit, the bee drones starts to go back their own, one by one. eventually flying all over the room. They can be defeated, but reappear in phase 2.

Fake Peppino

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Same health

Explained on the first half the image, he starts off shape shifting previous bosses before attacking you with his actual powers.

Because there's so many fucking attack moves am not going even mention half of them.

Human centipede charges at you basically.

Uhhh... is a grab attack. In rare, it shows a smaller fake peppino head instead. he bites you if he succeed grabbing you

Ball form goes pouncing on walls.

Grabby hand is similar to uhhh.... but expect his hand keeps extending across the room. how to involve this? go wall climbing bro. if he succeed grabbing, he tosses you.

leech mid air charges downwards at you.

He still super taunts

He still super jumps

He still dashes.

Yes he clones himself still

the other grab attack still exist, and still using his tongue.

still is vulnerable

he can charge in acid, and shoot it from his mouth, which straight up makes him vulnerable afterwards.

sorry bois he banned from throwing his head.

Phase 2: Fuck shapeshifting that's isn't working,

Fake peppino resorts to light-armored knight (there's two different knights forms in this au btw)

In this form, he start attacking with his sword. Phrase two don't start unless peppino grabs the light-armored knight transformation as well.

Slash attack

Dash Charge Attack

Charging

Spin sword attack

he turns around fast if he misses the player.

double jumps

slides as attack as well

He may even throwing his sword ay you, no matter what spot you at. even in air.

In this state, no longer clones himself. However, it replaced with him being much more faster with his attack, and less vulnerable. AND YOU CAN'T STUN HIM. have fun :)

Duel is different here, if you manage to get in this, you get a bar. you basically have to press a certain key repeatedly until your bar fills up, which causes back up giving you a chance to attack him

The armor starts falling piece by piece as his health goes down.

DOES HE CHASE YOU AT THE END?

no not in this battle, but you'll have to fight him again later, which fulfills that chase part. in story wise, he was going to get in trouble the further he continue this fight because he fought you without listening to orders.

Dr. Abe

"behold, my freeze-a-NATION!!!"

Same thing with fake peppino, am not going go over every attack. please note he fought as the finale boss in one ending and fought as 1st phrase of pizzachulu.

Same Health

His attacks are mostly the same. there are differences though

An attack where he throws chemicals that causes different effects:

slow effect

freeze effect

firebutt effect

no effect, just hit you

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still taunts at you

phase 2

abe starts getting more faster.

roobma - spawns every so often. comes across the room in a straight line and disappears afterwards. it does hit.

Wall roobma - same thing but instead attaches to the walls and celling.

flying drone - drops bombs like how abe drop bombs

saw - same with roomba, goes to a straight line or on walls and disappears afterwards. only spawns.

Added chemical effect, daze. Daze slightly only slightly distorts the screen.

Abe bomb that walks ig and Abey.

Phase 3

am thinking about this for awhile so uh....

King Pizzachulu

✨Panino con polpo ✨

since he's the only one whose attacks is fully different...and going to be the longest the explain because phrases!! there's

Same Health

there's is no walls in this level.

phase 2

Only thing that's the same is summoning enemies that's it.

He launches arm attack, which hits the ground. it usually either be his right, left or both. the arm does hurt if you run into it.

Phase 3

Goattail

✨Capretto Arrosto ✨

Pizzachulu turns into Goattail.

most goattail attacks are same. only difference he throws a platform that bounces and pull down tv hud. tv don't bounce but instead shoots out words. after 3 hits:

Phase 4

Goattail's Servants.

devil advocate?

Before you attack Goattail, you attack his servants. why isn't it attacking all the bosses you fought again? laughs in fighting 13+ bosses again. yeah no, that's why I did this. but only one am talking about right now is pizzamancer since he was original concept in original pizzatower before I talk about the rest.

Pizzamancer

skidaddle skidoodle your dick is now a noodle

Lore long story: Centuries ago, Dr Pizzaman and Peppino's ancestor used be lab business partners and close friends. They specifically create medicine, drugs and cures together. Machinery counts too. pep's ancestor was known to be friendly, awhile pizzaman was something. The two was popular amongst the other scientists, and was used for most operations and awards. One day, the two was challenged to a contest of machine curing process, by doing it separately. The two accepted the challenge. Pizzaman thinks he's going to win, as pep's ancestor just took his time. Then the contest arrived, as the two show off their machines. Pep's ancestor showed off his machine, it could cure multiple symptoms, preventing some terminal diseases and its a painkiller machine. Pizzaman creates a machine that only cures one strong disease. Result came in, Pep's ancestor won the contest, which caused Pizzaman to be pissed and felt like he was robbed. Pep's ancestor shared his happiness and shared he liked his machine, but Dr. Pizzaman decided he wasn't going to be his friend no more because he didn't win. Then he left. Pep's ancestor was kind of upset about this but move on later, continuing creating medicine, drugs, cures and machines, by himself now. One night later, the laboratory they worked at was slowly getting more emptier and quieter. Pep's ancestor questioned where was everyone, and begin to look (awhile carrying a flashlight.) He found out people was getting murdered one by one. He followed a saw blood trail, begin following it, and leading to cooking area. He saw a spell book, ingredients, cauldron, etc. He found out there's witchcraft going on around here, before he know it, he hears familiar voice. "looks who went looking for his own death." he turns around, realizing it was ex-friend, Pizzaman. Pep's Ancestor begins questioning him about everything, until Dr. Pizzaman admit he used witchcraft to kill people he hated, and he was next. Before he tries to kill pep's ancestor, he decided to curse him with eternal generational bad luck, can't do nothing in peace, and finally, no generations will ever have the same intelligence as him or ever able to become scientist (he makes sures they fails at it.) despite being cursed now and despite he about to kill pep's ancestor, pep's ancestor decided to grab dr pizzaman and throw him into hot boiling cauldron, which caused him to scream, slowly melting his body (explains his ghost form) before he dies. Instead of becoming a ghost, he was instantly sent to the void. he questions where was he, As Mushrazel responding about to get sent to hell. Pizzaman quickly got mad explaining how he was a good person and was wronged by everyone. Mushrazel tells everything he has done was evil and did one of the rules of going to straight to hell, it was witchcraft. Pizzaman still didn't agree but was sent to hell anyway. Mad about it, he decided to cause chaos in hell. Which ended up catching prince Goattail attention. He impressed by his destruction that he invited him to his tea table. He asked him to join his team. Pizzaman refused at first but was later convinced. When he joined, he was renamed as Pizzamancer. He was fine until he heard his ex-friend died decades later and went to pizevan (heaven).

tl;dr: Dr pizzaman used to be friends with Pep's ancestor until he got jealous and started killing everyone. He cursed his ex-friend with bad luck, suffering and no high IQ allowed but ended up getting killed at the end by his ex-friend. Now he in hell serving Goattail.

Anyway

8 health

Pizzamancer casts spells, the spells are similar to abe's checimal throwing attack, Expect most are attack projectiles.

when applies spell himself it usually boosting his speed or duplicating self.

Broom usually melee attacks the player. Broom spawns dust attack.

When half health, he turns into a ghost state. he usually just follows the player until the player defeats him. the broom turns ghost-like, and shoots ectoplasm instead.

Back to Goattail

the most rushed art

At this point goattail is in a rage state. he starts moving much more faster then originally.

charged run

stomp attack

punch attack

tentacle - slams ground then knock back player.

Summoning - this isn't enemies but more like a long list of spells. most are projectiles or lasers.

in this state, the stage is continuously moving

Mrs Answers.

"Riddle me this, Peppino"

before the fight, you met her as npc in the final level of section 3 before going to her boss stage.

anyway boss stage:

phase 1

she makes you answer her questions in limit to 15 seconds. no matter how long the questions are. incorrect answer causes the player lose a health.

phase 2

she changes into a big screen tv.

bass attack - (soundwaves)

Laughter attack

glass shards attack

knife throw attack

microphone attack (she toss a microphone at player which grabs them)

at some point she makes you answers her questions again, but this time under 8 seconds. don't worry the questions are short. but only this time you can dodge the hit whenever you answer wrong.

Spinal Worm

guys this isn't a reference I swear!!

This guy boring as hell im just say what they do in one sentence, digs in and out ground. chase only boss. You have hit 8 parts separately, in order to defeat it. level doesn't have walls. That's it, what's phase 2?

Sanity

"no this isn't therapy, this is anti-therapy. I just want you to suffer through your problems again by forcing you to remember them all" - a villain probably

similar to mrs questions, starts as an npc in specific level. emotionless alternative design

8 health

phase 1

he starts off small in sanity form. spitting out full sentence words as attacks.

he also frowning, so he sometimes shoots out tears as attacks instead.

Phase 2

there's is were the real attacks begins. he's bigger now. He starts showing different emotions as attacks. (he changes his face)

Happy? not really..

laughing attacks

spitting out bullets attacks

fire attacks

dancing as attack ig

Sad

large tear attacks

words attacks or sentences attacks.

tossing memory attacks (lore??)

summons ghosts attack

throwing corpses attack

Gravestone falling attack

throwing head attack

Anxiety

breathing in and breathing out large amount of air as attack

sweating attacks

summons a mini-emotion enemy

smoke attack

roll attack (he rolls over)

Angry/Stressed

summons a mini-emotion enemy

stomps the ground

stare eye attack (he basically stares at player and stop with a red light circle. if the player is there, they get hurt.)

bullet from mouth attacks

knife attack

headbutt

Insane

Grenade attack

shotgun attack

revolver attack

bazooka attack

tossing flesh sandbag off of him

spitting out blood as an attack?

When down to 2 health

Dull

(he losses the fleshbags and military office, still look like sanity form, it just he has a chef hat now.)

sentences as attacks: "why care about anything anymore?"

summons as eyeball enemy that follows the player until attacked.

papers as attack

telephone attack (he tosses a telephone at player)

food bullets attacks

throwing a hammer

clock rolling

motor-scooter attack

Brainfog

big brain

phase 1

he's invincible, only sending you 5 cell drones to attack.

phase 2

he starts playing the illusion game. guessing which one is the real one.

he also attacks like previous bosses attacks.

