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sixmorningsafter · 7 years

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Chapter 14 Review - Intimacy and evasiveness in equal measure

Thank you so so much for this chapter; you are freaking awesome. At this point, your fic is longer than most PhD thesis. You’re completely bonkers, in the absolute best way. Please never change. Seriously, the level of interactivity in this fic is such fun and thank you for encouraging that. Some of the recent fancasts have been beyond amazing.

Gabi: “the level of interactivity in this fic is such fun” - you mean how I take fifty fucking years to respond to reviews that legitimately make my life!?!?!?!?! THAT LEVEL OF INTERACTIVITY!?!?! LMAO, gurl, can I just say before I dive into any of this that this review literally made me go back and edit some parts, that’s how helpful it was, and yet here I am, answering it an entire CHAPTER LATER!? For some reason the feedback for fourteen was really slow at first and then all of a sudden like 10 giant reviews came in at the same time, and I just took way too long to get around to all of them and kept answering the short ones first (because they take less thought/time), and then once I was done answering the short ones I was drained because I’m weak and wouldn’t survive the winter. BUT HERE I AM. Ten years later. Ready to friggin go. LET’S DO IT.

Firstly, I can’t believe you stopped before the Steroline sex! Rude. I would have been devastated (melodramatic OTT much) had you not given us one of the best SC kisses ever. Honestly, I think I might have sighed a little out loud. And after Stefan’s stupid assed, jealousy mental meltdown, Caroline demonstrates exactly why he has no need to be jealous in one sentence - “Damon could do all those things without it once being intimate.” It’s really obvious that ‘intimate’ is a mental thing for Caroline, I loved watching the switch click in Caroline’s mind from non intimate to intimate. Oh Caroline - you poor silly girl, you’ve got it bad!

Gabi: So, the plus side of answering this once 15 is already up is that I don’t have to feel bad about blue ballsing anyone anymore, muahahaha. Steroline sex is officially up and out there and there’s no taking it back now. Re: 14, though, love alllll of these insights and the particular moments of theirs that you choose to compare and contrast. They’re both stupid levels of in denial here, but the good news is the end of 15 and hopefully the majority of 16 is a bit of a new era for them - one where they actually try, I don’t know, communicating? It’s going to be wild.

The part where they are watching YouTube videos together and eating Caroline’s secret food stash (naughty Caroline keeping treats from the other inmates of 2B - tsk, tsk) was very sweet and surprisingly intimate in it’s own right. I love how they have elements of easy friendship that they don’t even seem to recognise. I’m very interested in how their sexy timez are going to go because they could be hot, sweet or kind of silly/jokey or maybe all three. I think it’s going to get intimate whether Caroline likes it or not; Stefan may even bust out some of his Disney Prince romance vibes. I’m so intrigued as to who their third wheel could be.

Gabi: I really enjoyed writing that scene for exactly that reason - that somehow, these two super awkward people with a bunch of confusion and tension between them keep finding themselves in random moments of easygoing camaraderie, and all it really takes for that to happen is time and/or a distraction. I’m trying to hint at a possible future for them that doesn’t have all of this drama, that’s actually driven by a genuine enjoyment of spending time together and light-hearted banter and a warm hum of affection, but their poor coping/communication skills from their past experiences are just getting in that way of it. And hahaha, re: sexy timez, now you know! Disney Prince romance vibes definitely happened and Caroline, well... had some conflicts with it. As for the silly/jokey thing, I wouldn’t rule that out just yet for future scenes.

I know you are trying to achieve balance between your characters. At this point, I feel I know a lot about Stefan, Bonnie and Caroline, but with Damon, he’s still a mystery.

I both love and hate that we don’t know more.

Love - because I know you are being all clever and writery and keeping it from us on purpose. That having us see Damon through the other characters’ eyes is a clever way of 'revealing’ titbits without revealing them. Even Damon’s internal monologue is super evasive and kind of shallow (compared to Bonnie’s about him which was downright hilarious and completely nuts especially the hitman, Bonnie the world’s most boring mark lmao).

