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py-dreamer · 2 months

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MY Wish rewrite pt2:

Hai there! back again! Ok so. Without further ado, let's carry on with the show shall we?

I just want to clarify, Asha gets big sister vibes. Like Cinderella or Tiana or Mirabel, she's very supportive and emotionally available

Ok so y'know "At All Costs"? Upon first view, I interpreted it as a song between a parent and child since I refuse to see the alternative between king and 17 year old. SO we take that and I want to make something like a...leitmotif I think it's called?

At the beginning I want Magnifico and Amaya to sing a lullaby to lil Asha looking over their new kingdom. I want it to have like a leitmotif (similar melody) to at all costs. Obviously change the lyrics to something appropriate but keep the theme of 'promising to ALWAYS love someone' and the theme of 'at all costs' as well as 'protection' and have softer instrumentals

We could have something akin to "You'll be in my heart" from Tarzan or "Remember me" from Coco

Have Asha one day find out of the outside world through an old book and confront her parents who don't see the issue and shut her down

she hears them discussing that when they take her wish on her birthday, she'll be more docile and easier to bend to their will and be their perfect obedient daughter

Learning she's basically about to be stripped of free will runs into the woods and sings her song and wishes on a small star

(And of the love of cheese, give the songwriter more than 3 weeks! let them be able to adapt to the rest of the movie)

I saw this concept of when Aster descends they're in their plushie form then Asha accidentally plants a kiss on their cheek and BAM they suddenly turn into their mischevious shiny self I wanna keep that

I want a scene where Asha early on tries out pixie dust. She's wobbly, unconfident and flying everywhere like the start of her character arc.

this would mainly be based off that flying/dancing in space scene in Wall-E...only much more chaos and Asha is doesn't really trust Aster to this extent atm

Have Aster be able to rally a crowd in a heartbeat. He's so charismatic and enchanting he draws everyone's attention around him; they are virtually never quiet

He acts very confident and gets easily distracted, trying to turn everything into a game and kinda looks down on humans at first being easy to entertain and understand. After all he's watched them from afar for Centuries! this should be a piece of cake!

and at first it is but then Aster and Asha end up finding one of the friends/dwarves somehow. Doesn't have to be all of them, just 1 or 2 (hell it could even be Asha's 'grandpa' Sabino they're not related here though)

Asha gets the idea to help someone get their wish by themselves without Magnifico's help, it can be very simple like perhaps winning a small competition,

Eventually the person starts to doubt themselves and remembers something sad and Aster's magic starts to fade, he panics and tries to cheer the person up by telling to forget about these sad feelings, using jokes to make them laugh ect like Joy from Inside out but it doesn't work

Aster keeps panicking, the person's still sad and he starts to fade, Asha notices this and tries to comfort the person but not by ignoring their sadness but embracing it. Aster at first is annoyed but notices that when they talk their feelings out, the person does feel better and feels confused

Asha reminds the person of something, telling them to keep their chin up or something just being very patient and supportive and Aster marvels at this

for the first time in his appearance he's quiet at this. They thought that humans were simple creatures with greedy simple wishes without much complexity but witnessing this small connection has them reflect a little.

(we see our class clown start to fall for our sunshine girl)

The person regains hope and tries again, just when everyone including Aster thinks the person is going to lose, (except Asha, she believes) the person against all odds succeeds and our protagonists marvel at the posibillities of people achieving wishes without magical intervention but with just a little support

through Aster's magical shenanigans and a bit of carelessness, a barn in the forest is set on fire

this catches the attention of the royal couple since there hasn't been a dangerous incident like this in Rosas since its creation

the two witness this and Magnifico in particular is shaken

we witness flashbacks of how horrible the burning of his home lands were, we see the trauma and for the first time in decades, the king feels weak.

through Amaya's levelheadedness she puts out the fire, settles everyone down, tells everyone not to worry for there is nothing she and her king can't handle then pulls her husband aside to comfort him in private

we see her support him when he snaps and tells her they had to go back to the castle

they had been aware of the landing of the star but in their hubris, they tell themselves they'll worry about it later

at the castle the two fret over the safety of their kingdom and Magnifico admits he felt weak before his wife tells him then they needed to do something about that.

using their magic they create magic guards to scourge the kingdom and find these perpetrators and make the guards menacing and scary

something akin to the shadows of Dr Facilier or the evil spirits of Rasputin (from Anastacia not Ra-Ra-Rasputin), have some fun with the imagery

back with our protagonists, they camp in hiding, the person they helped included since they were spotted with them, its night and Asha is very worried

she knows how powerful her parents are and fears what will happen to them, especially Aster. So she stands guard for the night, telling everyone not to worry and rest while she stays on guard

it gets late and Aster still finds Asha awake, they worry about her and tell her to sleep that they will be safe

to help her rest, Aster and Asha share the names of the stars and constellations to each other, their human given names, their stories ect and Aster tells Asha of his parents, the two stars to the right, Raymond and Evangaline (I love this idea) Asha slowly falls asleep on his shoulder. She is lulled to sleep to the tune of a twinkling lullaby

then in the dream world, she finds...Aster? And they can talk?!

its like a more ethereal version of Rosas, where Asha's heart lies but more magical like the concept of fairy land or the fae

You see, in the mortal world, humans can't understand the tinkling language of Stars but in the world of dreams is where the humans and wishes are connected because: "A dream is a wish your heart makes" (it makes me squeal and cringe to make that reference)

Asha asks Aster about when he was all quiet and he mentions, he didn't really believe in humans at first and asks the princess what she sees in them, like she said they are all reliant, ignorant sheep who rely on her parents and seem happy so why go through all this trouble

she answers how everyone has potential and deserves a choice and humans are much more complex than he thinks, we see that fondness in her eyes and a twinkle of a fondness for her in his

then Aster asks Asha had she ever thought of what she wanted outside of the people of Rosas. Cause the wishes he's seen are mostly selfish or for one person's benefit and she confesses how sometimes she's so worked up about everyone's wants she feels selfish about desiring support and attention herself and Aster affirms to her that she is one of the most selfless, interesting humans he's ever seen and if anything she deserves all the love her parents get due to her willingness to comfort everyone, then we have a peaceful quiet moment (Aster most definetely blushes and looks away)

good feelings all around

Then everyone's favourite...AT ALL COSTS BABY WOOOOOOO!!!!!!

(SEE I TOLD YOU I'D WORK AT ALL COSTS IN HERE SOMEHOW)

NOW we have the cinderella, whole new world, howl's moving castle floating dancy scene we've all been waiting for

I want these two to dance in the air using pixie dust, it should appear light and airy as all hell and they should be having fun more than anything.

Have their clothes bounce a bit to show that floatiness

I WANT ASTER TO BRIDE CARRY ASHA AT ONE POINT (or other way round I don't mind) AND PUT AN ASTER FLOWER IN HER HAIR

MAKE THIS TWINK KISS HER HAND ON ONE KNEE, MAKE THIS HIMBO A GODAMN GENTLEMAN LIKE A KNIGHT

GIVE ASHA A PRETTY DRESS MAKEOVER, SPARKLES, GLIMMER SHINE EVERYTHING!!! SHE'S A PRINCESS WHO'S CELEBRATING THE 100 ANIVERSARY OF DISNEY

taking a pause cause Tumblr told me so

regardless of the design, she should have a show stopping dress, something memorable at least, change up her hair a little

and to show her gaining confidence, give her a crown she'd been denied all her life

I want her to give the vibes and shock us like when we saw the live action 2015 cinderella dress. It doesn't have to be big and poofy but it has to be memorable and evoke that same magic

Aster gets down on one knee and swears to help Asha achieve her goals and protect her and Asha swears the same

Anyways after that whole dance sequence, Aster wakes up first, they smile at Asha still asleep and want to find a flower for her

they leave and go to find a perfect flower for their princess but out of no where get captured by the magic guards sent by magnifico

Asha and the friend hears the distressed jingles of Aster and go to help, the guards are scary as all hell and they have to hide

Show off Asha's wits, magical capabilities and bravery by having her come up with a plan, jump into action and use the magic she's never actually practiced and have Aster be amazed at how such a shy girl would jump into the line of fire to protect those she loves

the guards are forced to leave, our main duo make their escape and decide if they want to stand up to the tyranical rule, it was now or never since they've been spotted

the guard return to the palace with nothing in hand, the two are starting to lose their grip on sanity, their trauma and anxiety of this unforseen force could be their downfall and now there was a rogue magician helping the star?

NOW we have the villain song (and for god sakes disney use a MUSICAL songwriter not a pop songwriter for your MUSICAL ANIMATED MOVIE)

instead of a dumb solo by Magnifico about how he lets his citizens live for free and stuff, we get a moral conflict duet about the issue at hand

have the book call out to them, tempting them, and the other trying to snap them out of it but it fails

we could have something honoring Hellfire with that intense choir and the two convinced they're in the right, descending into madness

have intense colors, play with shadows and that temptation where they have to weigh the risk of this evil magic or sucumb to this new magic, keep the theme of protection

have them repeat to themselves, this is for the sake of the people, if they relinquish control, the kingdom will fall into chaos, the people NEED them ASHA needs them

have them bring up news of some magic shenaniganary, their people are questioning them and they say how their 'children' are misguided and their fragile minds need to be protected

use the leitmotif of At All Costs at one point maybe to highlight this deep devotion and love twisted into something dark and obsessive to commit to their duties by whatever means

Meanwhile Asha and Aster rally up the townsfolk, Asha takes the lead this time and use the friend as living proof they don't need someone else to dictate their desires, that there is more to life and it's so much more rewarding when you work hard for your achievements

we have a war song like in the movie, the people vs the royals, Aster gifts Asha a magic wand, so she can practice her magic

then we have an epic battle all of Rosas banning together in unique ways to get their wishes back but the villains this time have the upper hand

they discover Asha is working on their side and are shocked and betrayed, rage boils and bubbles in them at the traitor who've they've sheltered and raised for years

they tell her one more time to put an end to this nonsense, give them the magic impostor and they can all return to normal

Asha tells her parents no for the first time but then they use their magic to threaten the people of Rosas

Seeing Asha so distressed, Aster summons magic for a very powerful attack, Magnifico and Amaya do the same when Asha really notices everyone at a real risk of dying and even if one party wins, there will be many casualties

she tells them to stop and asks her parents, if she gives up this rebellion, if she gives her magic up altogether, will they leave the people and Aster alone? She offers up her wish for her people to be happy and safe

they agree, Aster is disapointed, tells her not to give in, think about the freedom she wants but Asha sees no other choice

Magifico says he'll leave Aster alone but just as Aster turns his back, he sends out one lethal shot which Asha sees and blocks with her own body

her parents are horrified, after all they did, after all they sacrificed to protect their little girl, eventually she was turned to stone by their own hands

Aster is distraught, he is in tears as he watches his princess slowly freeze into stone as she smiles and whispers to him

"I will protect you at all costs..."

