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marsmarvel02 · 2 months

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"What Manny Can't Fix" Review: Chapter 13

Welcome back and welcome again to my review of "What Manny Can't Fix", a Handy Manny fanfic that -do I even need to say it?- is not very good.

In the last chapter, Turner got attacked by a bat again and then spent some time dinking around and meeting Manny's siblings. This time, Turner... dinks around with Manny. Because he hasn't done enough of that yet!

(As always, if you'd like to start this review series from the beginning, Chapter 1 is here.)

Chapter 13

Next week, Turner didn’t even bother stopping by the bakery. Instead he headed right away to Manny’s Abuelito’s house.

I can see no way this could possibly go wrong!

He didn’t hear Lola or Reuben in the backyard, but he was sure Manny was there. Turner leapt into the backyard.

“Hey Turner!” Manny said, looking up from the block tower he was working on. “Wanna help me?”

“Help? With what?” Turner asked, hopping over.

Manny gestured to the tower. “I’m trying to make it really high!”

Turner examined the base of the tower. “Why do you have so many blocks here?”

“Because the bottom has to be the longest or the tower will fall over.” Manny explained. “Each layer has a few less blocks than the other layer, that way it’ll be balanced!”-

That’s not a “tower”, that’s a pyramid.

You can make a tower with just a single block on each level; just make sure that all their centers of masses are lined up and there’s no strong lateral forces (read: wind) that might make it topple over.

Unless all your blocks are different shapes. Then you might have to get a bit… creative.

-He picked up something sitting beside him. “Abuelito let me borrow his level to make sure it’s perfect!”

How… would a level… help here.

“Wow kid, you really are prepared.” Turner said.

Manny nodded as he started putting more blocks onto the tower.

“I wanna fix stuff when I’m grown up.” Manny said, picking up another block. “So I gotta practice with tools.”

Turner went over and started handing blocks over to Manny.

Just here to say that I’m dubbing the tools’ ability to hold stuff despite not having hands “toolikinesis”.

“And when I’m older, Abuelito said I can get my own tools!” Manny said, excitedly. He looked down at Turner and smiled. “I hope I can get a screwdriver as great as you one day!”

Turner was taken a bit back by this. As great as me? He stumbled backwards and accidentally bumped into the block tower, sending it crashing to the ground.

Gee, is it possible for something mildly unsteady to exist in any work of fiction for more than a few seconds without being knocked over?

“Oh no!” Manny cried out.

“Oh uh...sorry kid…” Turner said, feeling bad.

“It’s okay, Turner.” Manny sighed, picking up the blocks.

“Why don’t I help you rebuild it?” He suggested.

Manny smiled again. “Gracias Turner!”

Turner went over and gathered all the scattered blocks into a pile. Manny grabbed some of the blocks and restarted the base. “Maybe I shouldn’t make it so big this time.”

“Yeah, that’s probably for the best.” Turner said.

Manny made the base smaller and stacked the blocks up one by one, with help from Turner.

“It’s perfect!” Manny said, taking a step back to look at it.

Turner smiled gently. “Yeah, it looks great, kid!”

“Now it just needs one more thing…” Manny said. He picked off a small flag and placed it on top of the tower. “There!”

And the flag stays upright how? Does it have a base attached to the pole, or did he somehow wedge it between two blocks?

Describe things, author, describe things!

“Well that was fun kid, but uh I really need to be heading off…” Turner said.

“Oh okay.” Manny frowned. “....Turner wait!”

“Yeah?” He said, turning back around.

“Abuelito’s cucumbers are ripe! Do you want one?” Manny asked.

I can’t believe I almost forgot why I came here.

I can.

“Oh yeah, thanks kid.” Turner said.

Manny got a bag and wrapped one up for him. “Here you go!”

“Thanks.” Turner said, before he started hopping away.

That was a close one...I don’t think Teeth would be too happy if I came back with nothing.

No, it’s suspicious if you never have a day when the “dumpster” is empty.

“Hey! I stopped by the community garden again!” Turner said, before Swift could say anything.

“Oh what did you get?” Twist asked as she leaped over. “Oh! A pepino! I love cucumbers!”

“Yep nice and fresh from the garden.” Turner said.

You’re missing a comma there…

Teeth went over to examine the produce. “Another good find there!”

“Thank you.” Turner beamed proudly.