Hate - because I am such an impatient spoiler seeking nut bag, I need to know everything! Look honestly though, if you had told me before this started that I would actually be interested in Damon as a character himself, not as Bonnie’s boyfriend or Stefan’s brother, I would have scoffed at you. See Gabi, this is the power you wield. Use it wisely! Mwah ha ha.

Gabi:��SOOO it was definitely still in the typical evasive flashes-of-insight format that Damon’s PoV tends to operate in, but I think 15 hopefully gave you a little more of what you were looking for regarding him? His guard was forcibly down for a bit, and his head went more into his complicated relationship with his mom, and part of the reason why I didn’t tie his panic attack fully up in 15 was because I’m carrying that arc into 16. There’s definitely aftermath, there’s definitely Bonnie the Hufflepuff making him feel unsettling things and think more about his life, and there’s also some Kai/Damon stuff that’ll have echoes of Damon/Tyler. So much more Damon ahead! And GURL, you don’t even know how happy it makes me to hear that re: ‘if you had told me before this started that I would actually be interested in Damon as a character’. That’s like the biggest compliment to me for some reason, like it gets me so hyped, so thanks so, so much for telling me! It’s tough to get people to like characters even when they’re blank slates, so getting someone to actually come around to someone they weren’t about before is like YAAAAAAS.

In all seriousness, Damon didn’t deserve the kicking he got from Stefan in the opening scene. Sorry Stef, that was uncalled for even if Damon did start it. While this scene was all about Stefan’s pov and his reactions, Damon’s evasiveness is totally in character. Even though he’s oh-so-not-bothered, Stefan’s assessment of him has to smart a bit. I hope these two crazy kids work it out. I need my drigh!brotp back together. (Quick aside about Stefan – I hope at some point, he’s going to fess up that it wasn’t about Damon, Bonnie, Caroline or even Elena. It was about his own feelings of insecurity. It’s like Bonnie’s rampage of self-destruction as the person most hurt by this is himself. It’s actually very canon Stefan.)

Gabi: He definitely didn’t deserve it, and I wanted to write it that way because I wanted to show that Stefan, like everyone else in this godforsaken headache of a story, is a flawed character who gives into emotional reactions and insecurity sometimes and acts out. Like I really wanted to make it clear that Stefan was in the wrong there, and I really wanted to do it at Damon’s expense because at the shallowest of glances, Damon would be the guy you’d assume can be asshole sometimes and Stefan would be the guy you’d label as the patient, understanding saint, and 14 chapters in, I really wanted to flip that. As harmlessly trolly as Damon can be to Stefan about Caroline, turns out that Stefan is the one who drew first blood between them, you know? And I think you’re totally right about the oh-so-bothered-but-not-really thing re: Damon - he’s been called terrible things his whole life, so he’s learned how to let them slide off him like butter, but even butter leaves a trail, you know? They definitely add up to a perception he has of himself that’s probably darker/less flattering than it needs to be, and Bonnie absolutely confronts that in 16. She’s kind of like, ‘hey, newsflash dark and twisty, you’re a good guy’. She has a little speech I’ve written out that I really like. Lots of feelsiness coming in 16, man. Including Stefan insights and realizations about insecurity!

I’m still super interested by Damon’s two identities. Are the two different dates of birth significant? Him not mentioning anything after Bonnie fessing up to poking in his wallet - evasive much? So he doesn’t take his Fell ID out normally? I need more details, here, stop trying to kill me.

Gabi: lololol, got a little more of this in 15! I’m not sure how much was obvious from the story because Damon’s thoughts about his past always come out super jagged when I write them (and obviously I know the whole thing ‘cause I’m making it up, lmao), but I think I gave enough to kind of explain why he had that ID on him? Maybe?

