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macgyvermedical · 8 hours ago
Using SALT for Triage
Hi Folks!
I just got back from the yearly training for my hospital's Hospital Emergency Response Team, and there are big juicy changes to the main triage system used in the US. The new triage system comes from the CDC and FEMA, and is to start trickling down to state and local levels in the coming years.
What was the triage system like before? To answer that, I encourage you to read this post evaluating an episode of the TV show Code Black, which describes the US Incident Command System (ICS), the Hospital Incident Command System (HICS), and the START triage system.
But now onto the new system, which is called SALT. SALT stands for Sort And Lifesaving Treatment.
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Step 0: Setting the Stage
SALT takes into account a few situations that were found in the Las Vegas Shootings. The first is that previous versions had assumed that everyone would show up at once at the scene of a mass casualty incident.
While this could be true of, say, a 10-car pile-up, what was found in reality is that EMS weren't the only ones accepting patients and that hospitals were actually doing the bulk of triage over the course of days or weeks. Piles of people came in via private vehicle and in the backs of pickup trucks. Some walked or were dragged into emergency departments. And since no one was communicating with the hospitals before dumping patients off, hospitals couldn't easily control access the way they could with EMS. They now had to do a lot of their own triage continually.
The second thing is that with previous systems people on scene tend to "over triage". That meant that on average triagers tended to say people were more in need of immediate medical care than they actually were. While it may seem like over-triage is preferable, in reality that led to loads of people who apparently needed help immediately overwhelming emergency departments when they actually could have waited a few hours for care and been fine. Had they been triaged correctly, this may have prevented the department from being overwhelmed and increased the quality of care for everyone.
The third thing is that the available resources change over the course of any mass casualty incident. Previous triage algorithms do not account for this. SALT deliberately creates space for re-triage as it becomes necessary and as resources change.
The fourth thing is that the previous algorithms relied on vital signs as part of the triage algorithm. Triagers in loud or chaotic environments can't easily count a pulse or respirations, especially if they are wearing heavy PPE, such as might be required in a biological or chemical attack.
Step 1: "Global Sorting"
The first step in this system is to sort people visually into 3 categories. This is so that in Step 2 you can individually assess the most seriously injured first. The "global" categories are:
Walking- literally means the person can walk, and can be assumed to fend for themselves for a while or even maybe help. These people will be individually assessed last.
Waving- the person can make or copy purposeful movements, can respond relatively appropriately to commands, but cannot walk. These people will be individually assessed second.
Neither- the person is awake but very confused, or is unconscious. Also in this category would be any obvious life threat, like spurting blood or not breathing, even if they might temporarily fit into one of the above two categories. They will be assessed first.
Step 2: "Individual Assessment and Life Saving Treatment"
Now all of the triagers can get started individually assessing the members of the "Neither" group.
For each person, if trained and able to do so, a triager can do one or more of the following:
Tourniquet or otherwise stop heavy bleeding.
Open the airway by inserting a basic airway device or turning someone on their side. Children can be given 2 rescue breaths.
Apply or improvise a chest seal (for a hole in the chest) or needle decompression (for a tension pneumothorax as evidenced by tracheal deviation).
Give an emergency antidote, such as for a chemical weapon attack.
After life-saving interventions are performed, the triager assesses whether or not the person is breathing. If the person is not breathing, they are tagged as BLACK- they are currently or will be shortly dead.
If they are breathing, the triager asks the following:
Can the person obey commands or make purposeful movements?
Do they have a peripheral pulse (or a cap refill of <3 seconds on the hand if a pulse cannot be reliably felt through PPE?)
Not in respiratory distress?
Is major bleeding under control (with tourniquet or direct pressure)?
If the answer is NO to any questions above, the triager asks one final question: Assuming the current level of resources, could this person be expected to survive?
If that answer is also NO, the person is tagged as GREY.
GREY is a new category. People tagged as GREY will be re-evaluated every time the resources significantly change. This still probably means they are going to die, but at least there is a possibility that more rescuers or equipment will arrive and make it possible for them to be saved.