“I’ll go put it behind one of the trash cans. It’s shady enough that it will stay as cool as a….well...cucumber…” Twist laughed as she dragged the bag over.

Now, I know that, what with me having just typed the word “toolikinesis”, this is kind of the pot calling the kettle black, but that joke is bad.

Swift still felt unsure about Turner’s story.

Maybe he’s been getting these from the community garden the whole time….Then why lie?

Swift eyed him for a second before deciding it let it go. She instead showed the few pieces of bread she’d found at the park.

“I had to scare some pigeons off to get it.” She explained.

Okay, now that joke is actually kinda funny.

“And you did a great job by the looks of it!” Teeth said, kissing her cheek gently.

She blushed and bit and pulled back. Her gaze went back over to Turner as she put the bread behind the trash can.

I’m watching you screwdriver….

You stole one of my commas…

Wow, that was a short one.

I guess that disproves my theory about Manny’s presence causing chapters to extend to absurd lengths…

(Despite this, the next chapter is still absurdly long.)

#marsmarvel02 does a review #review #fanfiction review #bad fanfic review #handy manny #what manny can't fix review

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jayteacups · 9 months

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Fanfic readers seem to forget that commenting unsolicited ‘advice’ or ‘con crit’ (which quite often isn’t even constructive it’s usually just a nasty hate comment) or backhanded compliments or ranking fics etc etc is not the same as commenting those things about a published book. And I’m tired of people thinking that it’s the same thing.

Fanfic writers don’t make money off of their fics, so they don’t owe readers anything. It’s purely a passion project, and leaving a hate comment is pointless and wasteful because it cost you nothing to read it in the first place. Fanfiction is free, and it costs you nothing to click the ‘back’ button if you don’t like what you’re reading.

Published authors do make a living off of their writing, so they have to write something that will sell. This is why tradpub has a rigorous editing process, this is why beta and sensitivity readers are absolutely essential. Constructive advice and criticism whilst the book is being worked on is absolutely needed to make the book worth a reader’s time and money. And after the book is published, it will be reviewed. It will get good reviews and it will get bad reviews, because reviews are by readers for readers, to let potential readers figure out whether or not that book is something they’d enjoy, and therefore they can make an informed decision whether it is worth their time and money. Published authors do owe their readers quality work because they’re profiting off of their reader’s interest and enjoyment in their work.

Leaving a hate comment on a fanfic is not the same. People don’t pay to read fics, because it’s not an industry. It costs you nothing to click on an AO3 link, so the writer doesn’t owe you shit. Fics are tagged (or at least they should be), so you should be able to tell whether or not it’s worth giving it a read. And if it’s not, simply click out, and block if you need to. Write your own damn fic if none of the existing ones satisfy you. Leaving a hate comment won’t help you, and unnecessarily hurts the author’s feelings when fanfic is about fun and enjoyment and self indulgence. It costs you nothing to not be a dickhead.

#i’m so tired of seeing this surge of hate comments and unsolicited criticism #people seem to think it’s the same as leaving a bad review about a published book. no it’s not #published books are at the end of the day PRODUCTS so that’s why reviews and bad comments are quite standard #fanfic is not a product nobody is profiting #fanfiction #tw discourse

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itsgrimeytime · 1 day

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absolutely love your dedication to rick being Down Bad™️ in every fic…like YEAH EXACTLY

I started bc it felt right but seeing TOWL??? (Or the clips I've seen anyway.)

Like that man is down BAD.

Asks her to leave but like not far enough for him to not reach her???? "You need to leave" but like 90% of the time they're kissing like he physically cannot help it.

like girl... be real

I will continue this interpretation 💅

#twd towl #grimey talks #its griming time #like that man is down bad #no matter what fr #anyway #fanfic reviews #towl spoilers

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allgremlinart · 2 months

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and yah Zuko fights back during the Agni Kai in this one but idk. they kinda pull it off.

#its giving fanfic but its not giving BAD fanfic. <- my official IMDB review #natla spoilers #I've watched all but the last 2 eps cus I wanna watch those when Im not sleep deprived #but I DID sneak a peak at Amber Midthunder as Yue because I had to and. 🥹 POOKIE....