Bonnie telling him all about her sex dreams had him speechless and I loved that. Yes, he was very much – that’s ok Bon, sexy daydreams are fine, but I still think there was an element of him being chuffed about it. That was really cute; I liked that his reaction wasn’t to grab her and lay one on her - she did that instead (oh Bon, you saucy minx). I loved their kiss, so hot; I really like their connection, it has a more brutal honesty to it than Steroline’s. By that I mean that Caroline lets Stefan get away with more introspection because that’s what suits her, whereas Damon pushes Bonnie to lay out her soul for him because he really wants someone to do it back to him, deep down. I may be over analysing this and be completely wrong.

Gabi: LMAOOO, ‘you saucy minx’ - she really is. And Damon is all about it. And no, you’re 100% spot on in your analysis of the two ships, assss usual - I think that’s a brilliant way to put it. Damon doesn’t wonder as much about Bonnie because he pushes, in more ways than one, till she gives him answers. He’s confrontational. Blunt. And Bonnie needs that, because her insecurities and problems are so deeply, deeply entrenched into her that they’re basically covered in layers of cement. You can’t slowly uncover that, you need a jack hammer (vs. for Caroline and Stefan, the wounds are still a little too fresh and shallow for a jackhammer to do anything except make it worse. They need the gentle discovery). Damon’s a bit of a paradox in that he’s either 100% blithe and flippant and dgaf, or he’s 100% blunt and real talk, and generally he uses the first mode to evade and the second mode to investigate. Problem is, Bonnie’s a bit of a jackhammer herself, and I think 15 was the beginning of the tide shifting to Damon being the one under the spotlight. And we’ll see how he likes that moving forward. Payback’s a bitch.

Did I detect that Damon might have a slight bird phobia? A dove in your shower is never good, but he seemed more than a little nervous. Also how is his hand doing? Dr Bon needs to follow up her patients better. I am kind of surprised how prompt he was for Kai’s dinner. Does Damon have immaculate time keeping? Or he is genuinely terrified of Kai? I guess I’m kind of struggling to find Kai scary, a bit loopy, somewhat odd, but I was really surprised that Damon would be scared of him (I have blanked out the crossbow in his face episode). We know he can handle himself in a fight (thank you for that Caroline) and he’s survived that gunshot as a child. Damon strikes me as being hard as nails (except around Bon) - Kai should be a cakewalk. Does he recognise something in Kai that he might have experienced in his past? Chapter 15 should be illuminating - I really hope we get plenty from his pov. I can’t wait.

Gabi: You did and it was totally unintentional. I actually went back and read over the way I’d written it after this feedback and totally got the same vibe (it was meant to be humorous but definitely came across as a little deeper than that), so thanks so much for pointing this out! I did a few little edits that I think put forth a more accurate picture of both the bird reaction (annoyance, bafflement, Damon in general being a growly diva) and his immaculate time-keeping (which was definitely supposed to be the focus more so than any actual fear of Kai, which, lmao, I think 15 makes pretty clear doesn’t exist). I think I could maybe argue that getting attacked by a dove in the shower could carry a bit of trauma from his basement-with-rats days, but even so, he’d hide that, so. Edited and more accurate thanks to bomb feedback!

ANYWAY, THIS IS ONCE AGAIN 600 YEARS LATE but oddly, it was kind of fun answering it with 15 already written? In any case, I’m so friggin’ sorry it took me this long to respond, and your feedback, as always, is one of my fave things about writing this fic because it’s always so hilarious and insightful. Thanks so, so much for this review, and hopefully 15 delivered the things you were after and 16 will deliver them even more. LOVE YA, BABE!