In anguish, Magnifico sends out one more spell which Aster uses Asha's wand to deflect back to husband and wife

Idk how they die, maybe in a burst of sparkles, maybe turned into stone as well and pushed off the edge but personally my favorite disney villain deaths are the ones caused by the villain's own actions (think Clayton hanging himself in Tarzan), yea I want something like that

then the people all congregate and all wish for their princess who sacrificed everything for them to come back and through Aster's magic, she does!!

wooo yay!!

anywho, the day is saved and Asha fufills her wish to help others by becoming the fairy godmother because sometimes some wishes require a little push

but Aster must return to the sky and we get a bittersweet ending between our lovebirds

Aster wishing to inspire people and light their way, becomes the morningstar who rises before the sun

The kingdom of Rosas will always have a special place in Asha's heart but now she lets the people explore the world to learn for themselves what they want, let them work hard and stays to lead the remaining Rosas citizens to teach them of the outside world

she uses her parent's old office to practice magic and in the credits we see a sequence of the people she helps

and finally when she goes to sleep and appears in the dream world, we hear a familiar voice behind her and she smiles (like when Gwen approaches Miles at the end of into the spiderverse)

Ok woo! what a mouthful

the goat?

ehh, we won't miss much. No talking goat, the animals can be sentient and help out but no butt jokes please.

Also Aster can talk to animals, cause magic

I understand the idea of making the movie look like a digital painting and a 2d look and it looks decent enough but for a disney movie? A 100 year aniversary no less? It looks cheap. They specifically didn't use motion blurr but then it just looked like a Tv show and cheap

For my hypothetical Wish, do something stylistic that looks purposeful like Puss in Boots TLW rather than it just looking unrendered or hell take a page out of Klaus' book use 3D models and make it look 2D

But anyways that's all from me, I don't look forward to Moana 2 but hope you enjoyed!

#disney wish #just a drabble #ig this is more than a drabble #wish rewrite #wish reimagined #wish star #starboy #wish 2023 #star x asha #king magnifico #queen amaya #princess asha #we were robbed #amaya x magnifico

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dragonfly0808 · 11 months

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Stella: The Thesis

If you’ve read my Fate rant, you know I’ve got a lot of feelings about Stella, so here we go.

Again SPOILERS IF YOU’RE NOT UP TO DATE WITH THE REWRITE, like at least up til Chapter 38 of Season 3

Also, TRIGGER WARNING: Discussion of Eating Disorders

First Things First

The first words in my character sheet to summarize her character in the OG are: Spectacular Diva who doesn’t always think before talking.

I think we can all agree that a big point Stella’s character was to combat the mean blonde girl stereotype without making her a tomboy. Letting her love sparkle and be dramatic without being mean. The only times that Stella is mean are when her brain-to-mouth filter fail and she always makes up for it.

I always loved Stella’s character, especially post season 3, and I was very specific about what I wanted to do with her character. Making her a little more mature without taking away any of her Stella charm.

Stella is a perfect character for a ‘fake it till you make it’ mentality and to hide any insecurity behind a kind of ‘armor’. Fashion is Stella’s armor if that makes sense, and she is probably the most insecure in the group, even if she’s been working on it since even before the rewrite begins.

My very first major change is to change the reason she took a sabbatical year. Instead of blowing up a lab carelessly and her dad having to make a ‘generous donation’ to get her back into Alfea, Stella choses to take a year off to work on her mental health and her ED.

So, I chose for her to suffer from Anorexia as a response to 1) a need for validation from her mom, who has a bad habit of commenting on her body, 2) incredible stress from her parents fighting all the time and 3) the pressure of being a future queen affecting her a lot.

We only really see Stella post-healing from her ED, but we still get to see her not taking care of herself as much as she should when very stressed or very emotional, and the group (especially Sky, Brandon, Tecna and Bloom) tend to keep an eye on her to make sure she’s eating properly.

Stella’s at her core, a very caring person. Someone once commented that, while Bloom will be the one to lead the girls in battle, once it’s all over, Stella is the one they look to and the one to take care of all the girls and I feel like that’s a perfect summary of who Stella is as a friend.

Stella feels a lot of responsability towards the girls, both because she’s the oldest and because she just loves them with all her heart and would do anything for them.

We often see her trying to take care of her own emotions on her own or even shoving her feelings down in order to comfort the other girls. (Not talking to Brandon because she doesn’t want him to worry about her, getting her emotions/powers under control to comfort Aisha, etc)

Even though she’s an only child, Stella is very much an older sister. She jokes and teases and is just a little annoying because its fun to her, but the second things get serious, she’s the one they look to for comfort or for a safe place. The first time we see this is in Season 1 when Flora has a breakdown, the other girls freeze because they’ve never seen Flora like this and they’re not sure what to do, Stella instantly takes over, gets her into comfy pijamas, tells the teachers they’ll take the day off and makes the decision to call in someone else to give Flora what she needs at the moment. Like Musa says, ‘Flora is so mature sometimes I forget Stella’s the oldest.’

Another way we see that her caring is her main trait is her dedication to be a good future queen.

Stella is incredibly close with her personal guards Sua and Lola, sees them as mother figures and she knows the names of almost the entire castle personal. She takes as many courses as she can and is not ashamed to ask for extra classes with subjects like Economy so that when her time comes, she can be the queen that Solaria deserves.

This comes into play with her Enchantix, she dies protecting her dad, protecting Chimera even though at the moment Chimera is trying to steal her place, protecting two guards.

We truly see who Stella is with the entire Chimera situation in s3, she knows what it’s like to be 15 and insecure and kinda hate yourself. And she knows what it’s like to feel like she’s alone. So she gives Chimera what her friends once gave to her. Hope, warmth and a chance to remake herself.

Stella takes Chimera in as her little sister even after everything. Because she understands and she cannot not care about her.

Stella’s main trait, that never changes is that she is caring and she will do anything for the people she loves.

Thoughts Behind Main Relationships

Bloom: Bloom is Stella’s person. Like I’ve mentioned, they have a very Taylor Swift, invisible string kind of friendship. They were always meant to be friends.

To Stella, Bloom is part of her very soul, her very being. If Stella is the sun then Bloom is the moon, the two are connected in a way that neither can quite describe.

To Stella, Bloom is safety, she can be vulnerable and weak and just show herself with Bloom and she knows that if she breaks, Bloom will be there to help pull her back together or to be strong for the both of them.

That’s something that Stella has never truly allowed herself to feel before, even with her closest friends. Bloom is the one that she trusts to put her back together if she ever breaks. Because she’d do the same for her.

Brandon: Brandon and Stella have known each other for two years before season 1 and from the moment they met they were drawn to each other.

Brandon somehow saw right through Stella’s facade of confidence that she wore back in the day, and he was intrigued by who she really was. She was a bit intimidated by this but was also intrigued.

It took them a long time to admit their feelings but they have a relationship founded in friendship, softness and trust. They’ve seen each other at rock bottom, they know that they’ll stay no matter what. They feel safe with each other.

Brandon thinks Stella is beautiful of course, but that is not why he fell in love with her, it was pretty much everything else. And Stella didn’t fall for him for his looks either, she fell for the boy who’s a family man and takes care of his four younger sisters and who never hesitated to help Sky and who is just a protector at his core and who always believed in her.

Their love is, ‘I’ve seen you at your worst, I’ve seen what you hide from the world, I know exactly who you are and I am so in love with every aspect and shade of you that I don’t know how I could ever not love you. I know that you’re insecure deep down and I understand that and there is such comfort in how knowing we are of each other that somehow, after a life-time of being terrified to be vulnerable, being weak with you is easier than it should be and all fear goes away when you hold me.’

Sky: Sky and Stella have known each other since birth. They’ve been best friends since they were less than two years old and have always had each other’s back.

One of the major changes I made to season 1 was having Stella know about the switcharoo between Sky and Brandon, mostly because, since she’s known Sky her whole life, they couldn’t really keep it a secret from her.

This formed a dynamic for the trio and made them the closest subunit in season 1 since they’ve known each other the longest.

Stella and Sky are two kids who bonded as kids but continued to deepen their bond as they both realized the weight on their shoulders due to being the future rulers of their respective planets.

These two are definetely siblings. They both had somewhat strict mothers so when together, they love to get to just be goofy teenagers. Their friendship is one of ‘We both have so much to do and a lot of weight on our shoulders but when we’re together we can let go and try to trip each other into a fountain for the fun of it and stick out our tongues just because we can and I know you’d never get mad at me over something like that. But you know that if you even need anything I will be right here and nothing will stop me from helping you.’

Who is Stella in this Rewrite?

Stella is someone who is learning to love herself and come into her own. To accept her insecurities and learn from them.

She is the kind of person who is goofy and has so much personality that you can’t help but just notice when they walk into the room. She is always making people laugh, but the second that things go dire, she is the first to jump to protect her friends. Once the battle is over, she’ll be the first to comfort the others.

Stella is a complex young woman. Who has immense passion and love and care within her and who uses all of that in every single relationship that she has. She pours her love into her studies to be a good queen someday.

She is a woman who has gone through hating herself to starting to truly realize that she is allowed to be proud of herself and even admire who she has become in the face of adversity.

Stella is someone who’s caring at her very core and who shows that care in everything that she does.

Stella is a girl filled to the brim with personality and care and strength. And it shows in everything that she does.

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Masterlist

Stella Moodboard

Stella’s Instagram

Bloom and Stella Moodboard

Stella and Brandon Moodboard

Stella and Sky Moodboard

Please comment on this one cause I had a bit of a tough time wording what I wanted to say this time around (that’s why this one took so long) so I’d love to know your thoughts!

#winx club #winx rewrite #winx #winx headcannon #winx fanfic #winx stella #winx headcanons #winx club rewrite #winx headcannons #winx brandon #winx headcanon

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chartreuseian · 20 days

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For the fic writer ask: 🍉, 🍭, and 🌮! :)

Hey 😊

🍉Are you a pantser or a plotter?

Hmm. More of a pantser, I'd say. At least in the beginning. Often I have an idea for a single scene or chapter that serves as the inspiration for the rest of the story and so then I just start writing towards it (or writing it). Then once the story is taking shape I'll sketch out the rest of the plot, even if it's just events or topics I need to hit to justify the ending.