In phase 2, there's a fog that covers the the rest of level. (you can see still)

expect the room changing every time brainfog does data move. sometimes the room looks platformy, sometimes the rooms normal, sometimes the room has no walls, etc etc.

Goattail's Other Servants

devilish trio?

the rest of the crew:

Pepperonierebus

6 health

charges at player.

each head melee attack the player when standing still.

have vulnerable animation.

Mushrazel

wind as projectiles

throws sand, dust or dirt as attack

grave sliding across the floor

throwing skulls at player

bone attack

teleporting to other side

surfing on corpse as an attack

accidentally using his pen ink.

urn or coffin falling from sky

flower bomb

Ghost attack

mushrazel archangel form conpect

Cheeselzebub

acts like bee boss. flies rotates him like a halo until cheeselzbub gets hit.

after 3 hits, he starts attacking, making player can now directly hit him.

swarm of flies attack

hits you with his leek.

toss his leek

summoning a fly enemy

fly swatter attack lol

water spray attack

and....

for the other bosses, yea am still working on them... this is the fairest I got. I do have one for randy just his idle post concepts

can't post more images anyway, am kind of on my limit so.

Trivia

Beendaryl goes by she/they

I got the whole idea of pizzas being demons from original concepts. So, I thought it would fit the horror theme.

Dr Abe and Abette in concepts was going to have been fought twice. Dr abe first battle was he just testing you out. Abette 2nd battle is testing your strength once again before you fight Goattail. This time, she using her powers and not from the parasol. Scrapped.

There's a secret boss called Venus. it was a plant creation failure, in result of eating humans. as the flowers appears to have faces on them as well. the plant is kind of based off the little shop of horror.

There's more planned secret bosses, its only going be 3.

Sanity was originally going be named Propaganda. And emotionless was originally named Smiley.

recruiting the 2 bosses that are recruitable will gave you approved badge.

sigh...time to get back doing the comics.

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Omg I recently found your Miguel and Joel fics and your writing is so good!! I have to ask, as an aspiring fic writer, do you have any tips on how to write/improve fanfic or find your writing own style? I have so many docs files worth of half-finished fics (since I suffer from not-good-enough syndrome), and I try to learn as much as can from those I admire. If this ends up being answered, thank you so much!!

hey! thank you for the ask and it's taken me a while to answer cuz I had to think long and hard to give you something useful lmfao... and it means a lot that people enjoy my writing enough to even ask me for advice!! thank you anon, and I hope this helps :D

a/n: I'm not an expert, not even a little bit, but I like writing on here and I'm writing a book! so those are my (lack of) credentials - just a heads up

gonna split my advice into parts: before writing, during, and after; and also give some tips on writer's block / "not-good-enough-syndrome" (very very valid, btw)

Before writing

- Planning is not always necessary but I find it helps! it doesn't even have to be a really detailed one, like mapping out every story beat - but writing rough notes can help you guide it along better. And if you're not actively planning, thinking about the fic in more detail can act as a plan.

- Unironically, all my fics start off as vivid daydreams, which I then jot down notes, and start writing. If you think of your plan as guidelines rather than something rigid, it can help with flow. I.e. if when you start writing you're finding it hard to hit a certain beat, there's no need to force it in that direction.

- It can help to emulate the writing styles of writer's you like - like an artist study but with fics/literature you like. Take a couple of fics you really really like and jot down what you enjoy about it, and specificity is key. What about their language do you enjoy? Is it their use of metaphors, is it the way they describe actions, or the little character details they include? It can help to have this list on hand when you actually start writing.

- Similarly, you can try little writing exercises to get you thinking about that kind of thing. It think I saw this in a youtube vid, but a thing I've done in the past is take a scene from a movie or book and try to emulate in one of two ways, or both: first, as best you can remember, as close to the style of the original work as possible. And second, in your own words, trying to hit certain plot beats as best you can, leaving the rest up to you. For example, I always did it with the opening of the hunger game's first chapter, because it was something really distinctive to me and a property I enjoy. The important thing here is to not have the reference in front of you. The aim isn't to copy exactly, but to imitate / get your brain thinking about the way in which the author / filmmaker / etc portrays the story.

Whilst writing

There is a lot of very valid general writing advice in terms of language and actually writing, so I'll list some general ones below, (idk if this was quite your question tho):

- vary sentence length and structure. it adds rhythm and texture to your writing. but also be wary and try to align it to the context: i.e. a more fast-paced action scene would benefit from short, staccato sentences, but a scene describing characters falling in love (hazy, romantic, etc) might be better with longer, multi-claused sentences to drag out pace.

- focus less on stuffing in adjectives (i am very guilty of this, icl) but rely on the specificity of your nouns to portray information I.e. instead of 'spindly, thin and wire-framed glasses' using 'spectacles' is both more efficient and sounds a bit nicer.

- depends on the writer, but try to work backwards from images and motifs for characters, places, etc rather than the other way round. I.e. if your character is as fierce as a lion, instead of stating that as a simple simile, imply the metaphor with description: "her flowing mane (note specificity of noun, mane, not hair) cascades around her maw - spit-slick and eyes wild. Carnal, she was a killer; and God help those caught between her claws." (<< this is corny asf, lmfao, my bad. but u get the gist), and then you can pepper your text with callbacks to the motif - like little easter eggs for your reader.

- similar to above, adverbs often break up the flow of text, so choose the verbs carefully. Instead of "Hurriedly, he ran" even more info can be given with "tumbled" or "stuttered" etc etc

- break up dialogue with action rather than the usual alternatives for "said" .

- also also, "said" and other simple words are not bad to use at all!! sometimes they work better in the text than every dialogue word being "whispered" or "crooned" or whatever. you can repeat words without reaching for a thesaurus every time, cuz often its alternatives are more jarring and noticeable to read.

- honestly, above all the 'feel' of the text trumps everything else, or at least it does for me. There is no point using a super complex metaphor if it comes out of nowhere, or breaks up the tension of a scene. These aren't hard rules, and if it serves your story more to 'break' them, then you absolutely should! Definitely read aloud where you can (ik it's a little embarassing with fics, sometimes). In terms of my specific style, I'm a big fan of poetry so i like to pay careful attention to the way words and sentences sound! I love using fricatives or plosives or words that sound the way they feel (if that makes any sense), sentences that have rhythm due to placement of commas and semicolons - I think it makes for a more enjoyable read.

- don't be afraid to jump around when writing. Often, the issue is with starting out, so chop and change where necessary and jump around the fic. If there's a specific scene you're really excited about writing, write that first! and then once you're in more of a flow, the rest should be a bit easier.

- I can't really help with grammar cuz I know my grammar fucking sucks; there's probably an editor out there that has a heart attack everytime I overuse a semi-colon lmfao.

After writing

- For me, editing is the most important part of writing. Due to the way I write it's where a fic can really be elevated or fucked. A lot of the stuff I write initially is gibberish, and then is improved massively in the first edit.

- so with that, don't be afraid to shift things around: sentences, words, whole passages if need be. If you're writing in a word processor, take advantage of it's features. if it helps, make a copy of your fic and really 'fuck' it up: move shit around, get rid of wonky words, etc. be ruthless lmfao - cuz it's only the copy. if you tend to over describe (like me), I promise you that backspace button is your best friend.

- depends on how long it is, but take it in chunks (this is with both editing and writing) focus on the chunks and then expand out into the whole.

- it's important to be reflective. if you get through the process, or hit a slump and you're unsatisfied; be specific about why. where exactly did it stop working for you? is it the way you've described a scene? does it feel slow? too fast? do your characters feel flat? no stakes? be specific, and if you can, highlight where it went wrong. the comment feature on docs is my favourite to use because of this reason

- also, please remember to give yourself your flowers! where it works, no matter how small, make sure to highlight it and say, "I really like this bit, because of xyz". the 'because' is important, as it helps you do this again in later fics.

writer's block / not-good-enough-syndrome

- first off, remember that 9 times out of ten, you are your own worst critic. I guarantee that the things you don't like about your writing, someone will read and very much enjoy it! humans aren't great at being objective, so give yourself some grace and leeway to learn and improve.

- second, best way to overcome this is exposure therapy, imo. Tumblr is a great place for this: you can make a side blog and dump all the fics you think are a bit shit on there. It may gain some traction, it may not; but the most important part is that you've put yourself out there, and nothing exploded. and because there are no stakes, you can get rid of the blog as you see fit, with little to no consequences, and never have to think about it again.

- if you do end up posting, please don't get bogged down by the metrics! it can suck when something you've worked really hard on doesn't do very well. the great thing about fanfic, is that it's a really easy way to improve quickly. if you like something enough to want to write fanfic - you're more likely to write. More writing = more improvement, and you get to enjoy fucking around with the canon or a self insert or writing smut or whatever.

in terms of overcoming writer's block / having lots of half finished fics you can approach it a couple of ways:

- you can brute force finish a fic, no matter how shitty you think it is, and try to salvage what you can in the edit.

- lower the stakes! if you can't write a thousand words, leave it at 500! often when you move the goalposts closer, there's less of a mental block, and you end up bringing it to it's natural conclusion anyway.

- if you've got multiple unfinished fics, frankenstein that bitch lmfao. cut and paste and stick the best bits together. You like that one interaction? cool, stick it onto a bit from another fic. You've come up with a great piece of dialogue? great, stick it in the middle of that fic. Because you're not necessarily coming up with new content, just repurposing old bits and bobs, often you find you're writing the inbetween-y bits anyways and you've got a full fic.