#reply #six mornings after #review #14 #lmao first I wrote '16'#and then I wrote '15'#and then I was like WAIT NO '14'#yikes #submission #anyway this was rad and still makes my day so #thanks so much babe #janet's the best

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otomeduck · 6 years

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i'm bored HAHAH lol it's a saturday morning,, i woke up unexpectedly early at like 7am ??! it's nearing 9am now HAHAH maybe i should try to do something productive to start off the day ~~ i don't know what to do though LOL

it's so unexpected that i woke up this early bcs i expected myself to wake up at 11am or something HAHAH now i'm at a loss, pondering how to spend my remaining time HAHAHA.

i'm legit so bored omg hahaha what should i do right now LOL errrrmmm ugh since i've so much time to kill i might as well watch anime LOL ok i'll be doing that hahahah bless

hakuouki reimeiroku time hehehehehe 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩 i cant wait ☺☺☺ pity it's the last ep though 😔😔😔😔 yikes i feel so jittery thinking about it HAHAHA

I've got bad vibes from this episode lol i got a feeling dat the shinsengumi men r plotting sth to kill serizawa or something and it hurts me

I knew it i knew it i predicted & forseen this coming. Ugh why lol. Why do something like this @ hiji & friends ?!?!?!? Omggg wtf. The aizu domain higher ups r all so sneaky ok first the water of life or whatever that stupid potion is called. Now ordering them to rid off serizawa? What insanity. Serizawa brought this bunch so far wtf. Omg im cringing ugh this is not even ugh

What kind of last episode is this what the fuck lol i can't help crying what the fuck omg what is this lololol wtf how could it have ended this way ????? This is so unbelievable and unconceivable i am about to punch somebody's guts out lmao wtf

I still can't believe this is the last episode like i can't believe ???? What kind of ending is this ??? Wtf????omg

Wtf im in so much pain watching this wtf omg ok fine what???? What???? WHAT???????????????????????????????????? so ryunosuke gets separated from the rest of the shinsengumi men??? is that FAIR ???? OH MY FUCKING GOD IM IN SO MUCH HURT

Ok great my bro just saw me in a bawling mess lmao but what kind of ending is this omg fck nooooooo omg

Omg this is so bad and painful for my heart i cant wtf is thisss skinaiwjqow wtf????? Omg wtf....ajwjajwjwjjw omg 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 heartwreching bittersweet ending ????? Wtf???? I cant believe ibuki is alone from now wtf like wtf friendless ok wtf 😭😭😭😭😭😭 wtf 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 serizawa wasnt the despicable guy i thought he was????? Wtf???? Ugh i'm so done and unhappy i mean i'm pretty sure after he became the rasetsu he would be able to kill off sannan and everyone else who were ganging up on them. But he didn't. I got that sensing.

IT SUCKS. HE DOESN'T DESERVE TO BE KILLED. Wtf? And ibuki?!?@??@?@,omg wtf ok wtf????????? Omg...... ok fine he survived but hes all alone now wtf.....he's back where he first started, just that now he wants to live.........

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And ya there's chizuru at the end but lol. Ugh. I'm so done i liked the 2 female characters of this season so much. Ugh.... i cant. I cant. Why do they listen to the aizu orders so readily?????wtf?????? Is it not against their principles or.....?????? ???? I need to seek some understanding about this. To some extent they let ibuki live but it's so cruel, the way they parted ????fck and my ship for heisuke and ibuki was so strong ??? Omfg.

It is so hurtful to even type and process everything. I can't. I can't understand or comprehend anything (just like ibuki) and it's so sadddddd omg what kind of ending is this,,,,,,, ugh omg ...... ok wow time flies now it's 10am and i need to leave my home in 15minutes. I am still super conflicted and done over this ending.

Come on skwakwjw 0 healing omg this just shown how shinsengumi men hardened themselves for the future omg wtf it's more grim than positive for me ??? Okita became the "sword" (more like killer) for shinsengumi omg so twisted and hijikata decided to be the devil commander and kondou toughened his resolve and sannan proved himself to have plenty of willpower while harada & saito shown themselves to be guys with very high eq while heisuke affirmed his set of values while shinpachi has let others seen him as someone who is trustworthy for shinsengumi.

I realise more than a plot progression, this season serves to let us see how the characters in hakuouki have grown? Character development? Bc the characters that appeared in this season eg serizawa they dont play any role afterwards. So they were simply put in this season to portray the character growth of ultimately, the shinsengumi.

