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I owe a big thank-you to @nostalgiajesterz for taking on my request, I never could've done this myself. Here's their commission page!
#ava hangman#animator vs animation#ava shorts#animator vs animation shorts#avm shorts#animation vs minecraft shorts#Crane#for those who need an explanation: I headcanon that Crane (the hanged man) uses his gallows like a mobility aid#in the sense that he literally can't move independently unless he's wearing the noose#ava enthusiasts#art by nostalgiajesterz#premise and dialogue by me#love what you did with the framing of the dialogue boxes ^_^
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Comic panels that are referenced in (or just remind me of) the movie
#in vaguely chronological order#for the movie that is#nimona#I bing read the book after watching the movie and they’re both good but they’re so different#it caught me off guard when there was exact dialogue because the general premise is almost entirely inverted#but I love the movie and am 1000% down with all the creative liberties#but I’m not an og so idk#good stuff tho
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i saw a post saying boom was good bc it feels like it could be done with any doctor/companion duo and honestly that was one of the things i felt was wrong with it
#in a show with a title character that could be Literally Anyone and a companion sharing the lead that could be Literally Anyone#i value the little moments that set this duo apart from the rest. ESPECIALLY when it comes to returning writers like rtd/moff#fifteen and ruby felt a little too eleven/twelve and clara adjacent in boom. in both their dialogue and characterization#space babies also landed a little weird at first bc it lifted a bit from end of the world BUT the scenes that fifteen and ruby#had to themselves. like ruby getting covered in snot and fifteen laughing. or fifteen and ruby looking after the Space Babies#or fifteen going out of his way to save the monster bc that monster is the only one of its kind Just Like Him Fr#that stuff is so good and its also something we haven't seen from another nuwho doctor. the vulnerable bleeding-heart empathy#and a dynamic w a companion that is basically 'two troublemakers that just deeply love fun and adventure and getting into trouble together'#oh yeah and also the devil's chord was peak fiction because it touches on fifteen's renewed connection and love for humanity#and marries it to ruby being a musician and how music like any art is the expression of the human soul etc etc#WHAT MAKES A DOCTOR WHO STORY GOOD TO ME IS PARTLY HOW THE PREMISE TIES INTO THE DOCTOR AND COMPANION'S CHARACTERS#IT HAS TO FEEL LIKE IT WAS TAILOR MADE TO THEM. ELSE IT WONT LAND RIGHT TO ME#i hate the take that they should've saved wild blue yonder for a fifteen episode bc#the tension is hinged on how well the doctor/companion know each other. u have a level of it that u can ONLY get#with fourteen and donna who are two halves of a whole soul but have also spent much more time missing the other than knowing them#im not rewatching fifteen's eps rn until a week later when i can watch it w my qpp but#rn i still feel a stronger sense of fifteen and ruby's characters from all the rtd-written eps rather moffat#which like. i get that a lot of that is my personal dislike of moffat's writing style but still#dr who#15 era#dw spoilers
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Anyway, here's proof I'm working on Chapter 7 of Undone.
This was supposed to be hurt/comfort, why is it so damned romantic...
#This is like. Barely more than an outline at this point. Just lots of dialogue and some notes. Who knows if any of it will stay?#But damn. I really do love these space idiots.#COME ON BRAIN THINK OF THINGS COME ON BRAIN BE SO SMART#Fucking burnout#green speaks#fic thoughts#Undone#Realizing I never included demisexual Spock in the tags but like. That's basically canon anyway right? Sure#Chapter 7 I will finish you if it kills me#But probably not today.#star trek tos#star trek#tos#star trek fanfiction#spirk#k/s#the premise#spock centric
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watched the first ep of Dead Boy Detectives today, did anyone also think the dialogue was a bit clunky?