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xhanisai · 10 months

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hey lads if you’re not gonna comment on a fic you enjoyed, at least leave a kudos man

#delete later #on like half of the stories i've written on ao3 or more #i don't even get 10% of the viewers leaving kudos on my work and that's just kinda tiring man #we've come so far from the fanfiction.net days where writers solely thrived on comments and private messages to KNOW if their work is well #received by the online people #now you can just press a BUTTON to know that you enjoyed a story and it only takes like half a second!#there are so many people online who are constantly BEGGING everyone to PLEASE comment or review or let them know somehow that you've enjoyed #their work because we get so little feedback often and it is demotivating af #but if you're not gonna comment AT least leave a kudos rather than staying silent and consuming the stories like it's nothing #one thing i loved in the beginning of the ml fandom was how interactive everyone was with fanfics and how it had such a positive status #people were happily reblogging and leaving kudos and commenting LOADS back then #now???? it's literally SILENCE #back when my writing was worse prepandemic i easily got hundreds of kudos in a few days #but now i'm struggling to reach even 200 kudos in three months on my newer oneshots #engagement rate is soooooo bad now and it's demotivating af #i think this is why i prefer to write and send drabbles on discord because people there do respond and react to my works and it gives me the #push to keep going

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leojfitz · 3 months

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it's wednesday and i made a different banner for this because i better put that photoshop subscription to good use

thank you to my dear val for the tag @hgejfmw-hgejhsf 🥰

here are some tweets from part 2 of to be so lost in this radiant wilderness which i will post sometime this weekend

@ acdsquad ALEX IS GOING TO BE AT THE PRADA SHOW IN TWO DAYS I AM DYING @ nat270 @ acdsquad can’t believe he’s going to be in my country bUT I CAN’T BE IN MILAN @ acdsquad @ nat270 get your ass on the first train girl @ alexscurls_ ACD AT THE PRADA SHOW THIS IS NOT A DRILL HE HAS PROBABLY ALREADY LANDED IN MILAN GO FIND HIM @ nat270 @ alexcurls_ do not encourage stalking pls @ wildheartss alex just landed in milan and he’s already in the gym sharing thirst traps the man does everything in his power to kill us @ alexseyelashes @ wildheartss i hope he never opens the dms i send him i can’t control myself when i see thOSE SWEATY BICEPS

usual no pressure tag @songliili @inexplicablymine @user-anakin @firenati0n @anincompletelist @gayrootvegetable @affectionatelyrs @happiness-of-the-pursuit @matherines @cactusdragon517

#rwrb #marta writes #red white and royal blue #rwrb fanfic #fic: to be so lost in this radiant wilderness #also known as bad movie reviews au

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sonwabile-reads · 30 days

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To people who leave mean comments on people's fics.... Why?

I'll never understand why someone will go out of their way to tell a writer that they hated they're work and wished they'd stopped reading it.

Like okay, then why didn't you. And then on top of that whyd you continue your awfulness by continuing to comment. You could've just shut up and ate your salad.

Worse, worse is when they review as a guest. Like no, no, you have the gumption to comment that shit, do it in public where we can see you asshole I AM ABOUT TO JUMP THROUGH THE SCREEN AND FIGHT YOU MF DON'T PLAY WITH ME!

#fanfics #fanfiction #ao3 #fanfiction.net #archive of our own #writers #reviews #reviewers #can y'all be kinder mayhap #writers have deleted whole stories because some of y'all just can't shut y'alls damn mouths #“I hate this fic”/“I wish I stopped reading in chapter 4”/“this fic is so bad”#okay and?#it's not for you then; humbly and full offensively fuck off then 🤷🏾#YOU DO NOT NEED TO INTERACT WITH SOMETHING IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT!

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comehellorhighwatertheywillwrite · 1 year

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i immediately thought of this

If a fic I was reading had this note, I’d be too emotional about it to be able to concentrate on anything happening in the chapter

#imagine if someone left this chapter a bad review like god #death tw #come hell or high water they will write #the devil works hard but fic writers work harder #archive of our own #fanfiction #ao3 notes #fanfic #writing #ao3 #submission #fanfiction.net

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lazinesswrites · 4 months

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✨Fic Writing Review 2023✨

I saw the lovely @whimsicalmeerkat do this recently, and they did the 'if you wanna do this you're tagged' thing, so! Here we go! On Jan 1st, because I haven't exactly had the time to sit down and do something like this in the last few days 😅

Words

56,557 words posted on AO3

27 works posted or updated on AO3

Fandoms & Ships Represented:

Shadowhunters (2x Malec)