But with oneshots and shorter series, 100% pantser. It often results in me discarding a large number of early drafts, but rewrites stopped scaring me a while ago (though they totally still annoy the hell out of me!!)

🍭What's been your most challenging story to write, and why?

I don't know if any particular story itself has been a challenge to write from a plot standpoint, but I really struggle with motivation to finish. If I've had the idea long enough and enough of the pieces of it have appeared in my brain, it can be a real struggle to convince myself to write it. Because if I know how each scene looks/feels and I'm satisfied with it, then I don't always feel the need to write it out to share. 🌮How do you balance the desire to write for yourself versus the desire to write for an audience?

Ugh. Good question, my dude. It's hard when the majority of what I post gets almost zero interaction which I totally understand, but like I mentioned before, fandom has changed sooo much since I started and that it can be really overwhelming to put all that time into something and have no one connect with it.

BUT! I got back into writing at the end of last year entirely for me (I was writing for at least a month and a half before I started posting again) as a way to sort of reclaim my hobbies (I write too much for work and it killed my love). So whenever I find myself getting frustrated or down about not reaching people the way I used to, I make a point of writing the next chapter/fic entirely for myself and what I want to see happen which helps, even if it does sometimes mean that the chapters end up wildly OOC and entirely too schmoopy. Because if no one is gonna read it, why not make it exactly what I am craving 😅

#thank you :)#writing #fanfic

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undertale-writing-times · 1 year

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I think the "I think I'm in love with you" prompt with Lover would be really sweet!

I had to rewrite this one like... 5 times so I hope you like it! Haha.

Lover was pretty happy with the life that she was living. Sure, sometimes the sexual things that she had to do with other monsters were annoying; it was just something that they needed to do though, so she never cared too much. Of course, now that they were above ground, they didn't have to do it like that anymore! Frisk showed them that love didn't have to come from lust.

They were something called, what was it again? Asexual, so they didn't feel any type of sexual attraction. It made a lot of sense, otherwise, how could they have not wanted to be with her?! Everyone, and I mean everyone, wanted a piece of her and she wasn't sorry for admitting it. Her brother didn't quite do the best with that kind of stuff, getting too attached too quickly.

A while ago, Lover had been going around the store trying to find everything that had been on her list, and that was going well until she noticed that the thing that she wanted to get, was too high and she couldn't reach it.

Lover huffs, squinting slightly putting her hands on her hips "Aw, come on" She mumbles to herself. She was wearing her familiar crop top and fluffy hoodie, sure she could use her magic to get it down but... man, that's so not fair.

Before she could even begin to use her magic though, someone's hand reached by her and picked up what she was trying to get, and handed it to her "here you go" someone's voice says.

"Oh-" she starts, then looks over at the person. They were a human, and as her eyeshine scans them up and down she smiles "oh~" He purrs, and takes the item "Thank you," She continues, "That's ever so sweet of you"

"No problem" they chirp, in a happy tone smiling. Their smile was so bright.

Lover... she really tried, she could flirt, say some random pick-up line and everything but nothing came out. No matter what she tried, nothing did.

"Well, I'll see you at a later time maybe, bye" they wave, and turn, wandering off. They most likely needed to do their own shopping. It was like she was frozen until they left, then she could react again.

She shakes her head, looks around, then groans covering her face with her hands. "What in the world?" she mumbles to herself, then she shakes her head and goes back to getting the things on the list.

Ever since that day, she had been thinking about them on and off, sometimes they wouldn't come into her mind while other times, they wouldn't leave, and she had no idea why. They weren't even all that special looking or anything, and they didn't do anything to really catch her attention. Sure, they helped her but that didn't mean much, right? Okay, maybe it did a little.

She had seen them around once or twice, yet she never went to talk to them and it was starting to annoy her. She never felt nervous, so why did she feel nervous about spending time with them, and talking? It wasn't like she knew them at all!

With those thoughts, she did speak to them for the second time, and the first time she really tried to talk with them. It went pretty well. She didn't try to flirt at all, which was just a little strange. Normally she would do so, just around them, it was like she couldn't. The words got caught in her throat like she would choke on them.

And she wasn't the type to choke on things!

Today they were spending time together, and they were rambling on and on about this one thing and she was listening to them closely, her head rested against the palm of her hand. They were waiting for their drinks, and they were dumping all the info that they had about this thing until they seemed a little nervous, their cheeks flushed and they chuckle, saying "I'm sorry, this must be getting annoying, huh?"

"Not at all," She says, maybe a tad too quickly. Her cheeks flush a little, then she chuckles, and adds "I like listening to you talk about your things, you have such a pretty voice" she coos.

When she saw them get a little flush on their cheek, they laugh, turning their head away "Oh be quiet" they mumble, moving their hand over their mouth.

They were so cute.

Lover thought that they were just the most adorable little creature.

Well... not little, still cute though!

Throughout the day they would do things together, rambling and chatting it all up. They got their food, and he messed with them by putting some cream on their nose.

They thought it was so silly.

After that, they kept meeting up. They would do things together, and Lover had this strange feeling in her chest. Her friends would often tease her, saying that she got bonded really quickly, though she would tell them that she was not, and they needed to stop.

Because, you know, there was no way she would be bonded with someone so quickly!

During another hangout, this time in the park, she was thinking about that and she quickly started to realize something... she was bonded to them really quickly. There was no doubt about it, though why? What the hell was going on with her? Was she lonely? Did their soul just match hers?

She felt a hand get placed against her shoulder, and Y/n's voice saying "Hey Lover, you okay?"

"I..." she starts, then shuts her mouth and she breathes out slowly then looks over at them, reaching out taking their hands into her own boney ones. Their hands were so soft. "I think... I think I'm in love with you" she says, her voice shaking a little as the words slipped by.

They blink a few times, their cheeks flushing quickly. "R...Really?" They ask, sounding shocked. She just gives a small nod, expecting them to reject her right here and now but they didn't, they smiled and lean over, kissing her cheek "Took you long enough" They mumble.

Wait what?

She looks at them, with large eye sockets because she was shocked, then groans hiding her face blushing brightly. Damn it, this love thing was a lot harder than just having sex with people for no reason.

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You bet - Chapter 3: Just Catch Me (Rewrite)

As the days passed, the push and pull between Poppy and Morgan continued, with Poppy persistently trying to ask Morgan out, and Morgan dodging her every attempt. Poppy didn't give up easily though, and she kept making attempts to win Morgan over.

One day, Poppy presented her with a rose and she smiled in a non-threatening way, or at least she thought so. Without breaking eye contact, Morgan dropped the rose into the trash and walked away, leaving Poppy gaping. (Morgan had been so sick of seeing roses; it had been a week, and she still found rose petals in her room. Her room had started to smell like a funeral home.)

On another occasion, Poppy bought Morgan some imported pastries, ones that she had shipped straight from France, hoping to impress Morgan with the gesture. But once again, Morgan's response left her frustrated. She gave the pastries away without even tasting them, asking if anyone else wanted a piece. Poppy started to question her approach.

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"Time was running out, Pops, and we were already in Plan K." Veronica tried to rile her up, amused by her disastrous plans. What did you guys think? What strategy did you want our Queen to try next? Click the link to vote! Veronica's live stream and teasing about Poppy's numerous failed attempts at winning Morgan's heart only added to Poppy's frustration.

She grabbed Veronica’s phone and tried to turn it off, trying to regain some control over the situation, but Veronica easily took it from her. "You're not that tall, you know?" Veronica teased, holding the phone out of Poppy's reach.

"She was playing hard to get. I thought it was cute before, but now it was just annoying." Poppy bit her lower lip. Morgan was really frustrating.

Chloe tried to offer some advice. "Maybe tone down the cockiness when you're asking her out. Girls don't like that. If I were Morgan, I, for sure, would be terrified."

Poppy defended herself, insisting, "I'm not cocky!"

"Whoa, chill. We're just trying to help you out." Chloe responded.

"Okay, fine. Let's just go with my plan, okay? Plan K will make me proud." Poppy said, hoping that this time it would be different.

"Well, the 11th time's the charm." Veronica said. Poppy playfully punched her on the arm, but Veronica quickly distanced herself to avoid further retaliation.

"Ow, now I'm beginning to feel sorry for Morgan if this is how you show your appreciation.” she said, trying to lighten the mood.

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"Morgan," Poppy called after her.

Morgan turned, already feeling exasperated. She knew that voice. "Poppy, I swear to God, if this is another one of your bizarre games, I'm gonna lose it."

Poppy could tell that Morgan had had enough of her unpredictable behavior. But this time, Poppy was done and had nothing to lose, so she followed Chloe’s stupid idea.

"Please just listen," Poppy began, her voice filled with genuine emotion. "I- I'm sorry for being too presumptuous. I just really like you, okay? Give me a chance, please." Poppy would have died if Veronica knew, but right now she wasn’t above begging.

To her relief, Morgan didn't pull away or reject her this time. Instead, she let Poppy reach for her hand, signaling a willingness to hear her out.

"Fine, if it doesn't work out, you'll leave me alone?" Morgan asked, her voice weary from the chase.

Poppy didn't hesitate. "Of course, I promise. I won't bother you anymore if you don't want me to."

Morgan seemed to weigh her options for a moment before finally relenting. "Okay, fine." She agreed, her tone softening. Morgan had always found it hard to resist the charm of beautiful girls.

Poppy was surprised and elated by Morgan's response. She hadn't expected her to say yes so easily. "Oh, You will? Was that a yes?" she asked, a smile spreading across her face.

Morgan rolled her eyes but couldn't hide a small smile of her own. "Yes, but don't screw it up," she warned.

"I won't, I promise." Poppy assured her, feeling a sense of relief and excitement. "I'll text you when. Thank you, Morgan."

She couldn't help herself and rose up to her tiptoes, planting a kiss on Morgan's cheek before walking away. As she left, Morgan could feel the warmth on her cheek where Poppy had touched it.

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“Sooo? Are we moving to Plan L? That one’s my favorite.” Veronica asks her when she sidles up to them after asking Morgan out again.

Poppy smiles triumphantly at Veronica's reaction. "No, I already have a date." she announces proudly. Veronica's eyes widen in disbelief and excitement.

"No way! You finally did it. I'm so proud, I might even cry. It was getting really painful to watch you fail." Veronica said.

Chloe joins in, cringing at the memories of Poppy's failed attempts. "Yeah, really painful."

Ignoring their playful jabs, Poppy admits. "I didn't plan this far. I was too focused on getting her to say yes."