If the resources are such that the person IS likely to survive, they are tagged RED.
If all of the questions above are YES, but the person still has substantial injuries that require treatment, they are tagged as YELLOW.
If all the questions above are YES, and no major injuries are apparent, this person is tagged GREEN.
When it comes to treatment, RED are treated first, then YELLOW, then GREEN. GREY will be re-triaged into one of the above categories as circumstances change, or as BLACK if they no longer meet the criteria for RED/YELLOW/GREEN.
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beehindblueeyes · 2 days ago
Time period- Color and subgenre’s
I did say I was going to take a break from these for awhile and I am, but it’s on the condition of me actually having something to make a full post. Now I do!
For those unaware this is a series (all are tagged along with my Details series) of posts going into some stuff around the time period of the movie.
I started this series as I realized some people may not know a bunch about the 70s and hopefully it’ll help/inspire people to write more stuff set in the canon time. (Also hopefully help us move away from chat fics)
People are much more committed to their subgenre’s and their cliques. Now days while having a main interest or fashion style , people are much more inclined to have a little bit of everything. Back in the day if you’re goth you’re goth or if you’re punk you’re punk. Metal your metal- this is around “poser” being a actual insult/thing. (In context, Vance as a metalhead wouldn’t start listening to Pop- or at least be caught dead listening to it)
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That goes for clothes, music, lifestyle etc.
Another clothing trend is hair being generally? Fluffier? Even if it’s short it has a fluffy, bouncy blow out look. Fluff > curl (not to say shaggy curls like Vance’s weren’t popular as well just not as much)
Long hair. Mentioned hair before in previous ones and it did have a “rebel” connotation to it back then when it came to guys (beyond shoulder or to the ass) but it was also EVERYONE. also just? Longer hairstyles were just a thing - (I feel like today most guys have their hair cropped like extra short to their head-) styles like finney’s are like a short middle ground?
Short shorts. Short shorts everywhere. Same with cutt off’s (this is the beginning of it more so but)
Brown. Everything is brown. Like there is no way to underestimate how brown everything is. Woodgrain, wood paneling etc. I mentioned this before but I have examples. If it’s not wood it’s very likely to be warm/neutral tones.
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The rainbow is also absolutely everywhere! Design to clothes. Everywhere (we see it with Gwen’s one puffer coat). This was also wayyy before it was associated with the Gay community for added context. (It’s a personal peeve of mine for people using modern flags/symbols and phrasing for LGBT related stuff when it straight up wasn’t around at the time or was niche etc. i recommend looking up old symbols etc)
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Creative insults! A lot of stuff we consider “cheesy” now days were once actually a good insult or slang phrase. Moron, Dork, spaz etc (seriously old slang is a huge rabbit hole and they’re always so fun? I recommend looking it up there’s a lot of enthusiastic people with sites for slang and insults of the 70s and 80s)
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writingraven · 3 months ago
Writing Tips
Punctuating Dialogue
➸ “This is a sentence.”
➸ “This is a sentence with a dialogue tag at the end,” she said.
➸ “This,” he said, “is a sentence split by a dialogue tag.”
➸ “This is a sentence,” she said. “This is a new sentence. New sentences are capitalized.”
➸ “This is a sentence followed by an action.” He stood. “They are separate sentences because he did not speak by standing.”
➸ She said, “Use a comma to introduce dialogue. The quote is capitalized when the dialogue tag is at the beginning.”
➸ “Use a comma when a dialogue tag follows a quote,” he said.
“Unless there is a question mark?” she asked.
“Or an exclamation point!” he answered. “The dialogue tag still remains uncapitalized because it’s not truly the end of the sentence.”
➸ “Periods and commas should be inside closing quotations.”
➸ “Hey!” she shouted, “Sometimes exclamation points are inside quotations.”
However, if it’s not dialogue exclamation points can also be “outside”!
➸ “Does this apply to question marks too?” he asked.
If it’s not dialogue, can question marks be “outside”? (Yes, they can.)
➸ “This applies to dashes too. Inside quotations dashes typically express—“
“Interruption” — but there are situations dashes may be outside.