- take a break! leave stuff unfinished, sleep on it; come back in a day, a week, a month. fresh eyes can make all the difference when you've been staring at it too long.

finding your writing style:

- read, read, read, read. other fics, books, even consuming media generally to find a voice. You can be reflective and specific, like I mentioned in the other points to help yourself along, but expanding your horizons will do wonders for your writing.

- e.g. my favourite book is Lolita and I'm in loooove with the writing style: it's a beautiful balance of poetic with a strong narrative voice. I love poetry (Ocean Vuong you will always be famous!), and gorgeous, existential films filled to the brim with subtext (Blade Runner 2049, Howl's moving castle, Moonlight, etc). You probably can't notice that explicitly in my writing but it does show up: I love wistful rambling, heavy imagery, strong thematic motifs... all things I've connected with in other media, and emulated in my writing.

Your "voice" comes later, I think - something that happens without you actively looking for it. Who you are, your experiences, your connections with other people: it's pretty hard to keep that out of your writing. So don't stress! The page is like a block of wood; it scratches, it dents, it erodes - chips away into something new, entirely. Your writing remembers, and it doesn't stop being yours when you walk away from it.

Hope this wasn't pretentious or annoying or anything! best of luck anon and feel free to dm me cuz I'd love to read whatever you come up with (no pressure, ofc).

If anyone has any other writing tips I will do my best to reblog them, thanks <33

#x reader #writing #writing advice #fic writing #miguel o'hara x reader #joel miller x reader #fandom things #x reader fics #fanfic

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capnkerfufflez · 3 months

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I contain multitudes, so i made a uquiz for some of my quintessential sonas for fun

i dont really expect people to take it, but man i love an excuse to draw some of my boys i don't give much love to brief descriptions and the result descriptions under the cut

here's the link outside of just embed btw : https://uquiz.com/hkfS0R

in image order and i marked the number and color of the background above we have :

1 [red] E : non-fandom sona I use to vent mostly - "Conceptual Chaos Junkyard" / "CC Junkyard" so he's mostly negative traits of myself turned up to 11. He's the overly emotional and sentimental and over-reactive side of the duo between him and G.

"[[ oh baby girl, I'm so sorry for you, get some help ]] Everything you've ever done blows back up into your face, you don't know what you're doing wrong?! Or well, you've figured out a few things wrong with you, but you can't figure out how to fix those things about yourself…"

2 [red/orange] Knox S. Consumer : kinda a minecraft sona? - "What's Minecraft is Yourcraft" / "Yourcraft" He's in general a minesona, at least when I first made him. In Yourcraft he is the sona/character version of an oc that's a minecraft youtuber/streamer and who is very distinctly not me, so Knox falls into an odd character category where's he's both my sona and an oc's sona. He's an old grouchy wizard type, but breaks character often to help friends

"[[ you may think im stretching on this one, but i assure there's more obscure ]] You know so much yet so little. The type of guy that can recite so many video game lore details and fun facts across all subjects, but will fail to realize that they really did mean it calling it "cream cheese," it is actually a cheese. You are very smart though, with your intelligence only rivaled by your stubbornness."

3 [red/pink] Dong : pokemon not a big surprise, but he's a pokesona of sorts. He's a Mareep that's specifically paired with my friend's Wooloo "Ding," he's somewhere between a pokemon in the anime and pokemon mystery dungeon in terms of personification, he's very bitey.

[[ haha dong ]] Lil gremlin guy. You're the typa bitch to fucking taunt people bigger than you and when they get pissy you go 'oh im just a lil guy a lil birthday boy.' All talk no bite. well, maybe a lil bite, like consensually or deserved.. BUT the point is you take no responsibly of the misdeeds you may or may not do !

4 [orange] Bibbly : double life / life series Bibbly is the character I made soulmate's with my friend cause we were watching other people make sona's and pairs with their friends too. Bibbly is based off of a drawing I did based on a more literal interpretation of one of my minecraft skins (specifically my 453 skin), "Bibbly" coming from "Biblically accurate." Personality wise he varies a lot cause in conception and most practice he is an utter coward, very reliant on my friend's character, though in other interpretations I make him a lot more jaded and no-bull shit but also those are usually what is supposed to be later in his development and/or away from my friend's character

[[ telephone game of sonas ]] You are a recursion of self analyzation. You try to map out your intricacies only to have your theories on yourself become rules. And once you've realized its a set habit of thinking. You know trouble and you avoid it the best you can.

5 [muddy yellow] Clart : minecraft sona ? - "What's Minecraft is Yourcraft" / "Yourcraft" Similar case as Knox, where Clart is my sona and the sona of one of my oc's who isn't me, but for Clart he and the oc, they align closer with who I am so it's not quite as weird a case. Clart is very easy going and cares a lot, he isn't particularly notably in Yourcraft as he's not really someone who develops more a character that help's the other characters develop

[[ straight up gooping ]] You just want a break, things to be nice and easy and do menial tasks and be with your friends. You give all you can, not because you feel you need to, you just want to and you can. You know pain and cruelty, you choose to be kind.

6 [yellow] [453>- / 453 / The cooler Casey : a general sona He's a more stylized, exaggerated version of myself and usually a lot more malicious for the fun of it. In his "lore" he is a shapeshifting sand.. thing, it depends on the specific backstory I'm going with. He is generally very energetic and bitey and evil for the sake of it cause man villains are fun when they are having fun and he is having a blast

[[ creature !! ]] You are the coolest sexiest mother fucker out here! or you sure pretend to think so. A whole fucking jaw breaker flipping between god-complex and inferiority-complex, who knows what's at it's core (probably inferiority). You love to be an edge case, probably the type of guy to make a fan character concept that's over done but do it with a twist. No fear of ocs coming off like a mary sues just cause YOU know how cool and really clever they are really even if they give a bad first impression.

7 [lime/green] Casey : general sona / how i draw myself This is just me, like, just how I draw myself, it's as general and genuine as I can manage which my not really be all that accurate maybe but oh well

[[ oh fuck u are just like me frfr ! or like at least closest approximation ]] You are only human. You love your friends more than the world and you try to be worth all you're given. You have some self esteem and self image issues, but maybe if you shove your ocs full of enough of your issues you'll solve some.

8 [green?] Caddle : general sona / fursona / the one i use for sexual stuff Caddle is a cow-adject shapeshifter. He is the sona I use the most when it's anything sexual, usually paired with my partner's fursona, but he's supposed to have other buddies too that I never really draw. I've got complicated feeling on sexual stuff and myself in relation to it, so he gets those feelings dumped into his character too. But aside from that he is a fun character especially to draw cause inconsistency is baked in and I love him dearly, he is very lazily chill with a big heart, he's also a rodeo clown even though i dont draw a full on clown get up for him much

[[ honka honka we got certified clown ova here ]] You are silly, a goofball even, one may even argue a jokester. You may present all goofs, gafs and dick jokes, -and by all means you do genuinely loving goofing gaffing and dicking- but you are a person with complicated wants and thoughts and feelings. Wants and thoughts and feelings you hold close to yourself, you do not know how to voice, so more often than not, you don't.

9 [bluish green] Gilon Kurt : lesser sona Gilon is a sona that I made just on a whim off of a twist on my name with "fluffle" being a the name for a group of rabbits, he's "Capn Kerfluffle." And then I made him a rival to my main fursona in their story and he gained a personality outside of me as they so often do

[[ rage rage murder rage !!!! ]] You have worked so hard for what you have and yet it is never enough. There is always something else to achieve more to earn, people clawing for what you have. You can have no peace nor solace, relax? chilling? never heard of her!! There are experiences to be had!! People to meet!! Friends to continuing loving!!! And you'll fight for it all, fight until you die!!

10 [cyan] Yeode : minecraft sona [real] Yeode my beloved, she is my darling rock-based robot made to search villagers that learns to live for herself kinda. A lot of her kindness and softness and story comes from backstory for just me playing minecraft ig who is a lot less kind in practice.

[[ yippee !!! ^.^ ]] You are a people pleaser to your core! You are born and molded by your attachments and use to others. Even in their absence you still live on for them in part.

11 [saturated blue] G : non-fandom sona I use to vent mostly - "Conceptual Chaos Junkyard" / "CC Junkyard" similar situation to E of mostly negative traits, but the other side of it for the most part. she is full of anger and malice at being stuck with little control over her situation and takes it out on E

[[ oh sweetheart, no ]] You think yourself a "bad bitch" a "girl boss" even. Emotions are not your strong suit. You have a hard time managing your own feelings, let alone dealing with other people's. You may not always be right, but you work hard to try to be.

12 [less saturated dark blue] D. Base : minecraft sona, specifically in magic mods / heavily modded minecraft he came about from when i was testing a modded server with my friends there was something that would crash my game if i entered specific chunks, and in those 'dead' chunks was my silk worms so i made dBase as a character for the friend server and he is supposed to be that glitched silkworm i got in testing, uuh end then that server slowly broke too, so i like to think it was somehow also his fault; while i did get to play on the server i got really into a few magic mods, mainly mana and artifice so he is not only gitchy but a magic man

[[ grub ]] You think of yourself highly, not perfect, but damn good. You've worked your ass off for the skills you've obtained and are happy to show off when they are even slightly relevant. Your "fuck it we ball" attitude somehow works out for you most of the time, though some collateral damage to others.

13 [light blue] Clerk James : fursona / used to be mascot character to note if you see other art of him there is a stark difference between the silly goofy Clerk that's my sona and the asshole angsty backstory version of him before he got so very concussed; current Clerk is very sweet and very dumb, he's the "capn" of a pirate themed ferry though also goes on some genuine treasure seeking adventures pg pirate style

[[ consider it the post-drownings one, don't worry ]] A mix of poor memory, self-doubt, and self-hatred that results in a potent blend of guilt for things you aren't really sure you deserve to hate yourself over, being it maybe not or fault or maybe never really happened. Aside from that you're upbeat and a bit stupid in a silly lil guy way. You're just a lil guy!