"That's sad. But you know we'll help." Veronica reassures her, placing her hand on Poppy's shoulder. Chloe nods in agreement. "Absolutely, we'll come up with a perfect plan together." She says.

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Poppy looked at her friends incredulously. "Are you freaking serious?" she asked, not convinced by their choice of an amusement park as a date spot.

“The amusement park is a good date spot, says so on Bing,” Chloe replied.

“She’s right, I took a girl there. She was all over me by the end of the day.” Veronica said, her eyes glazing over. Poppy and Chloe rolled their eyes at where her thoughts were heading.

“But the germs and the people,” Poppy shuddered. “Can’t we have dinner at an expensive restaurant or something normal?”

Veronica shook her head. "It's Morgan we're talking about. I bet she's tired of all this pretentious stuff. And because I asked Zoey, the amusement park is high up on the top 3 list."

"What are the other options?" Poppy asked reluctantly, feeling like she was being cornered.

Chloe grinned mischievously. "Okay, you asked for it; the Zoo and fruit picking. I doubt you can handle that much physical activity and proximity to animals."

"That's it? Those are terrible first date options!" Poppy exclaimed, feeling a bit frustrated.

"We told you so," Veronica said with a smirk.

Poppy took a deep breath and conceded defeat. "Fine, amusement park it is. I'll text her now." She said, taking out her phone. As she texted Morgan to confirm the date, she couldn't help but feel a mix of excitement and nervousness. While it may not be the luxurious or fancy date she envisioned, if it would bring her close to Morgan, then she would soldier through the ordeal.

-----

She picked up her phone and sent a text to Morgan, trying to act casual even though her heart was racing.

Poppy: Hey, are you free this Saturday for our date? In case you forgot.

A few minutes later, Morgan responded, and Poppy couldn't help but smile when she saw the message.

Morgan: Yeah, what time?

Poppy took a deep breath before responding, trying to sound confident.

Poppy: Is 9 AM good for you? I'll pick you up. Morgan: That’s weirdly early but, okay.

Poppy locked her phone, feeling nervous, but she'd be damned if she backed out now.

#you bet #poppy min sinclair #poppy min sinclair x mc

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A (slightly chaotic) Stravaganza rewrite/adaptation idea

So, now that we’ve finished the 2023 Stravaganza liveblog and I’ve told you what my headcanons for the series are after its end, let’s look at how I would change the main story if I got the chance. (Thanks to @10-dutchies-12-bicycles for being the one third of the fandom that voted for this.)

This is not an outright rewrite. I’m approaching this from the point of view of “I’m a showrunner and I’m adapting Stravaganza into a tv show”. In this theoretical show there would be one season per book with ten 40-60 minute episodes in each. I can’t take credit for all the ideas I’m presenting here, some of them have been brainstormed with a friend of mine.

Most of this focuses on the last two books, but there would obviously be minor changes in the adaptation in the first seasons as well. These changes would include things like giving side characters more depth, switching the order of some events etc. Most of the main storylines will still stay the same unless stated otherwise.

Some scenes/storylines are very clear in my head, while others are still a big ????. I may fill in the blanks in the future.

Changes pre- season 5

More development on Barbara and Marco as characters.

Cesare has a crush on Luciano in season 2, but he tries his best to get rid of it when they go to university together. (It helps that Luciano gets very annoying when he’s missing Arianna.)

Ludo gets more development during season 4. Rodolfo is the one who finds out about his di Chimici side (and even sees the ring, realizing that Jacopo is Ludo’s father). Luciano only knows that Ludo’s father is some nobleman.

Alice breaks up with Sky at the end of season 4, though it is left a little unclear where they will go from there.

At the end of season 4 it’s revealed that Jago is gay and out of the closet, Matt was just very oblivious and insecure.

Season 5 (City of Ships)

The first thing I’d change in season 5 is Isabel’s character. I already laid out some possibilities for this in an earlier post, but I would probably make Charlie good at sports + STEM and Isabel good at arts + nerdy things so that her feelings of not being good enough have at least some basis in reality. Even Charlie himself sometimes thinks Isabel's interests are silly and not that important.

I would also change Isabel’s crush on Sky to be unrequited. Or (and this came to me just as I was typing this) maybe she’s ace and/or aro? I just don’t want the group to consist of couples, some people need to stay single.

On the Talian side, I would focus way more on Classe as a city. I’d give Isabel some time to get to know the city, but have some of the other characters already preparing for the upcoming battle from the start.

Filippo could just skip the part where he messes around with mosaics and go to Bellezza almost straight away, giving him and Beatrice a chance to actually develop their relationship.

I also want more pirate stuff. Don’t know how, but more pirate stuff.

I would skip the retcon that talismans can take you to different cities now. There’s not really any major plotline in book 5 that requires it anyway. Isabel can focus on Classe, and any instances where someone travels to another city that’s not their own can just be replaced with something else.

Instead Dethridge can use his thinking brain and come up with a theory that the gate between the worlds is getting weaker. That could be what replaces the city-hopping AND the time travel shenanigans.

Speaking of which, Charlie will stravagate but it’s resolved without the detour to 16th century England. We don’t need the time travel if it’s never really going to come up again.

A side effect of Isabel beginning to hang out with the Stravaganti is that Laura begins feeling very lonely. (In this version they’re not Ayesha’s friends since that’s never relevant to the plot anyway. We’re also removing the SH storyline and replacing it with this.)

Alice (who has grown distant from Georgia as well) notices Laura’s loneliness and the two become friends.

This is the point where we really mix things up: The Fortezza plotline starts while Isabel’s adventure is still going on.

Andrea’s father is who he thinks he is, and he somehow ends the story still being a pirate.

Jacopo is very sick, and it’s obvious he won’t live long. This worries Fabio, and he speaks about it with Rodolfo via the mirrors. Rodolfo, who knows about Ludo, advises Fabio to take a new talisman to England just in case. He doesn’t tell the reason, but his ~stravagante’s intuition~ tells him Ludo might make things complicated in Fortezza and wants to play things safe.

Laura buys this talisman from Mr. Goldsmith. Alice sees it and immediately knows what it is.

Alice fears that if Laura stravagates accidentally, she’ll end up just like the others and Alice will lose her as well. So instead she tells Laura about Talia, explaining that the whole thing is the reason why the others don’t care about them anymore. She even says that if Laura wants, she can show the talisman to the others and they’ll accept her into the group, but that it will be the only reason why they do.

Laura decides to stravagate, but insists that Alice sleeps over while she does. Before Fabio can see her, Laura slips away into the city and steals some clothes for herself. (Laura and Alice plan this all beforehand)

Fabio remains unaware that the new Stravagante has arrived.

While all of this is going on, Isabel’s adventure continues. None of the English Stravaganti notice anything wrong with Laura or Alice, since they no longer hang out together.

The season ends with Jacopo dying and Ludo arriving in Fortezza.

Season 6 (City of Swords)

The other Stravaganti have moved on with their lives, going back to normal life after Isabel’s adventure ended. Laura, however, has continued going to Fortezza. There she meets Ludo, who is now demanding the throne of Fortezza for himself. Laura finds herself crushing in Ludo, and supports him against Lucia.

Alice and Laura’s relationship continues to be slightly toxic and codependent. They both fear losing each other, but Laura doesn’t want to stop stravagating because she also wants to spend time with Ludo.

In this version Ludo does not return Laura’s feelings and is in fact quite oblivious to her feelings.

Fabio expresses his worry about Fortezza’s state to Rodolfo. They’re both a bit confused about why the talisman hasn’t brought in a new Stravagante.

Fabio even returns to Mr. Goldsmith’s shop to find out that the talisman has indeed been sold. He relays this information to Rodolfo, who stravagates to meet the English Stravaganti. He tells them about the new talisman and asks them to keep an eye out for the talisman. (They only have a very vague description of who bought it.)

The events in Talia continue largely as they did in the book. During the siege, Ludo’s side does something (I haven’t yet figured out what) which Laura does not approve of and she becomes disillusioned. She begins rethinking her crush on Ludo. This something is dangerous, and Laura ends up stabbed in her side.

Laura wanders around the streets of Fortezza, bleeding heavily and looking for a safe place to stravagate home. She finds an alley where she can lean against the wall, but just as she’s about to stravagate, she sees all the blood she’s losing and faints, the talisman slipping out of her hand.

Laura has asked Alice to stay over as often as she can, because the whole stravagating thing makes her nervous. (A big part of this is that she doesn’t have a mentor in Talia.) Laura’s parents are out on this particular night, leaving the girls to have a sleepover by themselves.

In the middle of the night Alice gets up to go use the toilet. When she gets back to Laura’s room, she sees the pool of blood on the sheets. Pulling back the covers, she sees the wound on her side. Alice remembers how Matt was beaten up when his talisman was taken from him, and she fears something similar might have happened to Laura. With one hand putting pressure on the wound to stop the bleeding, Alice reaches for her phone.

Georgia wakes up in the middle of the night to her phone ringing. She answers it, and it takes her a moment to understand what Alice is telling her. Georgia wants to ask a million questions, but from the panic in Alice’s voice she hears that this is serious and that there is no time to be wasted.

Georgia stravagates to Remora, and through a game of telephone the Stravaganti get a message to Fabio.

Fabio sets out to find Laura. It takes him a while before he finds her passed out in the alley, her talisman next to her. He wakes her up for just long enough to help her hold her talisman.

Meanwhile Alice has just been panicking. She eventually gives in and calls an ambulance. As soon as the ambulance pulls up in front of the house, Laura wakes up.

Alice makes up a lie that the girls were hungry and went to the kitchen to make sandwiches, and a knife left on the counter slipped and hit Laura. The paramedics barely believe this but they’re too busy to question it too much.

The next day Alice explains everything to Georgia. She blames herself for what happened to Laura – if she hadn’t been selfish and scared of losing Laura, this wouldn’t have happened.

After hearing Alice and Laura’s story, everyone else realizes that they treated them badly and that perhaps Talia was taking up too much space in their lives.

The others insist that Laura has to stravagate and finish her mission, but she doesn’t want to do it. Even seeing Ludo again is not enough for her to go back. Alice, feeling guilty, convinces Laura to finish her mission. Laura agrees, but insists that Alice has to stay with her whenever she stravagates.

Laura returns to Fortezza and is properly introduced to Fabio. She has now fully realized that Ludo’s cause is not worth it, and agrees to deliver messages to the castle.

Meanwhile Ludo too is beginning to see that he has gone too far. He feels especially guilty about betraying his Manoush roots. He even has a dream about his mother, and eventually he decides to surrender before more people die because of him.