Star Wars: The Bad Batch (19x Platonic Batch, 1x pre-relationship Crosshair x Captain Rex, 1x Crosshair & Commander Mayday)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars (4x Obi-Wan Kenobi x Commander Cody, 1x gen)

The Shadowhunter Chronicles (1x gen)

Top Fics by Kudos

"I wouldn't do that if I were you" + Loth-Cat (SW:TCW, CodyWan, accidental Loth-Cat acquisition, Loth-Cat shenaningans)

Home In Your Arms (SW:TBB, Cross finds and rejoins the Batch, gets some much-needed sleep and hugs)

Won't you take me home ('cause lately I've been losing on my own) (SW:TBB, The Outpost canon divergence, Mayday lives, Crosshair - and Mayday - come home)

Labor of love is ours to endure (SW:TBB, Kamino Lost canon divergence, formerly known as 'The Power of Hugs', Cross rejoins the Batch)

Datawork and Drinks (SW:TCW, pre-CodyWan, Obi-Wan makes caf for Cody, lots of pining, based on this amazing comic by starwarjotta)

My Fandom Fic Events in 2023

I participated in a bunch of different -tober events in 2023, though there's still 'only' 15 works in the series I made on Ao3 for them. Links for the events here on tumblr, and their Ao3 collections when applicable:

Fictober (Ao3 collection Fictober23)

Angstober (A03 collection Angstober2023)

OC-tober

StarWarsTober

Malectober (Ao3 collection Malectober2023)

I technically also participated in Comfortember, though I haven't put the one fic I've posted for it in the Ao3 collection, so. I do have another fic mostly-written for one of these prompts, though it's not quite ready for posting yet.

Upcoming 2024 Events & Projects

I... haven't exactly planned anything yet. There's a few things I'm considering though, like this Cody-day bingo, or this Waxer*Boil Month. Various month-events, like fictober, comfortember etc. And of course I still plan on doing Kedreeva's WIP Wednesday Ask Game as many Wednesdays as I can, and maybe other weekly things like that.

Rules & Tags

Not sure there really are any rules to this, you can be as thorough or brief as you want. I'm also not gonna tag anyone specifically, but if you see this and want to do it too - you're tagged!

#year in review #fic writing review 2023 #fanfic #ao3 #star wars: The Bad Batch #Star Wars: The Clone Wars #Shadowhunters

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furiosophie · 1 year

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#starting the new year with some 2022 art and fanfic summaries #a creative review of the star wars brainrot if u will #art summary 2022 #i don't even know what else to tag this with #honestly probably thranto #bc that is where the bulk of the brainrot went 💀#soph arts #soph writes #i made that fanfic template myself and it looks bad but if u still want it it's gonna be in the reblogs

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marsmarvel02 · 28 days

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"What Manny Can't Fix" Review: Chapter 38

Welcome back and welcome again to my review of "What Manny Can't Fix", a Handy Manny fanfic that... well, it just isn't very good.

Wow, it's actually been a whole week since the last chapter of this review was posted. (I'd like to say that I took spring break off, but really I was just working on other stuff.)

Last time, our quartet of "main" characters rode all around town diligently hanging up copies of Twist's "MISSING" poster... by which I mean they hung up like two and then got distracted by an ice cream shop. Today... they're going to eat some ice cream. Woohoo.

(And as always, if you'd like to start this review series from the beginning, Chapter 1 is here.)

Chapter 38

After riding around town, the four of them plopped down on the sidewalk in front of the print shop again.

Allow me to take this time to make a prediction: Just because there wasn’t a pointless time-wasting scene of Pumpetunia inflating tires when we were introduced to Kira and Lilly’s bikes, doesn’t mean there isn’t going to be a pointless pumping scene sometime later in the story.

“Well, that should do it!” Lilly panted out, leaning her back against the building. She turned her gaze towards Felipe and Pumpetunia. “We’ll get a call in no time!”

“I hope so.” Felipe sighed, looking away slightly. “I just….I just wish I knew why she left…”

Pumpetunia gently put her hose around him, pulling him closer, trying to comfort him.

“I’m really sorry…” Kira said, biting down a bit on her lip slightly.

“Me too…” Lilly frowned. “You guys really miss her, huh?”

Felipe nodded. "I think it's been the hardest on Pumpetunia." He looked at the bike pump sitting next to him, and gave her a gentle nuzzle in comfort.

"I understand." Lilly said. "I'd be sad if my gifriend went missing too!" She reached over and grabbed Kira's hand, giving it a tight squeeze.