14 [purple] Cassio Inerta : homestuck / trollsona - "retroll" he is baby, very sweet and well meaning but oh so very problem avoidant and low empathy mostly from being sheltered; in retroll he is canonically in-universe a self insert of myself watching the plot go down and has a made up boyfriend given to him who loves Cassio by virtue that is what the boyfriend was made for, but kinda just puts up with Cassio, a projection of how i felt and feared in some previous relationships

[[ explicitly cannon self insert huh ]] You are a suckerrr for romance. You want and want and want so badly and you feel and in every instance you are given a taste it feels unreal. it feels unearned. It feels disingenuous. But you need it so bad. You don't know shit about anything, so terrified to fail you're terrified to try. But little by little you keep trying.

15 [magenta] Carcumber : a sona based off of my friend's previously-main sona's species so my friend's main sona and mascot character was a "lavamander" though the species had other character with other elements such as ice and sound waves and species had name trope of two favorite foods combined; Carcumber's name was Carrot + Cucumber but my friend changed main sonas and has since renamed most to just a single food name hence the opening statement for the quiz, i dont remember if he had an element associated, if he did i think it was "cart" or "car" or "money" or something stupid like that, and his is a used car salesman, similar energy and pathetic-ness of spamton

[[ oh man do i gotta change his name now that's that not the naming scheme? ]] You are passionate about everything you do! Cause if you aren't you don't do them! You exaggerate yourself to the point the mask becometh you.

god ya that's a lot of em and i have more sona's than just that, but most fall similar to others or i dont use enough to care

if you read it all thanks so much i love u :D

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savebatsfromscratch · 1 year

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× Pokemon Special Animation - Curses - Parts 3 and 8 ×

[Video description: Two animations of Pokemon Adventures characters to the song "Curses" by the Crane Wives. It starts with a picture of the thumbnail, which shows Silver looking slightly worried with the word "Curses," written in all caps over him.

The first map part starts with Gold speaking the lyrics of the song, which go, "Every word I say-" On the phrase "Is kindling," the video switches to Silver, who looks worried as his hair blows in the wind. There is a low frame animation of a yellow flame, and then the next words show Gold talking to Silver with a grin on his face. Silver looks surprised. Then, with the time of the music, Silver is shown smiling, Gold and Silver smile at each other, hold hands, and the screen cuts to black.

The next part opens from the black screen on the words, "There's no cobwebs in the corners." Yellow is show in a forest, her hair waving in a strong wind. Then Ratty (her Raticate) is shown jumping as the forest glides away into a blue sky with clouds. As it exits the screen, Dody (her Dodrio) pops into the side of the screen, all of it's heads show before it moves away. By that point, ChuChu (Yellow's Pikachu), jumps onto screen, the camera pans down to her standing on a grassy hill, and as she dives away, the screen is overtaken by blackness. When this clears, (on the lyrics, "And the backyard's full of bones,") Lance is shown standing in front of a rainy sky. His hair waves in the wind. He turns to the camera and a yellow lighting bolt crosses the screen. A series of images are then shown to the beat of the music. First an image of a Dragonair looking angry, then a green hyper beam headed towards a city, then a giant green explosion, then a close up on Yellow's terrified eyes, and then a black and red drawing of two cartoon hearts. A white lighting bolt crosses the image. /end description]

Originally shared: Feb 16, 2023

Scratch link: × Parts 3 and 8 - Curses × on Scratch

(More notes under the cut.)

Instructions:

Press the green flag twice or more (for the lip sync timing) and please don't steal my animation! Part 3 will play, there is a one second wait, and then part 8 will play.

Not sure if anyone noticed, but I'm trying to get better at expression changes. It's not exactly going well, so I apologize if the rest of the animation takes a hit because of it. qwq (I'm looking at you lip sync.)

Characters in order:

Part 3: Gold (Black hair.) Silver (Red hair.)

Part 8: Yellow (Blond hair) Ratty (Raticate) Dody (Dodrio) Chuchu (Pikachu. She/her btw, the tail is on purpose.) Lance (Red hair) Lance's Dragonair (...the dragonair)

Lol, part 3 was mostly done while listening to a "The Crucible" audiobook. Now I realize how much this song could apply to that play. Thanks english class.

Sometimes the second part lags and the last frame comes after the music ends. Sorry, I can't fix it. qwq Just layer my part below the next one in the final map.

Notes and Credits:

@savebatsfromscratch (me) for the animation of course.

Pokemon Adventures for the characters.

DuskwingsDawnfire for the map.

The song is by The Crane Wives.

Scratch bitmap as always.

#my art #my animation #video #actual post #trainer silver #trainer gold #trainer yellow #trainer lance #pokespe ratty #pokespe dody #pokespe chuchu #pokemon adventures #pokemon special #pokespe #video description #Youtube

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justassorted · 1 year

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Oscar is absolutely gonna be a main muse btw

Just gotta

Actually make a page for him slsjdhfhfh

[Image description: Oscar, a little person with pale skin, a bushy beard, and long curly ginger hair, gestures excitedly as he points at a map. End ID.]

#(I haven’t been writing him much but he has been On The Brain)#(and I’ve fleshed out enough for him to feel pretty confident now that he should have plenty to work with for rp)#(less certain whether many of you will have muses you want to interact with him but tbh that’s a separate issue. 😂)#(I love him and at least want to properly share his description with y’all ahah)#ooc #writing flails #writing flails: Oscar #Oscar

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stressedjester · 2 years

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Ough pinned post/about me time:

• My name is Vincent (I am 23)

• I'm autistic, adhd, and have bpd. I'm also legally physically disabled

• trans man, my pronouns are he/him, it/its, or ze/zem

• I'm mixed Native american/white

• I don't have "age limits" for followers but if you're a minor PLEASE blacklist the NSFT tag and don't interact with any of my suggestive posts please

• I'm an inclusionist, bc not caring about things that literally don't affect you is cool actually (I'm critical about genuinely harmful identities ex - MAPs/zoos/etc)

• I call myself both bi and gay and if you hate that just block me bc I don't need to explain the nuance of my identity to strangers

• My main interests are Fallout, Plastic Man (and DC in general), The Outer Worlds, My Little Pony, Devil May Cry, JoJo's Bizarre Adventure and Blue Exorcist

DNI: pro/comshippers / radfems / gender critical / exclusionists / self proclaimed "misandrists" / discourse blogs / harry potter supporters

My other blogs:

Fallout blog - @nukacourier

Aoex blog (abandoned) - @trans-mephisto

Art archive blog - @stressedjester-art

Oc archive blog (mostly unused) - @stressedjester-ocs

Not a blog but a blocklist I've made of pr*shippers in the Blue Exorcist fandom (for fellow victims) can be found here. I update it whenever I can

Okay that's all about me for now. I block a lot btw because I hate arguing believe it or not :)

[Image description: Pinkie Pie from My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic smiling on a pink, yellow, and blue background with impact font. The text reads "I'll break your spine". /End description.]

#pinned

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araminakilla · 2 years

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Day 72: THE OFFICIAL BOOKS!

Yesterday I found out that in some web pages where they sell books online to deliver them for home, they already posted not one, not two... but four covers of different books from the Tadeo Jones 3 movie. Their descriptions are short and vague: Tad messed up, he has limited time to break the curse and save his friends and is going to travel to different places. Nothing new really, but I will give my quick opinion of the covers.

1. A book for first readers

Exactly what says on the tittle. Guess the official tittle is "The Emerald Tablet" after all. Love the Mexico setting so far. I like the use of soft and natural colors and both Tad & Belzoni look so detailed.

2. The book of the Movie

This is the book that generally has more pages and information in it. (Especially little bits of information like how certain characters felt in a scene or how many time passed between scenes) and the one who is more close to the movie adaptation. We have in the cover a worried/scared Tad and a concerned Sara. My guess is that Tad is reacting either to Mummy's shenanigans or transformation and those letters on Sara's map look like egyptian hieroglyphics, so her map is definetly from ancient Egypt.

But what are those mountains?

3. The novel

This is by far the book I'm more curious about. As far as I'm concerned the second movie didn't have a novel (a golden book yes, but that's another thing) and if they have a book for the movie already... then what is this book for? Does it have POVs? Extra scenes? Something interesting not found in the other books? Like I said, I'm really curious about this book, especially as it has a worried (anxious?) Mummy in the center of the cover while there is a strange sphinx in the background, most likely Ramona's hometomb on the inside.

Am I imagining things or those books (the ones who have more information and events of the movie) are isolating Mummy from Tad and Sara on purpose? Like he's all alone in Egypt (well, he maybe has Ramona, but she isn't a close friend like the rest of the cast) figuring things out like how to remove the curse, how to deal with his friendship with Tad or how to not succumb to the evil spell.

Also the three look worried here. I find this very interesting because like I said before... important books, so putting our protagonists like that on the main covers instead of a happy Tad tipping his hat or Mummy hugging that rubber chicken has to mean something.

It is like the books are trying to tell us "Things just got out of hand" Doctor Strange reference, sorry... couldn't help myself and characters will be tested, as if all those interviews where the crew said the plot is going to be more adult and complex are true.

This IS a matter of life or death after all, not just for Mummy & the pets, but for the whole world too. Thanks Tadeo.

And finally...

4. The Curse of the Mummy

Btw, that's the best quality of that cover I could find for the moment

So they DID kept that name! For this book at least. Better than nothing, because that name sounds awesome (better than The Emerald Tablet in my opinion)

About what it is about... I don't know. I'm lost in this one but looking at the cover it maybe has to be about the relationship of Tad and Mummy. That's all I have for the possible plot. Maybe POVs of those two or little details that couldn't get into the movie.

The background is a beautiful, well rendered city of Paris at night (Miraculous Ladybug flashbacks) and our two protagonists at the center. Here we have an ectastic Mummy holding something of gold while Tad looks embarrased of his partner's reaction.

So basically, their whole dynamic on a cover. This is them in a nutshell guys.

At least for the moment. Let's see if the status quo is finally broken in the third act as well as the ancient curse.