I don't mean it was unwatchable or anything i just feel like it didn't feel realistic the way they introduced the characters and world... It felt like the dialogue was for the viewer instead of an in character thing. We were gonna be introduced to a viewer surrogate within the first few minutes, there was no need to have the characters who already know how the show's world works spell it out for nobody... and then explain it again when Crystal showed up? idk it felt like something I would write (not a complient) 😅
#the line ''we have to hide from death... or she'll get us'' was ridiculous#do you think the boy that's been escaping death since 1919 or whatever doesn't know?!#''we have to hide'' was enough the viewer can put 2 and 2 together and deduce it's bad if death sees them#to then minnutes later have them explain to crystal why they have to hide from death again...#just let the characters adress the camera if you wanna spell it out so easily#or you know... trust that the viewer is intelligent enough to wait 2 minutes for an explanation?#it was mostly just that first few mins of the first ep i think#i didn't pick up on anything else that trully bothered me#but idk it felt condecending dkjfghkdfg or simply badly written#which it was a bit of a let down to have it as a very first impression#i guess i went in thinking sandman and got like idk generic teen show#in the dialogue alone btw i actually really like the characters and the premise is awesome!#it just cuaght me by surprise#maybe it because i'm also watching fallout and the dialogue on that is like very well done and everything is a hint for something later#so i'm comparing it idk#anyways... is it just me? or was it actually clunky?#(don't spoil it past ep 1 pls)#angel talks#dead boy detectives#really liking it so far tho!
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I love that there’s an ending to New Vegas where you and Benny are just kinda together? (Not that I would ever…)
You meet up with him, you hey-hey, you don’t kill him. He runs off, leaving that creepy love note. You gain custody of his robo-child. Then you meet up at the Fort and you could make fun of him and be mean, but you could also just like… tell him you had a good time? And he appreciates it? And then if you free him and he survives the game I guess that means you’re dating now.
Like, you win Courier! Your prize is Benny.
#Benny gecko#benny new vegas#new vegas#fallout new vegas#fnv#fonv#I know this isn’t a revolutionary fact for many of you#I’m sure there’s plenty of fanfic on the premise#Personally I just couldn’t get past the black widow dialogue and reloaded#courier six#courier 6#benny is so funny to me
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been playing moon rpg so im gonna post one of my newest favorite quotes
#text#moon remix rpg adventure#moon rpg#onion games#love de lic#i need to see other moon fans#this game is kinda tedious to me but its settings premise dialogue characters music is all amazing#i do recommend
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writing fluff is so hard esp for a character you haven’t written for before + other characters in the fic 😭
#satoru i’m abt to get real acquainted w you in this fic#so far it just all sounds v corny and not at all like how satoru sounds so i need to rework everything#also it’s so hard to segue into another part of the fic or just another paragraph for me so i need to practice FLOW#and NOT make it choppy/clunky#and i also have to find voices for tsumiki & megumi 😭 miki’s is pretty easy she’s sweet & playfully teasing#wanna make megs adorable yet slightly grumpy bc i know he’s mature but i still want a childish vibe for him hmmmm#i’m actually… SURPRISNGLY. having a LOT of trouble w the ‘reader’ themselves#i just can’t seem to find their dynamic w each character yet… hmmmmmm#y’know what i may have to do… keep the beginning part but scrap everything else and start fresh#sighhhhhhhh.#i’m willing to do that though bc this story so far isn’t hitting the way i want it to#and i love the Premise of the fic a lot and want to do it TOTAL justice#like it’s serious business to me 😭 i don’t play around when it comes to this omfg like i HAVE FUN but i want it to be decently written too#gonna need to insert more personality to each character + their DIALOGUE TOO omg dialogue is so fucking hard & speech tags are so blegh#i actually might dream on it tonight and imagine how it would realistically play out in my head and then go back to fic writing#yeah i’ll do that it’s 9:30 pm rn basically so i’ll just dream on it 😭#personal
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i read 'the gender of mona lisa' and i feel. both extremely seen and yet incredibly infuriated
#the gender of mona lisa#SPOILERS in the tags but uh#the whole premise is that in this world people dont have a defined sex until they turn 12#and the main character is 18 and hasn't gotten a sex yet#and also their two best friends (one guy one girl) confessed to them at the same time#and it's a really nice story and dialogue where they're conflicted on what they want to be and why can't they just stay the same#and if choosing either one of their friends means they need to adhere to one gender or the other#there's also a caveat where if you don't choose to a sex (by hormone treatments if your body doesn't present as one sex) by age 20#then 'something bad' will happen i.e: you die#it's thought provoking and sad at times but also very frustrating. i get the author is japanese and this is very much a sort of reflection#on japanese ideals of sex and gender...and a more open reflection at that#considering how there's a lot of questioning on what DEFINES femininity and masculinity#but i dont like how the author makes it out that not choosing it this horrible tragic thing. and that you can be one or the other#but still have interchangeable feminine or masculine traits which is fine!! be a girl with boy interests and vice versa#and also enraging as hell. like ive seen this rhetoric from terfs where theyre like. 'dont be trans!! just be a lil girly or boyish!!'#the one character that was written who DIDNT choose to be one or the other killed themself which was? really really saddening#and also pissed me the hell off!!! this shouldnt be a punishment!!!!!#man..........oh well. i digress. it was an interesting read despite it all
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Is the Wip game finished? Can I still ask for stuff? If I still can, can I get a snippet from the one that give me the most rot (meet the parts)? If no, then I'm just swinging by to say hi how are you doing? <3
HI RED!! thank you for swinging by, im doing better than earlier!! my ear is getting better and im eating pizza :]!