There’s a lot of ?????? here that I haven’t figured out. There’s a bit of logistics that needs sorting out in regards to a few characters.

In this season Dethridge has his theory that the gate between the worlds is becoming unstable (the dates are no longer matching up in the two worlds) because of the amount of active talismans. He fears that one more talisman or translation may make the whole thing collapse. (Listen, if the books can do the city-hopping retcon, I can do this)

This ties into the way everyone gets to the wedding. Luciano goes to England and explains to everyone that they can come to the wedding, but they must give up their talismans. They’ll get temporary talismans that they’ll have to destroy later. He gives everyone a day or two to think about it.

Everyone agrees to do it, though the decision is especially hard on Georgia and Nick. Luciano says that if they can get the gate stable again, they might be able to bring over new talismans.

The temporary talismans are pages from Luciano’s original notebook. Both Vicky and David also get a talisman, with Vicky getting the leftover pages and covers.

Again, there’s a bit of ???? in regards to order of events and logistics here. But Ludo doesn’t die – instead he ends up becoming a pirate with Andrea

Ludo doesn’t die, instead he ends up in Classe and becomes a gay pirate with Andrea.

Instead, the person who dies is Cesare (listen! listen! put the tomatoes down! trust me!). I’m not exactly sure how he dies, but it happens after the Stravaganti have gone back to England after the wedding. Nick and Georgia try to stay behind to be with him as he dies, but Cesare tells them to go home. He makes Luciano promise to tell his family that he loves them. Luciano and Getano stay with Cesare as he passes.

Seriously, this whole ending is full of ????. Cesare’s death will mean more than Ludo’s to the audience, but I want the rest of the ending to feel satisfying.

The series ends with a montage of first Talia, then England. In the Talian montage, we see the people we met along the way going on with their lives (we don’t see Luciano and Arianna yet).

Then we get a scene where the English Stravaganti (plus Vicky and David) burning Luciano’s notebook in a fire. Alice shows up as well and burns her talisman. They all watch the fire die out. Alice grabs Laura’s hand and the two leave together. We start the English montage by seeing Alice and Laura happy together. Isabel is going to the movies with Charlie, who happily listens to his sister talk about whatever she’s passionate about, having learned to appreciate her interests. Matt and Ayesha go on a ride in Matt’s car. Sky hugs his mother goodbye at the airport as he leaves for the US. Georgia and Nick are at the Mulhollands’ living room, where Vicky brings them tea.

The montage ends, and we get one final scene of Luciano and Arianna watching the fireworks from their balcony in Bellezza.

Roll credits.

Jk, there’s a mid-credit scene.

A café in London. Text on the screen says: Five years later. The café is full of people. Jago Jones, now a successful author, sits by himself in a corner, working on his laptop and drinking coffee. Someone walks over to him and points at the seat opposite him. “Is this seat free?” a familiar voice asks. Jago looks up at the stranger. “Sure,” he says with a smile. The camera pans out and Cesare, dressed in regular 21st century clothes, sits opposite Jago.

Continue credits. The end.

Ok so I feel like I owe you a bit of an explanation for that last scene so I’ll rewind.

Very early in season 2, Georgia will give Cesare… something. Maybe it’s another one of her piercings or something. It’s done in a way that will not draw attention to the fact that this is a potential talisman. Cesare continues to wear this object around his neck the entire series, and no attention is ever drawn to it. But attentive viewers will know that this is one big Chekov’s gun.

There will be other small things that foreshadow Cesare’s stravagating sprinkled through the series.

Before Cesare dies, Georgia somehow ends up speaking about her home in an attempt to comfort him. As he dies, Cesare holds his talisman in his hand, though again, no special attention is drawn to it. It’s one of those things you’ll catch on your second viewing.

There we go – my changes for a possible Stravaganza TV show. There are a lot of other minor details my friend and I have planned, but those are the most coherent and important changes I would make.

#this is even more confusing than my previous long post #stravaganza #isabel evans #alice greaves #laura reid #ludo vivoide #cesare montalbano #georgia o'grady #idek who all to tag I can't tag everyone??

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12 25 30 + 1 other of your choice

12. I agree with you on Thracia - that game had an actively suicidal release, and the bastard dense esoteric code making translation hell for decades (Chapter 5, I remember) gave it a really unearned reputation for difficulty in a game with Thracia loldiers and infinite range player staves. Thracia has some obscure mechanics and annoying maps (11. 16B. 19, if you want Xavier and the member card. 24x. 24x again.), but it's got awful enemy quality, near-universally viable units (Shannam is a joke character, and he works if you love him), and fantastic weapon/staff diversity from capture. You can figure most of this out from like, fifteen minutes of reading nowadays. The translation was the only thing making it inaccessible.

As for a unique answer, Fates. Fates could've been a far, far better game had the script been decent. I don't think Birthright and Revelation are fun to play, but before even touching the gameplay or systems I would ask for a full overhaul of those awful plots and those flat, grating characters. There are many entries which play mediocre but are beloved for the overall experience - Fates' writing makes every route such a grating slog, with no silver lining that's stuck with me. The high concept is interesting, but overly ambitious: as executed, I feel like I'm playing a trashy otome game that doesn't have the breathing room to indulge itself because of all the Systems and map inbetween. I think the project was too overly ambitious to begin with (it is the most content-dense entry by far: Three Houses reuses far, far more across its routes, but also doesn't charge extra), but it's so difficult to invest yourself in the gameplay when it's not stellar to begin with and the world's most chopped up and incoherent VN plays out between chapters. You could make a good VN out of Fates, and you could make a good game out of Fates, but you couldn't do either without some serious rewrites. I know of the circumstances surrounding the game's writing, and I gotta say: maybe this project just was not meant to be. Still, there's a dream in there, somewhere.

25. Yunaka is an Arvis bastard who fell through an outrealm. Okay, more seriously, I'm struggling to think of any interesting ones off the top of my head (I only usually elaborate if writing at length or prompted), but here's a lightning round: Saias is a Maeranist, Leif's got that lifelong chronic fatigue to deal with after the war, Ike being extremely bulky is enduring Smash Brawl revisionism and Boyd/Shinon are probably larger (skill is his highest cap, and strength's tied with speed), Mark is a Morgan (this was common on the dweeb boards for, like, a year), Fodlan dragons don't actually suffer from stock-brand Dragon Degeneration because while Silver Snow's (and to a lesser extent, Crimson Flower's) Rhea suggest so nothing else in the game does, and Fodlan dragons aren't actually generic brand Archanea dragons at all given Sothis' weird origins (this is a copout that makes the game make more sense). On that last note, I also don't think Divine Dragons in Engage have much to do with Naga's creed - they really feel more derivative of Elibe's - but I haven't done Tiki's paralogue or seen all Alear's supports, so I'm not confident in that. Not sure exactly what Sombron is given his monologue, but I have ideas - I'd prefer if Elyos is just its own world with its own rules, though. They've got to reboot dragon lore. I'm still not too up to date or invested in Metaseries dragon lore, though, so it doesn't matter too much to me.

Oh, and Alear is Severa again, but she dyed half her hair and got amnesia.

30. Genealogy maps have fine pacing. The gameplay does not suffer from pacing issues. I cannot believe anyone can seriously complain about moving your units for a few minutes every twenty minutes to half an hour. First off, Genealogy has turn saves, which are there to let you break up the gameplay experience however you wish. It's one of the few older that don't feel meaningfully different on an emulator, because you get savestates and bookmarks in one as an intended and obvious mechanic (Well, besides the modern translations having to completely change the file structure. I don't think Project Naga can run on hardware without serious caveats and the right flashcards? Correct me if I'm wrong; it's a non-factor compared to most SNES emulation accuracy issues anyway). The game wasn't designed to be rushed through, and while most of us playing now are happy to do a chapter or two per sitting, there's not a single issue with taking a break after every castle if you had to. There can be a lot of movement, but things happen on these maps! You've got your events, and you've got your priority targets (e.g. villages) for your mounts up front, and you've got a lot of meaningful talk conversations which often give their best benefits to the foot units. It is true that infantry are sluggish, but they're all broken to compensate, and if you're giving your dancer the leg and knight rings like everyone does you can catch them up without issue after sieges: it's really only an issue on LTC. Some people take issue with the Arena grind at the start of maps, but I've never had much issue with it. Turn saves are in, you don't have to optimize it incredibly hard, and although EXP is part of your rank and parentlevel effects child units, there isn't any reason you can't necessarily skip if a unit's having issues on one round. There's enough stuff here, and Genealogy arena animations are incredibly fluid and tense, so I just don't see the issue - besides the singular enemy set for most classes, that is. That's a little stupid.

I really shouldn't have to justify myself after the Monastery, though. Good grief.

Free choice... 31, but I'll play it loosely: I love those rare, beautiful moments where the developers aren't afraid to give narrative genuine gameplay consequences. I think this is what made me so obsessed with Jugdral, and what kept me coming back to it: I love Genealogy Chapter 5, I adore the Manster Arc, and I'd give up support conversations in a heartbeat to bring back map event conversations which give stats or weapons. Hell, how Radiant Dawn distributes its prepromotes and the ludicrous imbalances it enforces makes it play incredibly uniquely compared to every other entry in a good way - the Dawn Brigade sucks, and that's not a bad thing (but they really needed their own damn game). Yes, I love obscure Kaga prfs, and Zieg is probably my favourite Oifey-Jagen-his own thing because of how significant his turn really feels. I love that man as a unit. I miss him. Gunter could never. Fates is really the only game that bungles this, in my opinion: Reunion at Dawn is a horrible map, especially on Maddening-SS, but its Maddening-SS presentation might be the most interesting map in the game. I love losing the lord. I wish the route was good.

This is the end of the post, so I'm also free to put Engage spoilers up through Chapter 22 under the cut:

Yes, I love Chapter 11. I love how the latter six Emblems are all more situational than your first group of big hitters and utility gods. I loved figuring out how to make them work - I take back thinking they're weaker, because high Def/Avo Lyn doubles, Goddess Dance, and Dual Assist (especially with inheritance!) are absolutely absurd. Nothing felt better than getting Sigurd back after Chapter 17, and I think all the drama of post-10 and how it interacts with gameplay is why I'm so bright on Alear as a character. My only real criticism is admittedly quite bold, and it's that I wish Alear got the non-corporeal treatment after their third (lol) revival and became just another Emblem in gameplay - Veyle is right there, and could take over the force deploy game over duties. I just think it would've been bold.