About the prices and when can they be adquired, here's an image for reference:

Honestly I don't know how buying books online works. Some sources said the books are going to be avariable in July 13th, more than a month before the movie coming to cinemas.

As much as I want to buy the last 3 books, my parents won't be happy with me buying these kind of books (it's... complicated, let's leave it like that) so I hope some of you guys that read this post can buy them if you can or are interested. I heard they ship books to your country of origin, so who knows.

Bonus detail from the logo. Look closer at the number 3 and you will see some glowing hieroglyphics!

Honestly, details like these are really neat and show the level of care and dedication of this movie.

#hopefully that means the second trailer of the movie is coming soon #fingers crossed is in June!#because it can be in July and I can't wait that longer #tadeo jones #tadeo jones 3 #tad the lost explorer #tad the lost explorer 3 #tad stones #sara lavroff #mummy (tadeo jones)#ramona (tadeo jones)#tadeo jones jeff #tadeo jones belzoni #tadeo jones meta #tadeo jones book #tad 3 countdown

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theharrowing · 2 years

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I got some of the question requests by means that are not in my ask box, so i am going to answer them in a post!

from @vanillacupcakefrosting:

7. Post a snippet from a wip.

Another ping on Jimin's phone is a headline from a crime-watching app. Police have uncovered yet another severed head, and this one is in a park not too far from the bar he and JayKay have agreed to meet up at. Jimin opens a tab on his computer, which displays a map, and he drops a pin on the location and studies it. There are a few warehouses and abandoned buildings in the area that the various pins seem to encircle. Jimin wonders if he is close to figuring out where the local serial killer has been doing his kills.

Not that Jimin thinks he has any authority figuring any of this out...he is merely a true crime podcaster who has become a bit too obsessed with a recent spree of murders. The idea of hunting down and catching someone who has been prolific for over a month is thrilling to Jimin. Especially if he can get to the guy before the cops do.

But all of it will have to wait. For now, Jimin has a date.

from @cutielovelyjm:

(Btw you don’t have to answer all of them, it’s a loooot 😂)

You went above any beyond, my dear, but I will do my best!!! lolol. 🥰

Two. Where do you get your fic ideas?

I have no idea. Sometimes I see an image and it inspires an idea. Sometimes I have dreams and magically remember them when I wake up. Sometimes you write amazing prompts and I spin them into gold. 😘🥰💖

Six. What’s the last line you wrote?

This question was previously asked, so here is the last thing I wrote on a different fic:

Jeongguk shrugs. “It’s too obvious. The killer is basically drawing a circle around obvious spots. When you think about it…it’s probably a trap.”

Ten. Do you work on multiple wips or stick to one fic at a time?

I work on anywhere from 2-10 wips at any given time lmao. You know how wild I am with fests. I am constantly overwhelmed and jumping around.

Eleven. Do you write scenes in order, or do you jump around?

I write everything in order.

Twelve. Do you outline your fics? If yes, how detailed are your outlines? How far do you stray from them?

Sometimes I outline, but usually they’re beats I want to make sure I hit withough much description. Every time I try to outline, I deviate, so any outlines I do make tend to be pretty loose.

Twentyone. Do you prefer writing chaptered fics or one-shots?

I prefer chaptered fics when I can create a world, and I enjoy having something for people to look forward to or binge, and really get lost in. But it’s easier to drop oneshots and move on to new ideas. So......I guess there are benefits for both!

Twentytwo. How do you come up with titles?

I stress out a lot with titles. Often I complain to friends and they help me. @blog-name-idk especially has been great at helping me come up with titles lol.

Twentyseven. What area of writing do you feel strongest in?

I feel like I am great at building tension and anxiety. I enjoy writing those atmospheres a lot.

Twentynine. What’s something about your writing that you’re proud of?

It depends on the story! Sometimes I am proud of my imagery. Sometimes it’s my characters and dialogue. Always atmosphere and feeling.

Thirtyfive. What’s your favorite fic you’ve posted?

God, I feel like the answer to this is changes every five minutes, but during this minute right now, I am really in love with Sun Seeker.

Thirtyeight. What is your most self-indulgent posted story?

Bittersweet lmao.

Fortyfour. What is your favorite genre to write?

Horror! Angst. Anything dark and stressful and scary.

Fiftysix. Are there any fics that you would change or rewrite if given the chance?

Sometimes I do go back in and tweak/edit older works, but there is nothing I would change in its entirety. I believed in whatever I put out there, at the time, so I stand by it, even if some of my older works are not as great as I think they could be with a rewrite.

Seventytwo. What’s your favorite writing compliment you’ve gotten?

When people tell me I convey fear, tension and unsettling atmospheres are my favorites. I feel like horror genres can be very difficult to nail, and it’s my favorite genre to consume, so to be told I am living up to my favorite genre is really lovely.

Seventyfive. Is there a particular fic that readers gravitated towards that you didn’t expect?

Boy Blueeeeeee. I cannot believe how popular that story got, compared to others. Like........I can believe it because I think I wrote a compelling story and made great characters, but it gets so insanely dark and people just love it. (But, as someone who consumes dark media, I get it. Maybe I shouldn’t be so surprised.)

Seventyeight. What motivates you during the writing process?

Looming deadlines.🙃 And wanting to give content to my readers because I love them.💜✨

Thank you both for asking!!!!

Ask me some fanfic related questions! 🥰💜

#vanillacupcakefrosting #cutielovelyjm #i love my moots #ask game #fanfic ask game #getting to know me

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inazuma-fulgur · 1 year

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Oh he's skrungly! What did I do to poor Matt baby

Playing with GS3 glitches again, great stuff love this game

Hey btw have I ever told you we have a great speedrunning community you should check out if you like jrpgs? Or idk games

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A photo showing Harun Channel map B3 with the big water wheel.

The player character is tilted almost 45 degrees to the left and appears flat and deformed.

He is positioned next to the bridge standing on the air below the waterwheel and next to a small waterfall coming out of the wall.

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sparxymcfly · 2 years

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SPARX LOSES THEIR MIND [a fairly long post fair warning]

Why hello everyone! Has Sparx made another purchase that they then freaked out over for a period of time and have now come to share with everyone? Yeah, precisely, keep up, come on. Me being incorrigible is not the focus today, the focus today is the box of prop replicas I bought from the official Back to the Future website and more precisely the letter inside that’s been monopolizing all the space in my brain ever since [and well, a few other things inside I’ll get to, but they’re less paradigm-shifting than this letter imo]

So let’s see what we’ve got!

So the website description [the product is here btw] lists like, everything you get in the box. Sure, yeah, totally normal. I was excited for every little thing in this box to be perfectly clear. However, what really jingled my jangles and got me curious was the bit saying “Marty’s Introduction Letter”. Now, what I thought this was going to be was some like softly-meta bit from our dear young friend Marty, probably labeled “to whomsoever finds this” and explaining his adventures. I mean, makes sense, right?

Except that’s not what it is! At all! Guess what the OPENING LINE is??

EXCITED? PERPLEXED? SURPRISED? SO WAS I.

Let’s keep reading, shall we? I’ll transcribe it to make it easier to read alongside the pictures because a) friendly to people who struggle with text in images and b) Marty’s handwriting is. It sure is. Love you, buddy.

Front Side:

“Dear Dave and Linda,

If you are reading this it’s probably because I haven’t been home in a while, but don’t worry, just because I’m not here now doesn’t mean that we won’t see each other again in the future.

I am most likely traveling back in time with Doc and we’ve had a problem that prevents me [possibly us?] from returning to the present.

I’ve always told you that time travel is so heavy and you always treat me like a madman, but if Doc and I hadn’t traveled to the past and the future on several occasions then Dad would be six feet under right now, Biff would be our stepfather, Junior and Marlene would be in the clink and you two would be living in [not sure? it could be the word ‘ruin’] and hitting the bottle. In the worst case scenario, mom and Dad wouldn’t even have fallen in love and we would have vanished from existence as if-” [continued on the next page]

Back Side:

“-someone had erased us from a photograph.

I’m not going to give you my speech again, I know you don’t believe me, but as crazy as it may sound, there are two things that Marty McFly will never be: a liar or a chicken.

What’s in this box will blow your mind. In it I keep memories of my travels to 1885, 1955, 1985, and 2015: pictures, tickets, maps, and souvenirs of the past and the future. I even keep a coin from the casino that that jerk Biff built after stealing the DeLorean from us.

Your brother in time

Marty”

Now let’s take this step by step because this is a journey and a half. Granted, I do fully understand and I know we all have to know that this box’s existence with everything it has in it kinda requires just a bit of suspension of disbelief, considering it’s highly unlikely Marty actually grabbed every little thing in it from start to finish of the trilogy. I may or may not walk through that later who’s to say. I know I’m gonna at least pick some of my favorite things in the box to talk about. But to be perfectly honest, even just taking one iota of this letter as somewhat canon-adjacent or even just one possible canon is making me lose my mind.

Let’s get going wow so THAT’S what tumblr formatting do that’s neat. LET’S DISCUSS first - Dave and Linda!

Okay so like literally first and foremost the biggest point here- Marty trying to tell his siblings about time travel. Dave and Linda! The first assumption, as far as I have seen it, has always been his parents! In fact, his dad, for the whole science fiction angle. Although, to be quite fair, most takes I’ve seen have really been George figuring it out, not quite so much Marty telling him on purpose. And then, well, y’know, Doc and Jennifer are the only other people who know. But this is just wildly interesting. When did he start trying? The wording of the letter makes it sound like he’s tried tons of times, even though they don’t believe him. How openly does he talk about it? Is it really just to the two of them? It sounds about like that, especially considering the apparent potential secrecy of this box and it being addressed to just the two of them. We can make any guesses we want about how long it took before he tried to talk to them- perhaps not long after returning home from his adventures, perhaps it took a few years, perhaps it even took decades! Because that being an option does tie into my second big point!