okay so TECHNICALLY it's no longer wednesday, but i LOVE spoiling my fics so of COURSE you can have a snippet from Meet the Parts hkjh <33 you are always free to ask anytime, i will always be happy to share bits of my stories <3 AND SINCE THERE'S NO RULES I CAN SHARE MORE THAN THREE LINES!! here's like, a whole React Speed thing i just wrote :]
LOGIC – Along with Coach and Sparks – Flighty and Fingers too, I suppose – they're why you have trouble sitting still for long periods of time. The attention deficiency disorder... Or are they exacerbated by it? I still haven't figured out which is the cause and which is the effect...
REACTION SPEED – Point is, we got zoomies! Can't sit still. Always more to do, more to see, more to say.
YOU – "Are you why my leg is always-"
REACTION SPEED – Bouncing, yep! Fingers tapping, hands flapping, feet moving, words flying- hey, if you had wings like me, we'd never be touching ground.
YOU – "You have wings?"
KIM KITSURAGI – He jots this down with an interested hum.
REACTION SPEED – Yes! Books, what- which animal–
ENCYCLOPEDIA [Medium: Success] – You have the hovering wing type of trochilidae – hummingbirds, colloquially – with their ability to rotate their wingspan at the shoulder and elbow joints to create maximum lift. However, though you exhibit some iridescent feathers associated with the birds, your wings also connect to membranes, which share the Voronoi tessellation of the species anisoptera, the common dragonfly.
REACTION SPEED - Yeah, exactly! I'm a hummingbird and a dragonfly. Both of 'em. :)
#task: meet the parts#inland drabbles#volta transmissions#the :) is not in the original but i added it here for fun <3 :)!!! ALSO YAY my reaction speed has wings :]#im glad you like meet the parts :'] its hard for me to work on it but i just wrote this scene thinking ''oh but red loves these guys'' hkjg#like! i LOVE the premise of meet the parts as much as the next guy but i dont like how im writing it hkjgh? i dont know what im doing :']!!#i need to finish my character analysis for all the skills first because i feel like im writing them too shallowly... ough im trying#how am i introducing kim to the skills when even i dont know the skills!! im building a house with a foundation made of peanuts hkjh#like hm. ency wouldn't touch on so many subjects so briefly? he'd zero in on one topic and talk.... or not? idk!! im not an int guy!!#reaction speed does use a LOT of exclamation marks though i love this for him. his sentences are often short and cut into phrases.#''Blam! Straight in the eye. Straight in the old eye-orb. In *the lookin' ball*!'' short pointed sentences. also oh my god he's silly <3#restless and energetic. coach wants you to move; echem needs the dopamine; but react speed puts the Hyperactive in ADHD!#sidenote: canon in reaction speed's description ''working in tandem with your Intellect skills'' GUY WHO GETS ALONG WITH THE INTs :D <3#anyway this is also the one of the few skill-centric fics im writing that don't have my usual skill actions :0#''REACTION SPEED flutters excitedly; twisting to try and catch a glimpse of his own wings - Yes!'' vs just ''REACTION SPEED - Yes!''#which means a lot of what the skills are doing or thinking as characters are cut out unless i have them mention it in dialogue#which SUCKKSSS for me because i LOVE focusing on the skills but i often leave it out when the outside world is involved (harry and kim)#it presents a unique challenge to just write characters with only dialogue. ough... curse my current lack of interest in the humans hkfjh..#ANYWAY im running out of tag space so im done rambling hkjhg thank you for asking red! :D
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Send me huntlow prompts and see what happens
#nobody knows WHAT will happen#not even me#its possible you will never see your prompt again#i am unpredictable#but its also possible you WILL#can be a premise or a scenario or a line of dialogue whatever
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not me re-writing chapter eight of spirit box three times
#punch.txt#I really like this revision. but christ#spirit box#the dialogue is not good. however. the premise works for me
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i love my ocs. i’d love to give them a plot to enact one day
#i’m so good at premise. i’m so good at character. i’m so good at dialogue.#do not ask me for a series of events#or even really descriptions of settings and such.#but boy can i go into detail about whose hands are where