#this one took a while because 4 answers lol #thank you for the opportunity to ramble!#fe ask game #latency.txt #engage spoilers

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Hello a bunch of questions if you don't mind and you totally don't have to answer them if you don't want to! Which Character from the show do you not like or find annoying? When you write Do you start your chapter at the beginning or imagine a specific scene? I don't really understand some of Garmadons motives could you maybe explain them? How did you get into the Ninjago Fandom? And I think I read somewhere that you're not going to include the wildbrain seasons so is the stuff with Aspheera and Nya merging with the water and stuff gone?

1. I don’t really find any character annoying! Sure there’s some I’m ‘meh’ about but nobody’s ever really aggravated me (outside of that being the intention of their character). I guess Dareth in the first half of Season 6 would count but that’s low hanging fruit :P

2. Depends on the chapter, though most of the time I start with a specific scene and then build around it as needed. Sometimes the beginning is the last thing I write!

3. Can’t fully clarify just yet, there’s a couple spoilers in there, but if it’s not clear by the end of this story I will definitely smooth things out. Just know that Garm’s torn by his rage at Wu, his own ambitions, and his love for Lloyd and they’re constantly at odds with each other. He’s bitter but he cares and then he’s bitter because he cares and he can’t afford to care while he’s full of evil and that makes him feel bad all over again—thus he’s stuck in a very dark loop which maybe Lloyd will break one day. He also just really likes messing with people, and acting on opportunities that may help him further down the line, even if it seems counterproductive in the moment.

4. I’ve always liked Ninjago from the very start, and been off and on with it until the Wildbrain seasons kicked in (and then I fully started paying attention). But around the time of the 9th Anniversary was when I was like ‘whoa, I gotta do something for the Big 10!!!’ So I integrated myself slowly into the fandom for like a year, mostly watching from the sidelines while I worked on Book 1, and then once I posted it I became a lot more active and now I have some very nice people as friends and I’ve been here ever since <3

5. The reason I don’t want to fully rewrite the Wildbrain seasons (except Crystalized) is the because there’s not a lot I’d change about them. They’re very self-contained and truly do have some solid stories already (with exceptions). That being said, the stuff that happens within them is definitely not gone! For now it’s just a lot of Call-Forwards, but once we hit Season 5 some more of the future influence will come into play. And hopefully, if I play my cards right, I can set up everything I need to without having to write an extra five seasons snksnksnk

#legacyverse #the ninja legacy whip #asks from nice people

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kotlc-deleted-scenes · 1 year

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Keeper Summer Week #1

Deleted Original Prologue from Keeper of the Lost Cities

I wrote this scene because I wanted the beginning of Keeper of the Lost Cities to feel mysterious and ominous. But I decided it didn't work for readers to have more knowledge about Sophie's past than Sophie did. It made her character feel a bit annoying, since it took her so long to catch up to everyone else. So I cut this and made the series third-person limited (meaning I only include a scene if Sophie is in it). Oh, and you may notice that a few of the details about Prentice's memory break have changed since I wrote this prologue. Writing is rewriting. (And rewriting again and again. And again!)

—Shannon

NO MATCH.

The two words flashed red across the screen like a taunt, tempting Quinlin to fling the palm-size gadget off the rooftop and let it shatter into a million pieces below.

Somehow he fought the urge, instead taking another slow, deep breath before pressing the final sequence of buttons.

"Please work," he begged the tiny screen as he ran his fingers across his sweat-streaked forehead.

Talking to inanimate objects—a sure sign of desperation. A second later the screen flashed with the words UNABLE TO PROCESS.

Quinlin clenched the blinking square in his fist, like that would somehow make it cooperate. When it didn't help, he switched it off and shoved the gadget deep into the pocket of his cape and glanced up at the sky.

Time to deliver the bad news.

The night was just starting to fade into the deep blue glow of early dawn, and one by one the stars were winking away. Alden would be there any minute. But as the seconds dragged by, Quinlin could only pace the length of the rooftop and wait.

Back and forth.

A flash of light stopped him in his tracks, and a tall figure in a dark gray cape shimmered onto the rooftop next to him.

"I came as soon as I could," Alden apologized as he smoothed his dark wavy hair. His vibrant teal eyes shone even in the dim light. "What did you find?"

Quinlin tried to force out the words. When they wouldn't come, he reached into his pocket and retrieved the gadget, holding it out to Alden. "See for yourself."

Alden tapped the screen, and a hologram appeared-the twisted double helix of a DNA strand glowing in the darkness.

"Well... this is a surprise," Alden whispered. A shadow of concern was painted across his handsome face. "Have you shown this to anyone?"

"Only you."

"Good. Let's keep it that way."

Quinlin nodded.

"You couldn't get anything else?" Alden asked, still studying the hologram.

"I tried," Quinlin assured him. "But Prentice's mind was par- ticularly strong. I had to shatter his sanity in order to extract the one piece I recovered."

Alden nodded gravely. "Such a waste." He held the hologram closer to his face, his eyes narrowing. "I'm no expert on these, but this one looks strange, doesn't it?"

"It's been altered somehow," Quinlin agreed. "The system couldn't even process it." Frustration dripped off every word.

Alden took a turn at pacing. "I assume there was no match…”

Quinlin laughed darkly. "I ran it five times."

Alden ran it a sixth to be sure. "Well... at least we know it's a girl."

They both fell silent, lost in their own thoughts.

"What do you think it means?" Quinlin finally whispered into the darkness.

"I have no idea," Alden admitted. He touched the center of the screen, and the hologram disappeared. "But I need to find her."

"You really think you can?" Quinlin asked. “Where will you look?"

"I'm not entirely sure. Though... I suppose if I wanted to hide a child, there's one place I would be fairly certain no one would search."

Quinlin sucked in a breath. "You don't mean…”

Alden nodded. "It seems like the best place to start."

"But... there are so many of them—and she could be anywhere."

"It won't be easy," Alden agreed. "I'll probably have to wait until her abilities develop before I can truly identify her."

"That will take years," Quinlin warned.

"I know. We'll all have to be patient."

Quinlin looked away. "The poor child…”

A rueful smile spread across Alden's lips. "Oh, they're not all bad."

"Still. To be raised by humans." Quinlin cringed just saying the word.

Alden's teal eyes twinkled mysteriously as he pulled a pathfinder from his pocket and held the crystal out into the first rays of dawn. A single beam of light was refracted toward the ground. "Who knows? Maybe it will be good for her," he said, mostly to himself, before glancing at Quinlin. "I'll let you know when I find her."

"Don't you mean if you find her?" Quinlin couldn't help asking.

Alden shook his head. "Oh, I will find her. I just don't know what we'll do with her once I do." He gave a half bow and stepped into the beam of light from his wand.

His body glittered for a second and then vanished.

#keeper of the lost cities #kotlc deleted scene #kotlc deleted scenes

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Honestly, I love season 2 despite itself but in season 3 I better see Eloise and Penelope make up. That's honestly the one thing I want. Everything else is up for grabs.

hi anon! Now that season 3 is Polin, I think we're going to see Eloise even more lost than season 2 but there's no doubt they'll make up. I imagine it's going to be later on in the season as Pen and Eloise both have a lot of self-growth to do and it would be pointless for them to make up so early. Eloise will probably have a storyline involving one of her siblings, maybe Ben who is equally as lost? Their dynamic is fantastic. We might see her actually try to conform to society and be someone she isn't and be the more miserable for it but Pen marrying Colin will make her feel even more alone as she's being left behind. If Theo comes back it'll end in heartache again.

A big theme this season will hopefully be sisterstood and female friendship so we'll hopefully have that to look forward to! Especially with Kate/Eloise and just Kate and the Bridgertons and hopefully Fran/Eloise as they've recast her for a bigger role. I really want to see their relationship, especially as Fran should be debuting this season and Eloise is already out. She'll need a new companion as most of her scenes are with Penelope.

I like it better that Eloise is the first person to find out Pen is LW (bar Madame D) as it always annoyed me in the book she was one of the last ones to find out. I hope they rewrite the LW revealation this season and how people find out and I hope the Bridgertons and Fetheringtons are angry at Pen for all she's written about them and done to them. Probably more in relation to S1 with Daphne/Simon as LW literally did nothing to Anthony or Kate, just Eloise really in S2. In Losing Eloise was a consequence of her actions that have directly affected Pen. They'll of course forgive her but someone needs to be a bit annoyed. Eloise's reaction was valid, she does have her own faults but even with her reasons what Pen did was outrageous, and it makes much more sense than for them to have a reaction than to just brush it aside like they did in RMB. I don't know if we'll get that though as the writers are big Penelope fans.

I think anything could happen anyway as I'm imagining a complete rewrite of RMB like they did for TVWLM.

i'm excited to see what is to come! I think they're beginning to film this week so hopefuly we'll get some pap pics soon! thanks for your ask! <3

#bridgerton #bridgerton discussions #penelope fetherington #eloise bridgerton #colin bridgerton #romancing mister bridgerton #asks #anons

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dragodina · 1 year

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Da bin ich wieder 🙃 Wenn du noch Lust hast:

3, 51, 56, 67 („Queerschläger“)

Boah, hab ich gerade eine halbe Ewigkeit gebraucht, um diese Frage wieder zu finden, ich sollte dann nachher ins Bett gehen 😅

Aber klaro, hab mega Lust drauf und immer wieder gerne 🥰❤️ Here we go again 🙂🙃✌🏼

3. Do you share your fic ideas, or do you keep them to yourself?

For the majority of my life I have kept them to myself. Just wrote them down to get rid of them and clear my head. And eventually I had stopped writing for quite sometime.

But since seeing german crime show "Tatort" episode "Schattenleben" in July this year with currently my most favourite tv character Julia Grosz sparked something in me and I started writing again. And even uploaded it on AO3, scary as hell 🙈. So far, that journey continues and its a lot of fun 🥰❤️. For WIP's and ideas that I have mostly planned out but not yet shared, I find it really hard to not spill or spoil anything 😅😂🤭. I'm just so excited to upload new stuff and maybe see/hear what readers might feel or think about it.

51. Does what you like to write differ from what you like to read?

No, not really. In general, I like all things related to Julia Grosz and Tine Geissler. Then it can all vary from fluff to humor to crime to angst fics. In my writings, I try to find a nice mix of it all. So far I found my hang with some angsty/suspensy and emotional writing, that I like and enjoy to read very much 😊😅.

56. Are there any fics that you would change or rewrite if given the chance?

As I tend to polish stories or chapters up anyway after publishing it, yes, all of them at one point 😅🙈. But after that, no, then I stick with the versions published.