Ah yes, Kira is Lilly’s “gifriend”. That means that she agrees with Lilly about how “GIF” should be pronounced.

Kira leaned over and gave her a kiss on the cheek, making her giggle slightly.

The door to the print shop opened and Maude stood in the doorway. "How did hanging the fliers go?"

"It was exhausting!" Lilly huffed out, plopping onto her back on the sidewalk.

"Oh, I'll bet." Maude said. "I saw you biking all around town."

If she was in the print shop working at her job this whole time, how the heck could she have seen them bicycling around… whatever town they’re in? (San Diego?)

She reached into her pocket and pulled out a few bills. "Why don't you get some Ice cream and treat yourself?"

One, “Ice” shouldn’t be capitalized as it’s in the middle of the sentence.

Two, HOW THE HECK DO YOU KNOW THEY WANTED TO GET ICE CREAM?!

Felipe's eyes lit up. "Ice cream!?"

Crazy out-of-nowhere theory: Maude is psychic.

“Thank you.” Kira said sheepishly, grabbing the money.

“Of course!” Maude smiled. “You deserve a break with how hard you were working. If you need any more help finding your friend, feel free to ask.”

“Thanks…” Kira said again, heading back to her bike, placing Pumpetunia the basket. “Let's get going…”

“Right!” Lilly said, grabbing Felipe and putting him into her own. “Ice cream here we come! Wahoo!”

As they biked to the store rain started to patter down.

Oh no, is Felipe going to rust?

No, of course not. Rust is only a problem when it’s narratively appropriate; at any other time, a screwdriver can (and, at one point, did) go for a swim in a park fountain and not have to worry one bit about corrosion.

"They said it was gonna be sunny all day!" Lilly pouted.

Pumpetunia shivered as she ducked into the basket, trying to avoid the drops.

Felipe crouched down too, but the rain was getting harder.

Once they got to the ice cream shop, the girls quickly locked up their bikes before hurrying inside.

Felipe laughed a bit. “We’re all drenched!”

“Yeah we are!” Lilly giggled, grabbing some napkins and trying to dab her shirt dry.

Kira leaned against the table, out of breath still from biking around town.

“Are you okay?” Lilly frowned, putting her hand on her back.

“Yeah…I’m fine….” She breathed out. “I’m just tired from putting up all the posters…”

Kira closed her eyes, resting her tired eyes.

“Do you want me to just order for us so you can take a nap?” Lilly teased.

It appears Random Nap Syndrome has struck again.

Kira nodded, not even raising her head.

How the heck do you nod without raising your head?

“What do you guys want?” Lilly asked Felipe and Pumpetunia.

“Oh! I’ll take strawberry!” Felipe said, excitedly, before turning to Pumpetunia to ask what she wanted.

“¡Quiero pistacho!” [“I want pistachio!”] She replied.

“Strawberry and pistachio, got it!” Lilly said, heading over to the counter.

Felipe looked at Kira, still slumped over, and hopped over towards her. “Are you sure you’re okay?”

Kira let out a muffled sound in reply, not even raising her head at all.

Pumpetunia used her hose to gently stroke her hair.

"¿Se encuentra ella bien?" [“Is she okay?”] Pumpetunia asked.

"Sí, solo está exhausta." [“Yeah, she’s just exhausted.”] Felipe explained.

Pumpetunia let out a small yawn. "Yo también." [“Me too”] She leaned against Felipe .

Oh, COME ON!

"Supongo que yo también estoy cansado". Felipe said, also drowsy.

ARRGH!

WHY IS RANDOM NAP SYNDROME SUDDENLY CONTAGIOUS?!

The three of them dozed off at the table, only awoken by the sound of a thud on the table.

Thank goodness there’s not another dream sequence…

"Ah!" Kira jolted up, followed by the tools.

"Sorry, did I interrupt nap time?" Lilly giggled.

Kira gave her a tired smile before giving Lilly a kiss on the cheek.

Lilly scooted into the seat next to her and handed her a cup of chocolate swirl ice cream.

"Thanks." Kira said, putting her spoon in.

Lilly then set a small strawberry and pistachio in front of Felipe and Pumpetunia.

"Oh, thank you!" Felipe said.

"¡Gracias!" Pumpetunia said, already face first into her ice cream.

Lilly put her arm around Kira, pulling her closer.

"Thank you for helping us with the posters." Felipe said.