➸ “You’ll notice that exclamation marks, question marks, and dashes do not have a comma after them. Ellipses don’t have a comma after them either…” she said.
➸ “My teacher said, ‘Use single quotation marks when quoting within dialogue.’”
➸ “Use paragraph breaks to indicate a new speaker,” he said.
“The readers will know it’s someone else speaking.”
➸ “If it’s the same speaker but different paragraph, keep the closing quotation off.
“This shows it’s the same character continuing to speak.”
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lulilak · 4 months ago
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desmond-the-queer-dragon · 4 months ago
Came up with a great story idea. Can’t wait for my brain to make it so intricate in my head yet impossible to write out.
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annarts05 · 3 months ago
Fun Ways to Meet Characters
Thieves stealing important objects from the main characters and then being forced somehow into a found family situation
Saving a character’s life by doing something like taking an arrow/bullet
By losing a bet with a stranger and then teaming up
Gambling with a shifty character and getting really mad at them, only for them to later end up saving the other character’s life
Meeting the other in an arranged marriage and actually liking them (or really, really hating them)
Or having a chaotic dynamic where they irritate each other but they’re equally chaotic, so they become the mischievous duo in the found family
By bickering over the last piece of food at a banquet
Getting hired as a servant or maid, or some other serving position
By accidentally almost killing a character, only for them to join the found family and literally never stop bringing up that first meeting
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2soulscollide · 11 months ago
E.A. Deverell - FREE worksheets (characters, world building, narrator, etc.) and paid courses;
Hiveword - Helps to research any topic to write about (has other resources, too);
BetaBooks - Share your draft with your beta reader (can be more than one), and see where they stopped reading, their comments, etc.;
Charlotte Dillon - Research links;
Writing realistic injuries - The title is pretty self-explanatory: while writing about an injury, take a look at this useful website;
One Stop for Writers - You guys... this website has literally everything we need: a) Description thesaurus collection, b) Character builder, c) Story maps, d) Scene maps & timelines, e) World building surveys, f) Worksheets, f) Tutorials, and much more! Although it has a paid plan ($90/year | $50/6 months | $9/month), you can still get a 2-week FREE trial;
One Stop for Writers Roadmap - It has many tips for you, divided into three different topics: a) How to plan a story, b) How to write a story, c) How to revise a story. The best thing about this? It's FREE!
Story Structure Database - The Story Structure Database is an archive of books and movies, recording all their major plot points;
National Centre for Writing - FREE worksheets and writing courses. Has also paid courses;
Penguin Random House - Has some writing contests and great opportunities;
Crime Reads - Get inspired before writing a crime scene;
The Creative Academy for Writers - "Writers helping writers along every step of the path to publication." It's FREE and has ZOOM writing rooms;
Reedsy - "A trusted place to learn how to successfully publish your book" It has many tips, and tools (generators), contests, prompts lists, etc. FREE;
QueryTracker - Find agents for your books (personally, I've never used this before, but I thought I should feature it here);
Pacemaker - Track your goals (example: Write 50K words - then, everytime you write, you track the number of the words, and it will make a graphic for you with your progress). It's FREE but has a paid plan;
Save the Cat! - The blog of the most known storytelling method. You can find posts, sheets, a software (student discount - 70%), and other things;
I hope this is helpful for you!
(Also, check my blog if you want to!)
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lyralit · 2 months ago
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Anger is one expression of fight-or-flight mode — an automatic, instinctive reaction to a threat. In many cases, there is an underlying fear of being harmed. Thanks to autonomic nervous system arousal, the heart rate increases, pupils dilate, and the face may flush. Other signs of anger
Balling the fists
Crossing the arms tightly
Clenching the fists once arms are crossed
Tight-lipped smile
Clenched teeth
Shaking a finger like a club
Stabbing a finger at someone
Pupils dilate
Women will cross and uncross legs to draw attention to them
Mirroring – (usually unconsciously) mimicking the other person’s body language
Closed to Conversation
Keeping the hands in the pockets (esp. men)
Arms and legs crossed
Sitting back
Folding the hands together on a table (creates a barrier)
The “figure-four” leg cross (setting the ankle of one leg on the knee of the other) and then grabbing the lower half of the top leg with both hands.