That said, I'm a bit torn about the thought or lets say I think about writing maybe a version of "Last Chance" that stays closer to Julia Grosz original family backstory ... I haven't come to a decision yet though ... and how I would do that in the end ... but I have found myself thinking about that once in a while.

Would be interesting (from a readers point of view) to know if someone would be interested in that or if LC should just stay the way it is 😊 I'm not sure how, especially chapter 4, was taken by the readers, given the fact that I strayed so much from Julias original backstory. At the beginning I didn't really gave it much thought and didn't know much of her history than was known by what was shown of Julia through the episodes.

So I just thought for the story and since I wanted to also share another story that concentrates completely on the episodes and mostly canon facts, I just came up with her backstory on my own.

After I wrote and uploaded chapter 4 though I found an interview with FW where she said Julia grew up only with her father. So ever since then I'm wondering if LC would be different had I known that fact before, had I changed anything or something differently, had I stayed closer to that and would that change anything about LC. Or maybe I'm just really overthinking that way too much 😅😊.

67. If a fic was titled "Queerschläger", what would this story be about/how would you write it?

Phew, erm, nice of you to put further hints and ideas in my head. As if I hadn't yet enough of them. Without any particular ideas it's a bit hard to tell.

The way I know myself though, it would absolutely be a Tinia story, I would probably make it a bit of a fluff and humour one. About them meeting, spending time together, finding their way to each other. And bring in Falke just to mix it up a bit. And let him team up with Tine "against" Julia just to annoy her a bit more 😅 (I might have to come back to you about this questions when I had time to give it more thought 😅).

Oooor, in another universe, when Falke somehow somewhen has to retire, I would team up Julia with another young female superintendant with skills in profiling and forensics, who is also queer and who really likes to tease her with Tine (because in her heart she is a really big fan of Tinia herself 😅😂). The title would definitely be appropriate then ✌🏼.

(Well, whatever version, that screams for a story with exactly that title, doesn't it 😅🙈?)

Like always, that was really much fun 🙃🙂❤️ If you're not tired of this and your interested in some of the still unanswered questions feel free to ask some more 😊

I'm going to pick some new ones too soon 🙂

For now, have a wobderful sunday sind read you soon 🥰❤️

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Our love still remains–Chapter 8

There won't be any Russians… No way there would be a murder on their wedding, my story doesn't need all the drama and as they are marrying a few months after the end of season 2, instead of 2 years later, it wouldn't fit the timeline anyway. So, every scene related to the Russian isn't part of the story. Lizzy has not invited Changretta, as they won't be together for another 2 years. But, other than that, every scene which isn't rewrite happens as in the show (I love the scene in the kitchen "NO FUCKING FIGHTING", but I'm not skilled enough to write it).

I don't like the way Grace interacts with Tommy in the bedroom scene. I don't like Annabelle's acting in that scene, but I guess it's the way she was directed to do it. So even if I've kept most of the words, in my mind Grace expresses them with less aggression. I think Grace's anger would be colder than that, more subtle (see "You think I'm a whore" or "You're a bastard offering me like that" in season 1). You're obviously free to imagine the scene as you please. Same for the dress, as there is no need for purple in my story, I chose to imagine Grace with the same as Mary (Dowton Abbey) you can find it on my tumblr

The longest note for the longest chapter.

She thought the wedding would be good for him and would level up his mood. It hasn't. She could feel him living the moment during the ceremony and as they exchanged sweet words while riding toward Arrow House, but as soon as all the guests had entered the house, he disappeared. He is the one who wanted a big wedding and now he is hiding in his office, she could strangle him! But she has to keep the appearance for her family, after all they came all the way from Ireland. "I just wish Tommy was here" she finds herself saying, more than once. When she is tired of facing their families alone, she retreats to her room.

She is refreshing her make-up when Thomas enters their bedroom. "You're needed downstairs." She doesn't like his tone, so she ignores him.

"Grace, you're needed downstairs, people are hungry." he seems annoyed with her, when he is the one who has deserted the reception.

She finally faces him, "I'll come down, but not with you like this." "All right, fine." he is on his way to the door, even more irritated than when he entered the room.

"Tommy!" He slams the door shut and turns around facing her. "I thought today was the reason for the way you were acting lately. I know there's also business on your mind and I know there always will be." "Yeah" Tommy seems dejected, he is leaving the bedroom, entering their bathroom. She won't let him shut her out. She needs answers and she needs him with her, today of all days. She needs to lessen the animosity between them though, so she begins by apologizing, saying gently, "Look, I'm sorry that they wore their uniform." That has the opposite effect of what she intended, it only raises Tommy's anger. "They fucking did, eh! They fucking did!" He is pointing his finger at her as if she is the one responsible for the provocation. Once again, he retreats towards the bathroom.

She responds calmly, "But I can tell it's more than that, you've been like this for weeks." She doesn't want to antagonize him, but she won't back down either. So she joins him in the bathroom. He is sitting on the edge of the bathtub, his head down. She adds softly, "I need you to tell me what is making you like this. Do you have regrets about our marriage?" Tommy raises his head suddenly, she can see that he is startled : "Grace, no! Of course it's not that!" "So what is it? You've been distant for weeks now. I know you, I've tried to leave you space, I've waited for you to come to me. But I had hoped that if something was really bothering you, other than the wedding, you would have talked to me before today." "Grace, I'm sorry… I don't want you to feel like that. It's bad business, that's all." He pauses, then adds, "I'm used to being scared and carrying on. I haven't been afraid to die since France. But now, I'm scared for you. I'm scared of what I brought you into. I know I'm not pleasant to look at or enjoyable to be around."

She goes sit next to him, taking his hand in hers. "I knew what I was choosing when I chose a life with you. We've just made vows to share everything, you can tell me what you're afraid of." "I know, I know." He doesn't elaborate, so she leaves the room, going back to her vanity.

He joins her. "Stand up, stand up" he takes her arms in his hands forcing her to stand. "Arthur's speech. I'm scared of fucking Arthur's speech." She can't help but be disarmed by his sweet and charming attitude. She lets her anger go. All she wants is for him to be present at their wedding. To enjoy himself. To leave the stress at bay, for just one day and celebrate their union. They will talk later. She smiles, "Me too." He starts lifting her dress while kissing her. "Tommy, what are you doing?" She is laughing while kissing him back, "There is half a British army waiting for us downstairs." "Fucking Irish, we waited two weeks in the mud for them" he leads her to the bed still kissing her. He lays her down on the bed and stretches out above her.

She is still laughing, "Tommy, they are things, if I take them off, I won't be able to put back on!" "That's good." He is caressing her legs, settling between them, "Well, Mrs Shelby, I'm sorry for being busy in my head, now let's complete the ceremony…"

(…)

She knew it would be hell to put back all of her layers once it has been removed. But it was worth it. Tommy is not a big help, looking at her dressing up with a satisfied smile.

Without warning, the door opens, Arthur appearing in the frame.

"Tommy! Oh!" disappearing, "Didn't see a thing! Not seen a thing… Sorry about that, but you're needed downstairs."

"It's alright, we're done." Tommy says while standing up,"You're good?" "Yeah, never been better." "You're drunk?" "No" Tommy gives him his flask of whisky, "here." "Alright, just one drink then." "Linda is a good woman Arthur." "Good whisky..." "Good man needs to hold out sometimes, eh?"

Arthur is enjoying the taste of alcohol on his tongue. "So, I should mention this in my speech, then?" He speaks loudly for Grace to hear. Grace amused, "Not unless you want to get cut, Arthur!" "Sorry sister".

"Alright, tell the maids to bring out the champagne, we're down in a minute." Tommy instructs him. "Champagne, all right." Arthur is patting his chest pocket, "I got it right here, I'm ready." "Good, good." Tommy answers with a gentle smile.

He closes the door, "We should hurry up." Grace is smirking, "I'm not the one responsible for the delay… Help me with the buttons in the back." "Tomorrow, we'll talk more, I promise, but for tonight, I'll make an effort and put everything concerning Sabini's men to rest." Tommy says while fastening her dress.

(…)

In the dining room, Tommy lifts his glass, "To the bride!" Everyone cheers, "To the bride!" "And now according to tradition, my best man is going to say a few words." Arthur stands up, "Alright, I'm not one for speeches, but I do have some words put down here, on this piece of paper. This doesn't include everything that I want to say" Tommy whispers to him, "Arthur, just read what we wrote." Putting down the paper, "I will, but…first a few words from the heart." Tommy is letting his head down, Grace is holding his arm and caressing his back. "This man here, my brother Tommy, helped me survive through some of the worse times." Tommy is increasingly uncomfortable and Grace tries to soothe him. "My brother and love of a good woman," Arthur is looking at Linda smiling sweetly, "put me through that time. Now, Tommy also has the love of a good woman." Grace smiles fondly at Arthur and her eyes meet Tommy looking at her. "Her name is Grace, like the Grace of the good lord… Even though, circumstances of their meeting weren't the best…" "Right!" Tommy interrupts, "Let's raise a toast, to love, to peace, to marriage!"

Arthur leaves the room, crestfallen, Linda follows him. Tommy gets up just behind.

Later at the buffet, Grace approaches Polly who is filling glasses with punch, "Polly." "Hello Grace, you look absolutely beautiful. Welcome to the family." "Oh I see, Tommy's orders? No upsets tonight?" "The hair… Everything…Beautiful" Poly is smirking while delivering her false compliment. "Do you know where he is?" She regrets immediately asking. "Yes. Yes I do." "So?" "You know there is no time Tommy isn't thinking about business." "I know. Tonight being the exception. As his wife I have certain skills at my disposal to divert his mind and lighten his mood." "Oh Grace, you delude yourself." "I see that Tommy's orders are quickly forgotten." "You weren't even present at the last family meetings." Polly sneers. "I don't need to attend every meeting. We have other moments to share information and thoughts." "So you know about Sabini?" "I know he is scheming to come back to the racecourses." "You know he has threatened you, right?" "No, I didn't. But you just told me, so thank you. Let's not forget, I used to do this for a living." "Oh I haven't forgotten sweetheart. It's only Thomas who has forgotten what you are."

The master of ceremony silences the room, "Ladies and Gentlemen, the bride and the groom will now dance, alone." Tommy is waiting for Grace on the dancefloor, extending his hand, he welcomes her in his arms.

As they start dancing Grace whispers in his ear, "Polly's just told me about Sabini's threat." "I didn't want to scare you with that; not today. Polly, Arthur and John are the only ones to know about it. But your security has been reinforced." "Tommy please, we have to get away from things like that. It's our goal, right? I'll run the foundation, you'll run the tracks and sell cars… Promise me? A wedding vow." "I promise, no guns in the house and our children will never see one." "I love you Tommy Shelby. You keep us safe." "I love you and I promise I'll make us safe." He kisses her.

