#the first clue that viv cannot write entirely removed from Discourse Factor exists in the hazbin pilot
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#hhhhverse tag of spite#the first clue that viv cannot write entirely removed from Discourse Factor exists in the hazbin pilot#where vagina pulls AD aside to tell the audience so much badly written self-aware exposition instead of. idunno.#'how do you not know who he is?!' and then being cut off before she can exposition dump at us#the scene continues as normal but now neither AD or the audience knows why to be on edge but that there is reason to#and then AD and the audience get SOME answer when he does that OP shit at the end and then is like lol moving on#there! you answered AD's question without a paragraph of bullshit AND left INTRIGUE for the audience too for wtf all thats about!#wow!#a highschool english teacher would have pointed this out if you handed this to them for a grade!#but you decided you're too good for critique before graduating#and now you get pissy when people say this shit reads like a highschooler or someone still in highschool in their head wrote it#the math is very simple here or did you decide math is also for nerds and not worth your time as well
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