Using headings is making formatting easier don’t worry I promise I will maybe probably get the hang of making my posts look nicer :) probably :) Time period and Doc!

This is 2015 Marty!! But the Lone Pines, non-broken hand version, which to my knowledge this is the first time we’ve heard from him. I wonder endlessly if this version did successfully become a rockstar, but I don’t think much of anything in this letter confirms or denies it. We do know this who we’re dealing with though, or at least that it’s passed 2015, on account of when Marty is listing off all the awful things that he had to prevent via time travel, he says that “Junior and Marlene would be in the clink”, which happened on that day they traveled to in Part 2- this takes place after that day. And most most importantly, Marty and the Doc still travel through time together even when Marty is in his 40s! Which means they’re still hanging out even then :) this is very important information. Which not just this one time, but the fact that [Marty presumes, though I don’t doubt it really does] this happens a Lot, enough that Marty could open the letter with “probably stuck somewhere in time” as if they go through all the time, but this is a safeguard in case they get stuck. Granted, re: my post about the whole Marty’s mental state thing, that would call into question how long this has been going on, how often they do this, if Marty has had the opportunity to talk this out or deal with his issues in any kind of way... but I digress.

Completely separately from any knowledge or events gleaned from the comics or the game, we know that Doc does in fact visit at some point again! Which, y’know, good! Don’t leave your boy like that, Doc. This could also like potentially cue back into Doc being like super long lived re: the rejuvenation clinic thing along with WHATEVER ELSE future stuff he might encounter/pull off/use but also Doc is a time traveler and can go whenever he pleases, so actually this proves nothing. Please enjoy the mental image of Marty in his 40s with Doc in his 60s-70s with me though, they are both older but they are such so friends still. Please. It’s giving me serotonin I hope it also gives You serotonin.

Etc [aka I can’t think of any more headers and actually I’m going to just fill the last bit with random little thoughts, every paragraph is a new one this time <3]

I am so incredibly dying to hear what Marty’s “speech” is, him referring to it as “my speech again” implies that it’s more or less the same every time. Dave and Linda don’t believe him, which of course as we know [re: Doc’s Delorean handbook with the very long name I’m too pumped up to check right now] Doc specifically didn’t allow that to get out, so it makes sense. Well, that and their dad is a famous sci-fi author and as far as Dave and Linda are concerned, that’s all he’s ever been, so Marty talking about time travel probably just sounds like more of what their dad goes on about. Granted, Marty literally has a mad scientist best friend, but one, other than the time machine and various little doodads like the automatic dog feeder and the giant amp- which are in the grand scheme of things pretty mundane and believable- we don’t have proof that Doc has made any actually strange or extraordinary inventions that work for this kind of precedent to be set. And, well, on top of that they just don’t believe his “tall tale.” I would still Love to hear what it is though.

And the fact that he just TELLS THEM all the terrible things that did or almost happened! The fact that he follows this section up with the “my speech again” line means this knowledge is not a part of said speech, and y’know with the contents of the box and that fact’s presence this is probably the first time they’ll have heard it. Which like, wow, if this box convinces them [and kinda even if it doesn’t] that is a LOT.

I’m also incredibly curious where- or, heh, more accurately when- Doc and Marty have gone and gotten lost. If nothing has changed and Dave and Linda are able to still read this letter and see the contents of the box, then logically it probably isn’t the past. Or, well, it could be, and maybe they just haven’t changed anything, but c’mon now. This is Doc and Marty. They’d probably have changed something by mistake. [Or, okay, maybe not, it’s entirely possible age/time has made them wiser and more careful, buuuuut let’s call it a 50/50 chance, haha] It’s probably the future? But then, doubly again, we don’t know! “Doesn’t mean you won’t see me again in the future” sure could imply either way, though it leans future to my way of thinking. It could mean they’ll see Marty again and he’ll have come from the past the normal way, just even older than 40s now, but the wording more makes me think they’ll keep aging and find him stuck there. GRANTED this I think, most logically, means Marty knows he and Doc will eventually figure it out and get back, and as usual, they’ll set the time machine to a reasonable amount of time in the future from their departure to not seem strange. But it also could give a little hint to where they are in the future, since Marty’s siblings are both older and so if it is that they’d age and see him, it couldn’t be too terribly far in the future.

In leaving this box and note, what was Marty planning? Was it just to finally have them believe him? Was it to have somebody have this box, in case he doesn’t make it back? I’d imagine he’d have left some kind of note about what to tell Jennifer and his kids if that were the case- and maybe what to do with his other stuff, but Jen and the kids at minimum because c’mon, Marty wouldn’t leave them never knowing- so I think it’s unlikely, but it’s a possible route worth thinking about. Then of course an interesting, though admittedly far-fetched theory, which is that he might be intending that Dave and Linda somehow assist in the rescue/escape out of time of Doc and Marty! Which has little grounding past arming them with information and items seeming so Much, but it’s also very interesting to imagine Dave and Linda of all characters joining in the time travel shenanigans! It truly is kinda a shame they’re not utilized terribly much, but then, until this letter and a few more recent tangent thoughts, I hadn’t either! So who’s to say.

And as somehow, like, the finisher, despite being so mundane in comparison, I wanna point out Marty writing lowercase m for mom but uppercase D for dad. Like! He wrote a big M for his own name and their surname and Marlene, so it’s not even just how he writes them, he really did just give their dad the uppercase D the whole time and their mom got the lowercase m! I have no idea what this might mean if anything I just think it’s a funky little detail that just. Stuck out!

THAT’S IT THOSE ARE ALL MY RAMBLES ABOUT THIS LETTER

Actually I might be lying, there could be more. But this is already SO long so I’m taking mercy on you all. This letter is just. It’s making my brain EXPLODE if anybody reading this also has thoughts shout them at me just go OFF I will enjoy it greatly and maybe even continue shouting along with you.

UHHH the rest of the box I’ll discuss later! I have no idea how to end a post :)

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kintatsujo · 3 years

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LOZ AU- The Courage of Running Away PART ONE

warnings: Parental abuse, fantasy religion, fantasy religious abuse

So the original grain of this concept was actually a dream I had once but we'll get to that.

A major aspect of this idea that makes it an "AU" as opposed to "just" a "game pitch as fanfic" concept is that it has a worldmap that looks something like this:

[Image Description: A map of a continent. In the center is Gerudo Desert, ringed by mountains that extend from the bottom to top of the continent. On the west side of Gerudo Desert, from north to south, are countries labeled "Termina," "Holodrum," and "Labrynna," while on the east side are countries labeled "Hytopia," "Hyrule" and "Lorule." Hytopia is indicated to be a sky island above a territory labeled "Drablands." Hyrule and Termina are more directly east and west of one another, as the Drablands are the northernmost country of the continent and Labrynna is the southernmost country. There is an indication of another continent to the east, and off the eastern shore is a sky island labeled "Sky Temple." To the south of Labrynna is a proper island labeled "Windfish Isle." There is a legend in the upper left corner that reads "Really generalized AU map. Proportions not to be taken too seriously and most of the sky islands besides Hytopia just aren't there because it would get too busy." End Description.]

Lorule as a physical country to the south of Hyrule rather than a mirror version of Hyrule is because I am weak for dumb puns. Also in general you can describe this as "this is my AU and I do what I want."

Also the map of Hyrule itself in this AU should be considered to be heavily similar to the Breath of the Wild map because that's what I want shh. Does this mean the other countries are similar in scope despite being based on countries from earlier and smaller games? Well, yeah.

I actually tried out making this worldmap in RPGMaker btw but to get something I was happy with I'd at LEAST need a nicer worldmap tileset for MZ. Do I have the skills to make that? Yep. Have I got the time to make that? Nope.

Anyway so as noted there's actually a NUMBER of floating sky islands in this version of the setting, and its version of Link was raised here, in the sky temple monastery/commune/abbey don't look at me:

[Image description: A floating island with a round temple, some sort of pillars arranged in a circle, and a few other buildings, one of which might be a dormitory. The temple has a statue of the Triforce nested in Hylia's wings on the roof. End description.]

A couple notes here since it's the only good place: In this Hyrule there are Loftwings because I said so. There is also a Rito run mail service and there are also balloon-based airships. Again, because I said so. The Rito are the main people who run supplies to the Sky Temple, but there's also a number of hylians with bonded Loftwings living there. The Loftwings are a little less mysterious in that they clearly roost nearby riders they've bonded with; note the large archways kind of indicated on the side of the dorm building. Link, at this point in the story, does not have a Loftwing, which is important for reasons that will become clear by the end of this post. Also, I'm not sure how obvious it is but I do intend that there's a cucoo/chicken coop set up near the dorm; this is for the eggs but the monk or whatever in charge of them is definitely a crazy bird person and probably also keeps messenger pigeons. There would also be a garden somewhere and as one can possibly tell there's a graveyard. Basically this Sky Temple is what I thought Skyloft was going to be a little more like until I found out it was literally a Boarding School Town. Anyway.

The thing is that this Link was discovered to be the Hero of the age sometime in his infancy.

And this is the person who discovered him:

[Image description: On one half of the page is an establishing shot of a hylian man in blue and white (light gray) robes and a hat, with long hair in a braid and graying at the temples. He's approximately middle aged by the lines in his face, tall and slender and moderately attractive. He is wearing heavy gold diamond shaped earrings to match the symbols of Hylia and the Triforce on his clothing. He is frowning, and he is labeled "Astramorus." On the other half of the page are a series of comic panels: In the first, a young Link is hiding from a Rito behind Astramorus's cloak. Astramorus asks, apparently fondly, "Come now boy, where's your courage?" while the Rito sheepishly assures him "Th-that's quite all right, Lordship." In the second panel, a very small Link dressed in the Hero of Hylia's traditional green outfit is wiping his eyes while holding a sword too large for him. There is blood on Link's clothes. Astramorus, standing so that only the hem of his robes are in shot, asks "Come now boy, where's your courage?" And in the last panel, lit as though by fire, Astramorus now has a much older Link by the back of the neck in a controlling manner, once again asking, "Come now boy, where's your COURAGE?" End description.]