Openness and Honesty
Exposure of the palms
Arms and legs unfolded
Leaning forward
Submissive Signals
Smiling – that’s why some people smile when they’re upset or afraid
Slumping the shoulders
Doing anything to appear smaller
Men in particular have a tendency to stroke or rub the nape of the neck when they’re upset. It acts as a self-soothing gesture to deal with a “pain in the neck.”
Crossed arms – arms act like a protective barrier
Self-hugging – arms are crossed, hands gripping upper arms
One-arm cross – one arm crosses the body to hold or touch the other arm – women keep a hand on a purse or bag strap to make this look more natural
Clutching a purse, briefcase, or bag with both arms
Adjusting cuffs or cuff-links (men’s version of the purse-strap grab)
Folding the hands together in front of the crotch (men)
Lying causes a subtle tingling in the face and neck, so the gestures below are attempts to eliminate that feeling
Covering the mouth – can be like a shh gesture, or they may cover the mouth completely – some people try to cover it by coughing
Touching or rubbing the nose or just below the nose – often a quick, small gesture, not a scratch
Rubbing the eyes (especially men)
Scratching the neck with the index finger
Superiority, Confidence, Power, Dominance
Steepling the fingers (aka setting the tips of the fingers together)
Folding the hands behind the back
Thumbs sticking out from pockets when hands are in pockets (can be front or back pockets)
Hands on hips
Straddling a chair
Hands folded behind the head while sitting up (in men)
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moonlitinks · a month ago
ways you can further develop your main character
give them a misbelief
no characters have a personality when the plot starts. all of them have backstories, a past, and a mindset that they grew up with!
basically, a misbelief is the wrong mindset that they grew up with, and is also a belief that will be restructured by the end of your novel.
this not only shows character growth and development as their mind is "restructured" or they learn their life lesson, but also drives the internal plot of your story, which differs from the external (or action) plot that most people seem to read.
+ this gives readers a deeper insight to your character!
give them a goal
every character has a goal, or something they want in their lives. having them strive for it would essentially drive your plot, and may also help you dig deeper into your character's motivations!
this goal doesn't always need to be achieved, or may be impossible to (for example, someone wanting to meet a loved one who turns out to be dead; they may have not reached their goal, but it took them on a journey)
this goal should also be concrete if possible! vague ones like "they want to be happy," isn't very helpful. what do they think will make them happy?
(side note: wanting everything to be the way that it is can also be a goal, cause they're striving to make things go back to the way they were!)
more notes / explanations here! most of these notes in this post are taken from story genius by lisa cron, and i thought they might help. please take all this information with a grain of salt, and maybe use it in a way that'll work best for you! <3
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inky-duchess · a year ago
Writer's Guide: Writing about Alcoholic Drinks and Cocktails
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Or how to write believable bar and nightclub scenes. I often find myself helping friends with their WIPs and often it as a bartender, I find myself having to correct them on bar and mixology terminology. So here's my quick guide to keeping your lingo on the straight and narrow.
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DASH/SPLASH: a drop of a mixer such as juice or flavouring.
MIXER: non alcholic beveraged served with the measure of alcohol in the same glass.
NEAT: Plain, without any addition of ice or a mixture. Just the alcohol.
ON THE ROCKS: Served over Ice.
STRAIGHT UP: The cocktail is chilled with ice and strained into a glass with no ice
DIRTY – if somebody asks for a dirty martini, you add olive juice, the more juice the dirtier it is
DRY- A dry martini includes a drop of vermouth and an extra dry martini contains a drop of scotch swirled in the glass and drained before adding the gin
BACK – a ‘back’ is a drink that accompanies an alcholic beverage such as water or Coke, but isn't mixed.
GARNISH – something added to a drink such as a lime or lemon or orange.
TWIST - a twist is literally a twist of fruit skin in the drink.
BITTERS – a herbal alcoholic blend added to cocktails.
