#i did randomly write a conversation between Simon and Penny for scooby Doo part 2
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Haven’t really written anything new and I’m still dipping my toes back in here, but I have more dead darlings from Strictly Professional, so why not share? It’s truly a shame I couldn’t make a place for some of these lines, and I doubt they’ll be of use in the future. Anyway, it’s fun to let these live on their own, and I will likely do this for other fics in the future.
After finishing the first draft, I thought things were going to be pretty smooth sailing on the edit. And then I got to Baz’s first POV of Day 2 and realized it was a mess. There was almost no transition from Baz panicking to Baz flirting. I worked on that scene for three days to get it where it needed to be, and some lines I loved simply had to go.
I also realized that I needed to structure chapters 1 and 2 as mirrors, with their POVs in opposite order. This led to a couple of scenes having to be rewritten from the other perspective, and that meant some internal narration had to be removed.
Did you need that context? Probably not, but I find process interesting, so I’m sharing a little peek into mine for those who like it.
1. Pulled from Day 2 (Baz POV)
“I'd do it all again. I would right now, too, if you asked me. I'd have you right here on this table, if that's what you wanted, bugger the consequences. Or other things."
I have to throw a hand over my mouth to avoid the howl of surprise that tries to burst out of it.
He simply smiles innocently and takes a sip of his own water. "Offer's…on the table," he murmurs, failing to suppress his smile.
2. Pulled from Day 1 (Baz POV)
That should frighten me. I don't like feeling as though I don't have control over my own body. But I can't stay in my head long enough to muster the proper shame, self-loathing, and regret that would ordinarily be plaguing me like the Furies by now.
3. Pulled from Day 3 (POV change)
I missed this, having this—these quiet morning intimacies, whispers and secrets shared over pillows, the presence and weight of another body in bed with mine—even more than I missed having sex.
4. Pulled from Day 3 (POV change)
He draws his hand back and crawls across the expanse of bed to place a kiss on the corner of my mouth, where his thumb had been stroking earlier. He's still smiling; Salisbury must be the world's leading expert on kissing while smiling.
5. Pulled from Day 2 (Simon POV)
"I don’t mean to presume. I know that this is just, you know, this. What happens at the work conference, stays at the work conference, right?"
I know my attempt at humour was pathetic at best, but someone had to try to lighten the mood.
It doesn't work. If anything, it makes Baz look a bit stricken. It was probably a bad idea to bring up the conference right now. (It was definitely a bad idea.) The very last thing Baz needs is to be reminded of all the ways our little tryst is a walking, talking ethics violation.
"Well, I would never presume, either," he says. "I'm fairly certain it would be a fireable offence if I did."
6. Pulled from Day 2 (Simon POV)
"Don't change the subject," he says.
"What subject were we on?" I ask.
"Your impeccable pectorals."
"Oh! So that's why you like my chest."
"It's a leading contender. And I meant what I said. You do look powerful. Strong. Sturdy."
He adds quietly, "some of us could use sturdy."
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#six sentence sunday#strictly professional#i did randomly write a conversation between Simon and Penny for scooby Doo part 2#that was fun#but i can’t share because it has spoilers for part one#i have been getting ideas for it#not sure if i will get to it this year tho#coming up on two years from posting SAE and i am hoping i can draw motivation to get back to it from that#will it be enough to convince my brain??#🤷🏻♀️
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