"Hey, no problem!" Lilly said. "I hope we can find your sister."

"I do too…" Felipe sighed.

Kira slid her spoon up and down her ice cream, leaving a small streak along the side.

"Are you sure you're okay?" Lilly asked, gripping Kira's shoulder.

She nodded, not looking up from the ice cream. "I was just thinking." She looked over at Felipe and Pumpetunia. "I think I'm ready to tell you about why I'm at the shelter."

“Hopefully, the rainstorm outside will provide dramatic thunder at appropriate moments.”

"Only if you feel comfortable with that." Felipe said. "If you don't want to, you don't…"

"No, no, it's fine." Kira insisted. "I feel like I can trust you both " She turned towards Felipe. "Can you translate the story for Pumpetunia for me?"

"Of course!"

"Thanks." She gave a small smile before it turned into a worried expression. "My parents weren't…. weren't really happy when I told them about Lilly…being my girlfriend."

Gee, that was…

Felipe looked horrified before anxiously turning towards Pumpetunia, and shakily, he translated to her.

… kind of predictable, honestly.

Pumpetunia's eyes widened as he looked over at a now distressed looking Kira.

Author, you should’ve thought harder and came up with a unique reason for Kira to be homeless that isn’t so… so cliche.

Once Felipe finished his translation, Pumpetunia hopped over to Kira and gently held onto her arm. "Lo siento…" [“I’m sorry”]

"She said she's sorry."

Kira pulled her into a hug. "Gracias." She sniffled.

Felipe went over, and Kira pulled him close too. Then Lilly pulled all three of them over, giving a tight squeeze.

“Thanks guys…” Kira sniffled. She forced herself to look up, teary eyed.

Lilly grabbed her hand and gave it a quick squeeze.

“So I…I’ve been staying at the shelter for the…last few months.” Kira continued. “Until I can find somewhere to stay…”

“My parents don't know about us.” Lilly added. "I don't feel comfortable coming out to them…."

It’s a toss-up whether this will turn out to be a bombshell the author will randomly drop when they feel they need some emotional torque or a sudden plot twist, or whether it’ll be one of those lines that the author will completely forget they wrote and accidentally contradict later.

She started playing with her spoon, mixing her now slightly melted ice cream.

Kira looked over at Felipe. "Can you ask Pumpetunia about her and Twist?"

"Ella quiere saber sobre ti y Twist" [“She wants to know about you and Twist”] Felipe said.

Missing a period there, writer.

Pumpetunia looked hesitant for a moment, still feeling slightly emotional about her lost girlfriend.

After a moment, she started gushing about Twist.

Felipe had hard time keeping up with her as he translated for Lilly and Kira:

"Where do I even begin? Twist means everything to me, she’s the love of my life! And I….I miss her so much….I don’t know what I’ll do if I can’t find her….I love her so much and…I just wish she had stayed…I’d never let her get thrown into a scrap metal bin!”

What is it with Twist- and Iron Grip, for that matter- that they’re willing to up and abandon the loves of their lives the moment something damages them?

She started shaking a little. “If she stayed. I would have kept her safe…” She clung to Felipe and looked at him, “We both would have kept her safe! She’s our family and family sticks together…” She nuzzled more against Felipe. “And we’ll stick together.”

Kira put her arm around Pumpetunia, stroking her back gently. She leaned towards Felipe and asked, “How do I say ‘Everything’s gonna be okay’ in Spanish?”

"Todo estará bien.”

“Todo estará bien.” She said gently to Pumpetunia.

Pumpetunia looked over, teary eyed, and gave her a small smile. Kira pulled her into a tight hug, trying to comfort her.

Felipe went over and joined in, nuzzling Pumpetunia.

For now at least, they all felt okay, and that's all that mattered.

Yeah, that’s not going to last.

While proofreading this review, I had an interesting thought: Due to this fanfic’s nature as a prequel, we know that Felipe is inevitably going to have to abandon his search for Twist and come to live with Manny.

In Part 1, Turner met Twist, and learned that she had a brother she abandoned, before he settled down with Manny.

So, when Felipe finally meets Manny (which will probably be after a bit of a timeskip given what I said earlier), what plot contrivance is going to prevent Turner from telling Felipe that he’d met his sister, and had a rough idea of where to find her?

#marsmarvel02 does a review #review #fanfiction review #bad fanfic review #handy manny #what manny can't fix review

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