RIMMED - the glass is coated in salt or sugar to enhance the taste.
VIRGIN- non alcoholic
MOCKTAIL- a virgin cocktail
DOUBLE - Two measures of the same alcohol in the same glass. A bartender can only legally serve a double in the same glass. They cannot serve you a triple.
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COCKTAIL SHAKER - it is a metal cup that fits into a glass, used to shake the components of your drink together with ice to chill it.
STRAINER- used to seperate ice in the shaker from the liquid within as you pour it into the glass.
MEASURES- these are little metal cylinders meant to measure out the pours of the alcohol. You pour the alcohol from the bottle into the measure and then put it into the glass. It's imperative that the right measure goes into the glass or the drink will taste of shit.
BAR SPOON – a long spoon meant to mix the drink.
OPTIC- it is a mechanism that attaches a bottle to an automatic pourer. The bartender usually fits the glass under the spout and pushes up to release the amount which cuts off at the single measure.
SHOT GLASS- a shot glass is a small glass to contain one measure
PINT GLASS- a glass used for serving pints of lager or ale
HALF PINT GLASS - a tulip shaped glass half the measure of a pint glass
SPEEDWELL/TAPS/DRAFT: are the taps used to pour beer from kegs stored under the bar floor.
SLIM JIM/HIGH BALL GLASS- It is a tall straight holding 8 to 12 ounces and used for cocktails served on the rocks such as a Gin and Tonic.
ROCKS GLASS - or an old fashioned glass, it is short and round. These glasses are used for drinks such as Old Fashioneds or Sazerac
COUPE GLASS- Are broad round stemmed glasses used for cocktails that are chill and served without ice such as a Manhattan, Boulevardier or a Gimlet
MARTINI GLASS - a martini glass is that classic stemmed "v" shaped glass, used to serve drinks without mixers such as Martini and Cosmopolitans
MARGARITA GLASS - is a large, round bowl like glass with a broad and a tall stem used for Margaritas and Daiquiris
HURRICANE GLASS- a tall tulip-like shaped glass with a flared rim and short stem. It holds 20 ounces which means it is the perfect glass to serve iced cocktails in such as Pina Colada, Singapore Sling, Hurricane
Alcoholic Drinks
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Vodka- Vodka is made from potatoes or fermented cereal grains. It has a strong taste and scent. It is usually consumed neat with a mixer such as Coke or Orange juice or cranberry juice or in cocktails like Martini, Bloody Mary and Cosmopolitan.
Whisky/Whiskey- Whiskey is a distilled alcoholic beverage, made from fermented grain mash such as barley, corn, rye, and wheat. It gets its flavour form being fermented in casks for long period of time. When serving a whiskey, one asks whether they want ice or a mixer. Everyone has their own preference. I prefer mine like myself, strong and Irish. Scotch is Scottish Brewed whisky.
Rum- Rum is made by fermenting and distilling sugarcane molasses/juice. It is aged in oak barrels. It has a sweet taste.
Beer: is made out of cereal grains and served chilled in bottles or pulled from taps/speedwells.
Ale: Ale in the middle ages referred to beer brewed without hops (a kind of flowering plant that gives beer its bitter taste). It is sweeter and would typically have a fruity aftertaste.
Stout- is a darker beer sometimes brewed from roasted malt, coming in a sweet version and dry version, the most famous stout being Guinness.
Poitín- (pronounced as pot-cheen) is made from cereals, grain, whey, sugar beet, molasses and potatoes. It is a Dangerous Drink (honestly i still don't know how I ended up in that field with a traffic cone and a Shetland pony) and technically illegal. Country folk in Ireland used to brew it in secrets in stills hidden on their land.
Vermouth: Is made from infused with roots, barks, flowers, seeds, herbs, spices, brandy but vermouth is classed aromatized wine. It comes sweet or dry
Gin- is made from juniper, coriander, citrus peel, cinnamon, almond or liquorice and grain alcohol. Gin has a strong scent and taste and is usually served in a martini or a tonic water.