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the minute I open my laptop I forget every word I've ever learned and cannot form a single sentence coherent or not but the second I close my laptop synapses start firing and I can come with ideas and entire chapter plots and dialogue at lightning speed but the second I even think abt writing any of it down my brain shuts down again
#i write sometimes#why is this happening???? it is evil. and I do not deserve this.#I am having such a bad time w/like brain fog or whatever rn now too due to *gestures at life* that like#I USED to be able to get an idea and keep it perfectly intact for DAYS. dialogue snippet whole chapter premise. you name it.#I could dream it up and I'd be able to revisit it and then write it days later#now it's like waving at an idea as it shrinks into the distance and I'm not allowed to try document at all or it'll combust#and I just end up staring at a word doc and only getting like a couple hundred words at best in HOURS and it feels so DEFEATING#makes me wanna give up again
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cishet male redditors have the world's worst taste in manga and twitter webcomics on god so many of them just eat up the same shitty tropey mildly suggestive ecchi romcom jank every day like don't you people get tired. don't you want to read something interesting or uncomfortable
#keri chats#any and all flavor has exited the premises#this is mostly about low effort twitter webcomics getting thousands of upvotes on r/manga do not @ me lmfao#especially the ones that are just single page updates showing only a female love interest on screen w dialogue bubbles around her
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wip who-even-knows time is meaningless and i am so tired
thank you to my love calico @k9rage for the wip tag - my apologies, this is so desperately desperately late 😵💫😵💫 ooh, let's have a look... @epsi-l0n @zozo-01 @thegoldenlittlerose - may we peek behind the curtain?? this is, as always, an open tag - if you're reading this, consider yourself tagged! 🥳🥳
under the cut: i think i've mentioned it very briefly before, but i wasn't very specific - we're heading back to the imperium, baby! an au of an au - freelancer, and their terrible, horrible, no-good very bad day 🤩🤩
(CW: blood, death and dead bodies - it's the imperium, so really it's par for the course... this is all happening on the same day as the cataclysm finale, so if that isn't your cup of tea, maybe skip this one!)
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The earth trembles underneath your feet as you run. All you have to do is find Vindemiator.
You’re anticipating the worst. If he’s still conscious, wonderful. If he’s not, Caelum can cloak him, at least until the worst of it is over. Funnily enough, your saving grace is that there’s almost no way he’s got enough magic left to rift - it means he’s probably still on the Spire grounds, and you still have a chance at finding him.
In front of you, the Spire stretches high into the grim sky, all smashed windows and blazing, choking smoke. The smaller, secondary towers haven’t fared much better, and the walkways that join them to the main column are all but skeletal. The surrounding buildings cry blood, the small shapes of what must be bodies lying empty wherever you look.
The Spire gates were beautiful - wrought iron, hundreds of years old, twisting and curling into lovely patterns maybe ten feet tall. Unfortunately, the operative word there is were. Now, they’re little more than a blasted heap of metal to match the rest of the place. Picking your way through the debris, it’s almost… sad, in a way you’re not sure how to describe.
The end of an era. A hated one, to be sure, but it’s all you’ve ever known. Will this burning, brave new world be any better?
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#redacted asmr#redacted audio#redacted freelancer#this wip is so goddamn LONG BLOODY HELL#at least by my standards lol#bc i am Very Slow#its like...... nearly 6k and we're not even halfway through yet#which for me is VERY long#normally i tap out at about 3 or 4k so this is already feeling like a bit of a marathon#but i am just so in love with this idea that idec 🥰🥰🥰#i won't spoil it for you but the major premise here is two important bits of canon divergence:#1. what if freelancer had never asked to run away?#and 2. what if vindemiator had gone to the Spire with the rest of the haven demons?#.....also caelum is there#bc apparently i'm even meaner than echo hehe#even echo didn't dare give us imperium caelum - never fear ginger is here to pick up the slack 😍😍#i've been writing vega dialogue for this tonight and i love that man so fuckin much#he is the most fun to write i am having a BALL#💕💕💕💕💕
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