The dialogue in Andor is so good. Every episode, I find myself amazed at how expertly written it all is--when usually, I don't tend to notice film writing unless it's particularly bad. But when I watch Andor, I feel like I'm sitting through a film-writing masterclass. Most recently, episode 9's dialogue stood out to me as particularly excellent. If I could take one lesson from this episode, it would be:
Good dialogue does not have to be elaborate.
It doesn't have to be flashy. It doesn't have to use complicated sentence structure or big words. It doesn't need people interrupting or talking over each other. Good dialogue just needs to do three things:
Convey information (plot exposition, characterization of the speaker, etc.)
Sound like something a person would actually say
In most cases, not say everything the speaker is actually thinking/feeling
(Point 3 might sound like a contradiction of point 1, but it's related to "show, don't tell." Besides, people generally don't go around saying exactly what they mean or what they're thinking, so it ends up sounding clunky and unnatural.)
And I have a perfect example from Star Wars to demonstrate my point. In my opinion, Episode II has some of the worst writing in the entire series, such as this teenage-poetry-worthy line:
Okay, no, we need the whole poem for context. "From the moment I met you, all those years ago, not a day has gone by when I haven't thought of you. And now that I'm with you again, I'm in agony. The closer I get to you, the worse it gets. The thought of not being with you...I can't breathe. I'm haunted by the kiss that you should never have given me. My heart is beating, hoping that that kiss will not become a scar. You are in my very soul, tormenting me. What can I do? I will do anything that you ask."
First of all, who talks like that? (They sure don't! This isn't how they talk, before or after this scene.) The whole conversation is awkward and stilted, and has all the subtlety of a foghorn in a library. It conveys information, sure, but in a very clunky, cringey way that takes way too long. (And I'm just talking about the writing here, not the delivery--Hayden Christensen and Natalie Portman both did their best with what they had.)
Contrast this with the dialogue in Andor:
"I can't help him. I can't help anyone."
Two lines. Two four-word sentences. Very simple sentences, too. No fancy words at all. And yet just think of how much they convey, whether you hear them in context or not. Yes, a lot of the power of this scene comes from the excellent acting, the expressions and body language that tells you so much more than just the words.
I don't even remember if we ever learn what this guy's name is. And yet, with those two simple sentences, we can glean so much of this man's story, his outlook on life, not to mention simply the impact he has on the plot unfolding right then.
Pretty much everything about this show is fantastic and keeps me thinking about it for days, and the dialogue is no exception. This is just one tiny example of the good writing in this show, and I can't wait to see more.
Full credit to Beau Willimon, writer of episode 9.
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oc introduction // @lovehungered
amarantha 'amara' vitale (emma pasarow) is a discord-only muse.
she's a vampire and her story is set in the first kill universe.
amara - or ammie - is an only child who wanted for nothing but grew up in a cold home nevertheless. a cold home with ghosts and her surname sitting like a knot in her chest because the vitale family is a legacy family. or, rather, was a legacy family.
they used to be much larger than it is now because hunters murdered the majority of them and now amara's parents are obsessed with trying to get back to their glory days and amass enough influence so that they may one day take their revenge.
but to do all of that, they need an in. luckily, they've got one in the form of the davenport family. the davenports are hungry for allies, and for the emerald malkia, while the vitale's are hungry for the protection that the davenports can provide.
so if their daughter were to tie the knot with tom, the youngest davenport (who was once elinor's fiance) both of their wishes come true at once.
currently, mr and mrs vitale are in canada, trying to work out a deal with the davenport family. when the deal is struck, all of them will come back to the vitale residence in savannah, georgia to meet amara.
however, amara fell deeply in love with sylas priestly (@hcpebled's beloved werewolf oc) and is actively trying to find a way to get herself out of this predicament because there is one person she wants to get married to down the line and that person is sylas.
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it is weird being an aromantic asexual who is incidentally attractive. like. i just came back from a concert with my friends who have known me for years and know that about me. some of the very few real-life friends who know that about me actually and i only told them relatively recently. regardless. the only reason i had bothered to bring it up w them is that they had seen me in SO many situations that telling them “i’m asexual” was if anything just clarification. just confirmation, like, don’t worry. it’s not an inability to attach to others or whatever. if you can’t tell. like they’d seen me be pursued by quite a few people in our time as friends and at some point it seems like a curious thing if i only ever seem to feel negatively about anyone who’s attracted to me, ever, no matter who it is. and they were understanding and i knew they’d be. yeah.
we were talking on the way back about bucket list concerts we’d still like to see. we saw stromae which was a really big one of mine (my fucking boy btw, i had an amazing time). i mentioned that i don’t have very many, as i’m rarely the person to be like “yeah, let’s go to a concert” unless i have people i know i wanna go with. like i’ve been meaning to see the jonas brothers w my sister and sisters-in-law ever since they came back because it’d be a fun thing for us since we always listen to them together.
but i would genuinely love to see super junior someday, like just for myself, wherever whenever if i was just able to get transportation (i don’t drive). i’ve loved suju for years but i got really back into them in 2020 in the pandemic as a sort of nostalgia comfort thing (but also the music they’ve put out in recent years is like, literally the best in their discography, they just keep getting better w age). and i had to go on this tangent to explain it, right?
in the first months of the pandemic, there was something weird happening to people psychologically. some kind of end-of-the-world loneliness. i mentioned that i had like 5 or 6 different people in my DMs at the time interested in me. not all of them men. and the friend who was driving said “you know, diana, if this were literally anyone else talking, i would think that this is some enormous humblebrag—”
and i like. didn’t even think about it that way. i was just trying to make my point that i had a serious thought in 2020 of like, when the world opened back up, just doing one (1) seriously manipulative thing in my life and convince one of those men who was thirsting for me to buy me tickets to super junior and go with me. it was hypothetical. this hasn’t happened and all but certainly will not. i would not feel good taking advantage of someone’s feelings like that.
but i had to go on a tangent even before that because i was like. oh my goodness. i didn’t even realize that was a humblebrag. i’m sorry. i’m just telling a story.
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Oh Eww
Just watching so many Team Cap/Anti Sokovian Accords people celebrate the latest She-Hulk episode is giving me the ick.
I can and will always mantain that the Sokovian Accords were a good idea because the majority American Avengers should definitely have had and still need an overseeing body of (ideally multiple nations) that they would need to answer to before they were allowed to invade other countries on what were essentially military operations.
That was how the Accords will presented originally at the start of the movie. How it was handled and presented by the end of the movie did not represent the original intent at all and felt deliberate in order to frame Steve and the American Military as always righteous and correct. Espeically with placing Ross as the main speaker for the Accords once T’chaka was killed. You were never supposed to agree with Ross or how he handled things so saying that the movie presented it was a fair 50/50 for and against is a flat out lie.
This isn’t even about Steve vs Tony or any of that. Steve was approaching the majority of the conflict purely on a ‘Save Bucky, the rules don’t apply to me’ stance while Tony was going on a ‘I’ve taken on the responsibility of all the lives via Ultron and need to over correct’ direction.
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