Schnapps- refers to any strong, clear alcoholic beverage. It is considered one of the best types of spirits because of its pure and delicate aroma. Lesson: never drink peach schnapps.
Cocktails and Drinks
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Irish Coffee: an Irish coffee is adding whiskey to coffee and sugar and topping it with cream. As a bartender, I would honestly rather cut my arm off than make one of these.
Baby Guinness: Is a shot made by pouting Tia Maria or Kaluah into a shot glass and spreading Baileys on the top so it looks like a small pint of Guinness.
Silver Bullet: a shot of mixed tequila and sambuca.
Long Island Iced Tea:  The Long Island contains vodka, gin, tequila, light rum, lemon juice, triple sec and cola. It has a real kick.
Mai Tai: is made with light and dark rum, lime juice, orange curacao, orgeat syrup and rock candy syrup and served with a mint garnish.
Manhattan: The Manhattan is made with rye whiskey, sweet vermouth and bitters.
Margarita: The margarita is made with tequila, cointreau and lime juice.
Mojito: a mojito is made with muddled mint, white rum, lime juice, simple syrup and soda.
Martini: a martini is made of gin, dry vermouth and garnished with a lemon twist or olives.
Mimosa: a mimosa is a made with sparkling wine and orange juice.
Mint Julep: Made with Kentucky bourbon, simple syrup, mint leaves and crushed ice
Pina Colada: is made with white rum, dark rum, pineapple juice and coconut cream
Screwdriver: Vodka and Orange juice
Tequila Sunrise: tequila, orange juice and grenadine
Tom Collins: made with spiked lemonade, sparkling water, lemon juice, simple syrup and gin
Whiskey Sour: is made with powdered sugar, seltzer, lemon juice and whiskey.
White Russian: made with vodka, coffee liqueur and cream.
Black Russian: made with two parts coffee liqueur and five parts vodka.
Gin and Tonic: gin served with tonic water
Bloody Mary: made with vodka and tomato juice mixed with lemon juice, hot sauce, Worcestershire sauce, horseradish, fresh herbs, brown sugar and cracked black pepper.
Brandy Alexander: served straight up and made with brandy, cognac, creme de cacao and cream
Cosmopolitan: Made with citrus vodka, Cointreau, cranberry juice and fresh lime juice
Daiquiri: made with rum, lime juice and sugar.
Gimlet: gin and lime juice
My Top 10 Bartending Rules and Responsibilities
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Overpouring is never an option. You can seriously hurt somebody by overpouring, not to mention spoil the drink and ruin your sales. You only serve people what they ask and never more.
When somebody has had enough, you stop serving them. After a while, you know when to cut somebody off.
Never leave bottles on the counter or in reach of customers. Your expensive spirits should never be in reach of anybody but you.
If you tell somebody your selling them premium and top shelf alcohol, you cannot substitute with cheaper licqor. It's illegal.
As a bartender, your eyes always have to be scanning a crowd. You can't leave people hanging.
The golden rule - if you see somebody messing with someone's drink, you chuck it if you can or warn the person. And you get that son of a bitch out of your pub.
50% of the job is cleaning. You have to clean your tools constantly. You cannot reuse measures and spouts, you have to wash everything. Beer traps are clean out every night, rubber mats are washed and anything you have used has to be clean.
You have to hand dry your glasses. You never polish a pint glass as it fucks up the pint. You polish your cocktail glasses, shot glasses and straight glasses.
If someone seems down or on their own, you try make conversation. Often you'll hear some disturbing stuff but always try lend an ear or make everyone feel included.
If you break a glass in the ice bucket, you got to get rid of the ice.