By the way the manner in which Astramorus is holding the back of Link's neck in the final panel is a sneaky thing my dad used to pull sometimes; basically if you squeeze just hard enough to hurt nobody but the person you're doing it to can actually tell so you can even do it in public without people necessarily noticing. It took me ages to go "wait that was actually really fucked up that he used to do that." Shoulder touch is good, neck touch bad.

A note on Astramorus's costume: It's basically an evil version of the costume worn by the priestly guy from the Sanctuary in alttp. Astramorus himself, well, I had the idea for him well before Age of Calamity came out but yes he is basically named after Aster, so you can guess that he's more than just a terrible father.

Astramorus has been training Link since he could lift his sword, including trials he should have been too small for and acquiring things for him to fight-- and kill. Link isn't allowed to speak to anyone unless asked questions or told to by Astramorus, not even the other members of the monastery (although perhaps many of the people there have taken their own vows of silence.)

And he's not allowed to have opinions, and he's not allowed to back down in a fight or say that he's too tired to keep training, and this has been going on since Link was six. Astramorus tells him this is the ideal. That never backing down and never stopping is what courage means and what being the hero means. That starting from a young age is only proof of the hero's purity of heart.

And when Link is nearing seventeen, Astramorus tells him that he's going to present him to the royal family of Hyrule, and that at last the HARD part will truly begin. (Keeping in mind that he was putting a six year old through trials MEANT for a seventeen year old.) And Link breaks:

[Image Description: A comic. Link is putting together a paraglider not dissimilar to the one from BotW.

He narrates: Tomorrow we're supposed to set out so that I can meet the king of Hyrule. Which means that this is my last chance to run away.

Link grinds his classic hat into the ground with one boot, and leaves his sword stabbed into the earth behind him. He leaps off the sky island and toward the sun on the horizon.

Link narrates: I don't care if this is cowardly anymore.

End description.]

And THAT one page is what the dream that started the concept was about; some people might remember me talking about it as long as three years ago and it's just been stuck in my head ever since! (Also: I love the idea of there being a Link who starts out wearing the classic outfit and THEN switches to other costumes.)

This is obviously not the end of this AU, lol, stay tuned for where Link finally crash lands (spoiler: He makes it pretty far and you might be able to guess from the map >:3c)

#AU August

#LoZ AU: The Courage of Running Away

Bonus:

[Image description: A headshot flat color sketch of this Link, who has short fluffy light blonde hair and green eyes. He is yelling, with tears in his eyes: "I am NEVER wearing that STUPID hat again!" End description!]

#Loz au: the courage of running away #au august #my art #Loz #Loz au #legend of zelda

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murumokirby360 · 3 years

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My 8bitdo SN30 Pro+ Review w/ my Panasonic Eneloop AA Batteries - Part 18 (Recorded Video and Photos) [Oct 18, 2021]

Hi, here’s Part 18 of my 8bitdo SN30 Pro+ Gamepad w/ my Panasonic Eneloop AA Batteries.🎮🔋🔋

Okay, so do you remember when I said that there's one device that I want to try out and I'll keep as a secret? Well, here it is.

So in today's part, I'm testing out my legit Eneloop AA batteries through my recent (and malfunction) 8bitdo gamepad and see will it work.🎮🔋

But before that, how's my 8bitdo gamepad going?

Ans: Well, despite I put parentheses, my recent 8bitdo gamepad is still sick after my Macros map test gone wrong.🤒 At first glance when I turn on my gamepad after a rest for hours it works just fine. But while I was in the middle of playing online the malfunction problem still effects on my gamepad. Usually when I pressed the select button my entire control freezes, including two analog sticks. So, I have to leave my online game and testing buttons one more time at the gamepad-tester website. Weirdly enough, when I press the heart button all of the buttons and analogs are now functional as usual. Well...Sometimes. But bottom-line, my recent 8bitdo gamepad is still sick. I'm having a hard time playing online with my malfunction controller; so much so, that I need to buy another one. 😔 Or in this case, a better one than the successor. So yeah, that's my update about my malfunction 8bitdo gamepad.

If you didn't saw my 8bitdo SN30Pro+ gamepad's malfunction problem, then please [CLICK ME!].

Alright, let's move on to my recent part.

*But before that, I want YOU… Yes, you, which you’re reading my description. I want you to watch my recorded video first 📹📲 (as an observation) before you read the rest of my reaction experience. Hope you’re watching…

So without further ado, let’s get started:

My experience:

• As you saw in my recorded video I removed the battery pack and replaced it with my two legit Eneloop AA batteries. So from the looks of these batteries, they're quite fit and snug well. This is something that you've already seen on your Xbox wireless controllers, when the battery pack is not working you could always use two AA batteries. Anyway, I tested at the gamepad-tester website for response buttons with my AA batteries equipped and it seems just fine as before. (Although my 8bitdo gamepad itself is still not okay.) Unlike my 8bitdo's battery pack included from my recent gamepad, the Eneloop batteries deliver a long-lasting power until it needs to recharge, despite the rechargeable act. I'm not sure how long will it takes for my 8bitdo gamepad's gameplay with my Eneloop batteries equipped but as long as forever then there'll be (a) long haul gameplay for me.

BTW: Did you see the extra light from that first part? That's my USB led ring light w/ stand. Yup, I've purchased that item without doing a reviewing it because I need it for some shed light at the front.

1st & 2nd Image(s):↓

• Here's what it looks like when I equip my Eneloop AA batteries onto my 8bitdo gamepad. My paper dolls say that they look quite matched. Mmm... I guess so. 🙂

Overall:

• This is a perfect match between my 8bitdo gamepad and my legit Eneloop AA batteries. I mean, my included battery pack is okay, about "20 play hours with 4 hour charging time" according to their official website, but replaced with my AA Eneloop batteries are much longer playtime.🕛⬆️🔋

• Unfortunately, as I already mentioned before, my recent 8bitdo gamepad had a serious malfunction problem from my stupidity test. Well... I wouldn't say "stupidity" but you get the point. 😟*Sigh* 😔 But hey since I have my backup bucks on my wallet I could earn a little more until I get my hands on the new "8bitdo Pro 2" gamepad. And once I get the Pro 2 gamepad then I'll be doing a final part for my 8bitdo SN30 Pro gamepad and that is the mobile phone connectivity with my Honor 8C smartphone.🎮📲

Well, that's all for now. And If you want to see my previous related 8bitdo item(s), then I’ll provide some links down below:↓

My 8bitdo USB Wireless Adapter ‘PS Classic Edition’:

• Opening parcel [Aug 27, 2020]

• Part 1 [Aug 28, 2020]

• Part 2 [Aug 28, 2020]

• Part 3 (Recorded video) [Aug 28, 2020]

• Part 4 (Recorded Video) [Aug 28, 2020]

• Part 5 (Recorded Video) [Aug 28, 2020]

• Part 6 (Recorded Video) [Oct 20, 2020]

• Part 7 (Recorded Video) [Oct 28, 2020]

• Part 8 (Recorded Video) [Nov 14, 2020]

• Part 9 (Recorded Video) [Nov 14, 2020]

• Part 10 [Final] (Recorded Video) [Nov 16, 2020]

• Extra Part / Final Plus [Nov 25, 2020]

My 8bitdo SN30 Pro+ gamepad (ongoing):

• Unopened parcel [Nov 3, 2020]

• Opening parcel (Recorded Video) [Nov 3, 2020]

• Part 1 [Nov 19, 2020]

• Part 1.5 [Nov 19, 2020]

• Part 2 [Nov 27, 2020]

• Part 2.5 [Nov 27, 2020]

• Part 3 [Dec 1, 2020]

• Part 4 [Dec 3, 2020]

• Part 5 [Dec 8,2020]

• Part 6 [Dec 11,2020]

• Part 7 [Dec 20, 2020]

• Part 8 [Jan 19, 2021]

• Part 9 [Mar 27, 2021]

• Part 10 [Mar 27, 2021]

• Part 10.5 [Mar 27, 2021]

• Part 11 (w/ 8bitdo’s Ultimate Software ver. 2.0) [May 11, 2021]

• Part 12 [Jun 3, 2021]

• Part 12.5 [Jun 3, 2021]

• Part 13 [Jul 31, 2021]

• Part 14 [Aug 17, 2021]

• Part 15 (Macros mapping - 1st attempt) [Oct 9, 2021]

• Part 16 (Macros mapping - 2nd attempt) [Oct 9, 2021]

• Part 17 (Serious problem after testing) [Oct 10, 2021]

Tagged: @bryan360, @lordromulus90, @carmenramcat, @neutralized-l

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ghyllclan · 2 years

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ok bit of a vent but also i feel like im going insane and its just me and my friends that are noticing this??

image text/description in readmore bc my handwriting is not great along w a bit of a rant i guess

Panel 1: "Oh boy, let's go look for new warriors maps!"

Panel 2: Google search, the results are

"Ashfur map" Description is "New map showing how Ashfur was not evil but in love!!!" The thumbnail is a closeup of Ashfur's face with heart eyes.

"(6/9) Ashfur map AU" Description is "(The AU is that it's literally the same)" Thumbnail is Ashfur smiling in front of fire.

"Literally just the fire scene map" Description is "Map about how absessive and evil Ashfur was, even in the first arc!!!" Thumbnail is Ashfur making a kissing face at Squirrelflight, who just looks annoyed.

"Ashfur and Squirrelflight map" The rest of the result is cut off by the bottom of the screen.

Panel 3: "Why."

This isn't directed at anyone specifically btw. You can make whatever map you want, I can't judge you!! And it of course depends on the artist if they want to join or not.

I'm not even super active in the MAP community, we've just been noticing a lot of recent MAPs/parts being about Ashfur and I'm honestly starting to wonder,,,, what is even left to do with his story?