I still got bad vibes from the bakufu like the authorities r so sneaky i cant ????? I dont get it ???? But ok. Im just like ryunosuke lol unable to get anything. But its ok. Ugh the life in japan before is so cruel with wars and stuff? What even? Its so heartbreaking to watch?

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I love ibuki so much i really do. Inoue is a really lovely old dude as well. :----((((( im glad i watched this season, but at the same time im going to be so pissed at the ending for a long, long time....... ..... :(((

Unfair unfair unfairrrr :(( ok i know life isnt fair but the ending is not even lighthearted ok omg ok fine i mean what was i expecting??? Look at how they decided to end the season 2 anyway lol everyone dying LOL what, i couldnt have possibly expected a wholesome ending for a historical anime right ???? Ha ha ha.

Im so pained. Fml. This is a wreck im feeling so awful i cant :((((((( omg???? I mean in a sense i got to know more about each of the characters' past (except for harada heisuke shinpachi sannan idk ok fine i only got to know about the past of a few shinsengumi men) so ya i got to know some of them better through this season.... but it's still so painful omg the era back then is so painful ugh :((

😭😭😭😭😭 i got a feeling im going to be so attached so im going to read up about the characters of this season. On hakuouki wiki or something.

Ok fine lol now i know. He is an original character role created for the storyline and does not exist historically. Ugh no wonder lol. #all planned to get him gone when the main season starts 😒😒😒😒😒 ughhhh hmph......

Gah skkwankwkaw oume was such a loveable character lol i really wanted to see more of her????? But ok.... ugh... fml.... lololol ;; 12 eps lol junna what did u expect. Ha ha ha. #broken lol

I feel so uncomfortable akeianwkwj i want a fluffy ending bcs of my personalityyy ughhh dksnejjwjjjwwb dying lol out of temptation i decided to read about okita's character (bc i love him yeah????but he seemed so coldhearted this season) and i was reminded of the BLOODY hekketsuroku season which was so bad omg i was so pained just seeing okita bæ bedridden ???? Omg ??? Fck this definitely categorises under "angst" right????? Wow ouch ugh omg when my character baes feel pain so do i ok??? Ugh skwksiwjwej

Sighs ighs igh. Omg hakuouki ssl looks so nice lmao hahaha wtf souji's obsession is smartphone photography and image editting???? That sounds so hilarious lmao hahaha omg 10/10.

Omg so annoying lol am i the only one who cant handle drilling noises bcs omg at where i live i keep hearing drilling sounds and its so deafening ugh im going to slap someone LOL anyway im so tempted to play hakuouki ssl omg lol it looks so nice. Well i guess thats it for hakuouki reimeiroku :((( now i can go back to watching hakuouki sekkaroku HAHA i stopped that midway last time. I will resume....... my pain for hakuouki shall remain for eternity LMAO hahah <///////3 i feel like someone just slashed my heart lol it could be the swords of any of the shinsengumi men tbh.

Im still maddened like ibuki learnt swords skills from saitou but the results of it were not visibly displayed in the anime????? Udjajjwnaja so many questions not answered but i guess it's also a blank plate that allows us to imagine for what happens in the future for ibuki i guess. He's so precious. He deserves a good life ;; mxjankwnsjqnajw

Sjwjqjqjq ok hahah aft talking so much im about to run late for my school group project oops hahah and the bus is taking forever to come too aaahhh hahah ok ok nsjqjjw :)) ok although i complained so much, i still dont regret watching hakuouki reimeiroku a single bit. It was inspirational, awesome and 💯💯💯 hehehe. Im thankful i watched it actually :)) 😊😊 hahah hopefully i dont burst into tears when i see my friend later as i tell her all about this amazing anime with a melodramatic ending hahah

My eyes r so sore i look just like a zombie lmao hahahahah slwkwwiwkwj hakuouki reimeiroku ep 12 wad a blast :))))

#hakuouki spoilers

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