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mangocherri · 18 days ago
Oblivious pining prompts:
Accidentally admitting that the other is really pretty, leading to both of them getting very flustered
Quickly sewing back the loose button of their shirt that came off at the last minute, realising that you two are extremely close
Pretending to be married for reasons, feeling very giddy whenever someone refers to you two as a couple
Walking past a busy crowd, hands entwining on their own and then realising it after someone points it out
Rambling about something you both love and all you can do is stare at them lovingly, when suddenly they also turn to look at you and now you're both just staring at each other
Making lucky charms for each other, being reminded of the other whenever they look at it
Fixing each other's clothes (+ if they say "you look good")
Learning more about their interests so they have a common thing to talk about
Thinking that the other doesn't like them in that way, while their friends watch both of them become an incoherent mess in front of each other, wondering when they'll finally ask each other out
Always finding excuses to stay with each other
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the-darkish-side-of-specs · 9 months ago
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Oh sweet mother that’s useful
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Here’s just the template
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beehindblueeyes · 9 hours ago
You think they just keep finding black balloons afterwards? Well after the disappearances. Well after the murder and the bodies being discovered and claimed. The balloons keep being found.
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Think about it. They’re unpredictable. Most of the balloons just fly off in the first place, they only mentioned finding some at griffin and Bruce’s abduction. The rest… who’s to say. Maybe they struck a retention wire and landed on some poor woman’s garden gnomes. Maybe they’re up in the mountains someplace. Someone’s yard. The trees. The bushes. On store fronts or the side walks.
Maybe a kid finds one and plays with it not knowing what it means…
It is the biggest and harshest reminder that five kids aren’t home in their beds and will never be again.
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writingraven · 3 months ago
Writing Tips
Descriptions in Between Dialogue
⤠ how characters interact with the environment
⇝ moving something, picking something up, looking somewhere
⤠ how the environment interacts with the characters
⇝ weather, other character’s actions or movements
⤠ gestures
⇝ facial expressions, body language
⤠ shifts in position
⇝ standing, sitting, leaning, shifting weight, crossing arms/legs
⤠ physical reactions
⇝ body temperature, fidgeting, heart rate, character quirks
⤠ environmental descriptions
⇝ descriptions using the five senses, setting, character’s appearances
⤠ internal dialogue
⇝ emotional reaction to what was said, reflection of past experiences, connections to other characters/settings/actions
➵ I want to reiterate… descriptions using the five senses ; when in doubt, think of the five senses your character is experiencing and pick what best moves the story forward
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the-bitch-mob · a year ago
fuck it. be creative even if you never really *make* anything. write out plot synopses of stories and then move on. design OCs you'll never use. make mood boards and concept art and don't do anything with them. life's too short to forget everything that inspired you and creation doesn't have to be "complete" to be worth the time you put into it.
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Hello! I'd like to share with you a character work game! I call it "Six Secrets" and honestly it's a work in progress but I'm sharing it anyway
List six secrets that your character has.
1 is an open secret
2 is a secret the people close to your character know
3 is a secret that your character wouldn't really care about getting out
4 is a secret exactly one person knows anything about
5 is a secret no one knows about but they sort of want to come out/to tell someone
6 is a secret no one knows and they desperately don't want anyone to know about.
You can also decide who knows and how
The secrets don't have to have anything to do with your actual plot! The secrets can have super low or super high stakes! It doesn't matter! But you will absolutely have a better idea of your character's intentions and state of mind, and you may wind up coming up with some new plot points/obstacles to play with
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whatagrump · a year ago
Apparently a lot of people get dialogue punctuation wrong despite having an otherwise solid grasp of grammar, possibly because they’re used to writing essays rather than prose. I don’t wanna be the asshole who complains about writing errors and then doesn’t offer to help, so here are the basics summarized as simply as I could manage on my phone (“dialogue tag” just refers to phrases like “he said,” “she whispered,” “they asked”):
“For most dialogue, use a comma after the sentence and don’t capitalize the next word after the quotation mark,” she said.
“But what if you’re using a question mark rather than a period?” they asked.
“When using a dialogue tag, you never capitalize the word after the quotation mark unless it’s a proper noun!” she snapped.
“When breaking up a single sentence with a dialogue tag,” she said, “use commas.”
“This is a single sentence,” she said. “Now, this is a second stand-alone sentence, so there’s no comma after ‘she said.’”
“There’s no dialogue tag after this sentence, so end it with a period rather than a comma.” She frowned, suddenly concerned that the entire post was as unasked for as it was sanctimonious.
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