Again, not meaning to start drama. Just,,,,,, why ashfur

#*#ooc #vent #warrior cats #warriors #animation map #ashfur

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kyidyl · 3 years

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Aphantasia anon: So my recognition of smell isn’t impacted. If I come across an apple I am able to identify the scent as apple. But I don’t make association with smell. I know which perfume my mom uses because my brain has stored the fact that mom wears X perfume but if I come across a person wearing the same perfume my mind doesn’t make the connection to mom. There’s also no remembrance of memories where my mom is wearing her perfume. A smell is just a smell for me. Same for the tastes. It’s

Ok sorry I got sucked into Tiktok, lol.

That thing about the smell is still super interesting for me. Like clearly your brain identifies the smells and whatnot but you're also obviously forming long term memory in a really unique way. I'm not well-versed in neurology enough to be able to go into detail there but scent is often one of the things most strongly connected to memory, but yours doesn't connect like that. Your whole experience is so wildly different and it's very cool. I bet you have a lot less of a problem really enjoying the moment in front of you. I have ADHD so like I do a lot of daydreaming and whatnot, or zoning out, and sometimes it gets in the way of me actually engaging with what's in front of me. I'm always thinking of something else and I'm literally incapable of simply enjoying what's in front of me without hyperfocusing. Do you have autism or ADHD? BC now I wonder if it's possible for someone with aphantasia to have that kind of neurodivergence considering how often vividly imagining things while zoning out is reported as an experience we have. Do you zone out/daydream? If you do, what's the quality of it? Is it basically just like talking to yourself in your head?

If your head voice is bland and muffled (mine is muffled too. It has a weird like...fuzzy? Quality to it. Like it's far away.), I can see why long descriptions of things would get tedious for you. That's a very quick trip to sleeping....wait, do you dream??? I'm assuming you do cause everyone seems to. Do you remember it when you wake up? What are the memories like? Also re:reading, do you have trouble with metaphor or simile? If so I imagine English classes (if you're American...for all I know this is your second language.) must have been AWFUL.

Ye gods school must have been (or must be) really difficult for you. Do you think that there was something that teachers could have done/should do to make things easier for you? If you're trying to do something like geometry does it help to draw it out on a piece of paper...like maybe an external kind of visualization? And do things like google maps help you when you're navigating, or not so much? If having things in a place is helpful to you, I bet your house is pretty orderly. No idea what that's like, lol.

Hahahahha I've seen that post, too. That was also when I learned about aphantasia, and I think it was really interesting then, too. It's so hard for me to understand what it must be like to just no visualize because my mind like...it's almost like a physical space. So to me when someone says no visualization I picture a blank space. Like a TV that's off. Like closing your eyes. But I once saw someone describe their blindness by saying "what do you see out of your elbow?" well, nothing. You don't see darkness you don't perceive a sense of space or anything out of your elbow. Is it like that? Or is it like a TV that's turned off? Like a space for visualization that just doesn't turn on, or no? Like it's so hard to describe but my mind feels like a whole other place. Like...the inside of a Tardis. So when I try to imagine aphantasia my brain just supplies like this idea of a big, empty room with a very important voice in the room. But I'm guessing that it's more like you just don't have the room at all....I hope that doesn't come across as rude. It's 2am so I'm probably not being as articulate as I might otherwise be. I'm not trying to insinuate that you're empty-headed, just describing the image that my brain spits up for me.

That description of how your memories work is really cool. I'd love to read a book by someone with aphantasia just to see the differences and see how you guys write and what you emphasize. That sensory thing just is still blowing my mind. Oh man...I bet your acculturation (assimilation of your first culture.) process was totally different. Does the lack of visualization make it harder for you to interpret facial expressions? Like maybe you don't remember which expressions mean which thing bc you can't see them in your head? BTW please don't feel like you need to answer a question if it's accidentally too invasive. It's 100% ok to just be like "yeah not comfy with that".

Ok so I'm going to bed now, but go ahead and answer whenever you feel like it. I'll reply tomorrow. :)

#synesthesia conversation

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sabrinajennings · 4 years

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A Word About Character Development: Appearances

So this is a super hot button topic in which opinions are widely varied, and I'm actually kinda afraid to put my thoughts out there. So definitely don't think this post is meant to be dogmatic (btw NONE of my posts are meant to be dogmatic). I actually struggle really badly with writing characters physical appearances, so most of my opinion here comes as a reader.

1. Ditch the numbers: The only time I would ever describe someone by their height and weight would be to the police, and even then it would be their height and clothes size. I would never ever describe one of my friends to another using their size as a description and I hope they wouldn't describe me that way either. Yet for some reason I read descriptions like "She's 5'11", 125lbs" (btw that's probably an unhealthy weight for someone that tall). Reading a description from a friend (or love interest) that way sounds unrealistic.

It doesn't come off any better in the mirror either. How often do you stand before a full length mirror and think about your appearance in numbers?

Exceptions? If your character is especially tall or short their actual height may become relevant (I have an adult MC who is 4'11" and I have mentioned it.) otherwise words like tallish or on the petite side or average all work fine.

2. Instead try proportions: If you must describe your character's body (and you may find you can forgo such a description - l have found many of my favorite authors do) try proportions.

Examples:

'... Her skirt swirled around her ankles in the summer breeze; the vertical stripes drawing attention to her long legs.' (so it's not a great description - told you I struggle--but you get the idea and it is better, IMO, than 5'11", 125)

or "The western cut of the shirt accentuated his broad shoulders, drawing taut across them as he reached up to adjust his bolo tie."

3. Readers don't need full descriptions on page (or chapter, or even part) 1: I think this is a misconception that leads to the numbers and mirror descriptions. Authors seem to feel the reader needs to 'see' the character from the minute they are introduced when in reality what the character is doing is more interesting than what they look like. Plus readers tend to have pretty vivid imaginations so trust me, they aren't going to picture the character as a crash test dummy until you fill them in. If that's what your worried about, that the reader will picture your character differently than you do- well, I hate to say it, but you *might* have to loosen up on that idea a bit. I know you've spent hours plotting every contour of their face and memorized their scars and/or tattoos, and the way the sunlight glints off that one part of their hair, and the idea of anyone seeing them another way is anathema. But it'll be okay. If you work in some descriptive details here and there later the reader will adjust their idea gradually until it matches yours and it will be much more effective than an info dump on page 3.

4. (most) Readers aren't police sketch artists: Maybe I'm just really bad with art (okay no maybe- I'm hopeless at art) but when I read a description like: 'She had a heart shaped face with high cheekbones, a button nose, and hooded brown eyes framed by hundreds of tiny dredlocks...' I have no idea what this character looks like except for eye color and hair. This description may be perfectly clear to those of you who are artists, but I'm going to have to go to goolge images to try and figure it out. (actually I'm probably just going to imagine what I think they might look like my own way and go on). Once again I would never describe my friends like I was talking to the police.

5. Let them Smile: or frown actually. If you want to talk about their face tell me if their cheeks push their lower lids into a squint when they smile or how much their eyebrows close the upper lids when they frown. Describe dimples and scars. Let me know about nervous habits (do they bite their lip or tongue? Cross their eyes in frustration? Can they raise one eyebrow? (and which one or both independently)). These little things provide (to me at least) a much fuller picture than a description of shapes, and they make the character much more 3-dimensional.

6. Please not a clothes-horse: Wedding? Prom? Halloween? Actual superhero? Model actually during a fashion show? Okay then we probably need to know exactly what the character is wearing. Otherwise a vague (or nonexistent) description of their clothing will suffice. In a contemporary story this slows the pace too much, and in a historical work is slows the pace AND feels like you're trying to show off your research. Plus it makes the POV character feel a bit shallow to me if they are always talking about clothes. Tell me they have on jeans and a T-shirt (or their pj's, Or that they changed into their riding habit) and I'm good to go.

Exception: in addition to the above exceptions, if the characters clothing choices are a noted quirk (I have a character who basically collects pajamas), you should mention them, but a brief description will still get the point across. (example: the character I referred to previously will always be wearing a different pair of pajamas in a night scene, but I still don't go overboard with detail ('red plaid flannel', 'princess camo', 'mickey mouse'). The words on a graphic tee are another great example or a collection of eclectic color sneakers. If the outfit requires a multi-sentence description it needs to be a special outfit.

7. Furniture: Furniture descriptions are pretty rare, but I'm still going to mention it quickly. Basically everything I just said about clothes applies to home furnishings too. If you describe the trash can, it needs to be a really special trash can.

8. Building layout: Ooh this is a tough one. I struggle with this as a writer because I literally use like 2 basic blueprints in my head so if I'm not careful everyone's house comes out the same. Obviously you don't want that, but that's probably a rare problem. More commonly I see way too much detail and I get confused. Maps? They are a staple of certain sub genres but I'd rather not see them elsewhere. I would say most scenes are not dependent on the layout of the building so you can probably leave off the turn by turn tour. Action sequences seem most likely to require specific detail about the setup, and 1 method is to have 2 characters planning an attack which will involve going over the description of the building together. If that doesn't work you can have a single character assess the place in their head right before the information becomes relevant. A verbal blueprint in chapter 1 is probably going to be forgotten by the time we get to a fight scene in chapter 15.

But don't forget your characters are human too. (unless they aren't of course). So they might not remember the layout of a multi story building perfectly and realize only after they have made a mistake (oops we were having a major brawl over top of the jewelry store that has motion sensitive alarms and now the cops are here).

Personally I try not to describe any unnecessary rooms - even their location. If you tell me we are at a 3 story mansion, I will assume about 30 rooms even if you only describe 2. If you try to tell me where all 30 rooms are I will probably skip the description and review it if it becomes relevant.

Yikes that was a long post! Hope this helps someone!

#writer #writing #writers #words #descripcion #authors #author #creativity #creative #character development #character design #writing advice

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