For now that promise is enough for Grace. She knows who she is marrying, she knows the danger he is facing each day. If she is honest with herself, it's one of the things that attracts her to him. But, she also knows that they are both aspiring for a less violent life, for a safer environment for their family. So she dances with him, holding him close, resting her face against his, trusting him with her life.

(…)

Very late that night, she joins Tommy in their bedroom, looking through the window next to him, she reviews their evening. The reception was tense, but except for a fight in the garden and some snarky remarks on both sides, their wedding wasn't as eventful as she had feared, "It went better than I expected." "Yeah me too… Come here." he extends his hand to get her closer to him. She settles in his arms, her back to his front. He presses his face against her cheek, kissing her neck, her collarbone. They are watching the last guests leaving the house. "Tomorrow it will be just us." "Yes. We'll talk, I've promised, but not tonight. Tonight I want to enjoy my wife."

#our love still remains #chapter 8 #fanfiction #grace shelby #grace x tommy #tommy x grace

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galacticlamps · 1 year

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💘🌈🤍 for the fic writer asks? :)

💘Is there any posted fic you want to rework/re-edit/re-write?

Not especially? Little mistakes I'll fix whenever I notice them, even if it's on something that's been up for a long time already - and for anything I'd want to do a major overhaul on, I'm enough of a '2 cakes!' person to be down with writing a new fic on a similar concept, rather than rework one that already exists. Sidebar: that's actually how Shards of Memories & Fragments of Glass and Interrupted initially began, as kinda inverse/incompatible approaches to a similar moment - and I wasn't even frustrated with those, so I can only imagine how much more willing I'd be to write both ideas again if I thought it would be a massive improvement on a story.

((The fics of mine I like the least are also the ones I think about & re-read the least, so maybe there's something in one of them that I would be annoyed by enough to want to re-write, but it just isn't really on my mind? I suppose I look at Reckless and wonder why so little happens in 10k words, or I look at Oh, So Right and wonder if I shouldn't've held off and let that grow into something larger that incorporated more of my headcanons on the subject (I have a lot, but that fic was never meant to be the vehicle for them) - but it's not like I've ruled out doing that some day, so there's no real harm in it already existing as-is. Honestly I think my whole 5+1 series is pretty unbalanced - some like In the Kitchen feel better suited to being a chapter than a whole fic of its own, whereas others feel more like their own independent stories - and I think if I set out to do something like that again, I'd aim for more consistency, but it's not like I want to rewrite those actual fics just so they'd fit together better. If I recall correctly, On the Spot is probably fairly silly, but it's meant to be and there are about a million different versions of proposal & get together fics I have in my head - that one's far from being my favorite version but it doesn't hurt to've gotten one of them out of my system at least.))

🌈is there a fic that you worked *really fucking hard on* that no one would ever know? maybe a scene/theme you struggled with?

See, the thing I struggle with the most is length, and to some extent it really affects everything I write - because it's not as if I'm just anti-long fics, it's that I have a problem with consistently under-estimating what the word count on just about any wip will become. And then I worry if I'm pulling focus & distracting from what I actually want the story to be about with unnecessary word vomit - so I tend to do a lot of second guessing, shortening & looking for things to cut before I post anything, and sometimes I get waaaay too concerned about that, for relatively little payoff. In that regard, it would be much simpler to list the fics I miraculously didn't struggle with lol

But to talk specifics - there's a bit of anti-gravity business in Small Hours in a Wide Universe that I super stressed about narrating, and I sincerely hope no one would ever know - in that case, the problem was that I could see the actions very clearly in my mind & wanted to make sure I articulated it well enough that the reader could too, but the extra dimensions & scifi environment gave me a kind of limited vocabulary to describe movement with specificity. Since I know what it's supposed to look like though I'm not a good judge of if the description I ultimately wrote works well or if it's obvious reading it that I struggled there.

Your Life Begins By Leaving was another that I guess I had trouble with? It spent much longer than usual in my 'on deck' pile, but I wasn't working on it so consistently that it required major trouble to become stalled - again, I was just worried about sort of focus & mood and if I was overshadowing certain things with less necessary bits.

(there are 3 wips in particular that I would love love love to've posted & be able to answer this about one day, because those are truly the ones I've struggled the most with - but right now the only reason no one would know is because they literally don't exist in anyone's minds but my own lol)

🤍what’s one fic of yours you think people didn’t “get”?

I don't think this is really a case of people not 'getting' it as much as people just not caring about it as much as I do, and that's understandable - of everything I've posted, Wedding Colors is probably the most Gen & deals the least in romantic pairings - which a) is already a less popular subject in fanfic, and b) possibly even actively disappoints people by sounding like it would be more overtly romantic, given the title. But that's what I wanted to write, and I did, and I even tagged it as 'one day i decided i needed a Two/Jamie wedding fic that was actually about Zoe and this is that,' so I was kinda as upfront as I could be. (I do find it funny though, because when I'm writing things that are more exclusively Two/Jamie focused, I'll often wonder if I've done a poor job of contriving some reason for the other companions to be absent - sometimes I even feel bad writing them out, bc I think there's a great importance in a healthy romantic relationship also being part of healthy dynamics among any kind of friend group or found family, so I don't want to feel like I'm sidelining everyone because I don't think they're relevant - and yet if we're going by statistics, a fic that does heavily involve those other people & their perspectives on the romance IS in fact less appealing than ones without them, apparently)

The only other one that even slightly comes to mind is Bath Salts & Bruises, but again, saying people don't get it sounds unnecessarily harsh. I did mention once that its stats are pretty unique - if you rank my fics by hits, it's in the top half, by kudos it's in the bottom half, by bookmarks the bottom 4, and by comment threads dead last - which would seem to paint a picture of attracting more attention than it did interest or appreciation - whereas personally, it's a kind of favorite! I'm rather proud of the particular angle I took on their relationship in that one, it's one I believe in headcanon-wise (which I don't always - sometimes I just write things I could see happening because a story seems fun, and not because it's reflective of my more consistent beliefs about the characters) and for something I was a little nervous to write about, I was pretty satisfied with how I executed it too. But again, I don't think this is truly a case of anyone not getting something and more of just varied tastes, and it for sure has some stuff that objectively works against it. It's near the end of a series that took me months to write, versus the beginning installments that you'd expect to receive more attention. Most installments in that series are missing scenes during or after tv episodes - this one's set after a Big Finish audio, and to make matters worse, one that's part of a box set in a relatively unpopular range. Like the wedding one, it might also be a kind of false advertising too - it's a bath scene, the characters are nude for most of it and touching each other and even thinking about sex more directly than usual in most of my stuff - and yet it's not at all steamy or spicy or whatever you want to call it, and nothing ever comes of those thoughts, which could be a let down in terms of expectations/disappointment. And then there's also the fact that this is, I think, the most blatantly ace I've ever written Jamie - which could in itself annoy or even just fail to appeal to people who don't agree with that take - but he's also pretty clearly not uninterested in potentially sleeping with the Doctor. That combination makes perfect sense to me because it overlaps with some of my own experiences as an ace person, but could easily serve to confuse people who've spent less time considering asexuality, while at the same time even alienating other people who are more familiar with its nuances, but whose experiences or perception of the character are at odds with that particular detail.

So I've no reason to believe anyone hates it or is actually super confused by it, but it certainly doesn't appeal to others as much as it does to me (and that's fine, nobody at all could read it ever & I'd still be quite glad I wrote it!)

#ask games #what's the opposite of wips?#oh right #fics

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Exiled From Eden

pairing: andy barber x assistant!fem!reader

summary: andy has gotten his taste of the forbidden fruit, unfortunately at the expense of his marriage. when faced with an ultimatum, he's at a loss on who to choose: laurie or you.

word count: 5.3k

warnings: age gap (reader is 22, andy in 40s?), angst, smut, infidelity, oral (m receiving), pet names, daddy kink, dirty talk, slight fluff, unprotected sex, cream pie, yelling, mentions of divorce, laurie is annoying, happy ending? !!! 18+ MINORS DNI !!!

notes: final installment of the ‘Adam & Eve’ series. thank you so much for reading, i enjoyed this mini series a lot ! let me know what you think !

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Andy should’ve felt sick at what he was doing to Laurie. Having an affair with a woman closer to his son's age than his was something he never saw himself committing.

But it had been almost a year since he had felt desired by his wife, leaving him deprived of love and desperate for attention.

He tried to talk it out with her, tried to set up date nights. Andy did everything in his power to reignite the fire in their marriage, but he was always pushed away. Laurie was constantly saying to him ‘I’m busy, maybe another time.’

After a while though, he just gave up. It was pointless of him trying to put in the effort to fix what was broken if she kept shattering his hopes.

Then you came into his life. He got lost in your doe eyes and irresistible frame. Your smile made his pants strain and his heart skip a beat.

It had been 6 months since he had the pleasure of fucking you, and luckily for him it didn’t stop there. All the late nights in the office that he told Laurie about was him taking you apart. Either on his desk at work or all over your apartment.

Andy couldn’t get enough of you. The sounds you’d make when he was rutting into you. The soft pleas of want that left your lips every time you begged him to keep going. Your essence that he would drink up would leave him in a daze.

But what had him hooked, and also a little scared, was the way you looked at him. In the beginning, the only emotion he could feel from you was lust. But now it was more than that.

Even though the two of you never said it, you both had developed feelings for one another.

When sex wasn’t happening, you two open yourself up to one another. You told him all about the troubles you faced growing up with your authoritarian parents; how you had to live in your sister's shadow, always being told you weren’t good enough, second best.

Andy even told you all about his marriage. How when Laurie and him were still in college, she got pregnant. At the time, he felt obligated to marry her, to be a family. But he never really loved her. He cared for her of course, she’s the mother of his child, but not the way he was supposed to. It was why they only had Jacob, he didn’t feel the need to be tied down to her anymore than obligated.

He could tell that Laurie had picked up on his change of behavior. The late nights and early mornings, the stench of sex that he was sure she smelled on him when he got home, if he ever did. She even tried starting up date night again, but he always pushed it away, wanting to be in your company instead.

Andy was getting ready for work in the bathroom when she walked in. “Morning honey,” Laurie spoke, her voice laced with hope.

He simply grunted through a mouthful of toothpaste, busy brushing his teeth.

The pair stood there in silence, both lost in their own thoughts. He was thinking about you, while she was thinking about him.

She knew something had been going on ever since he came home that night, reeking of sex and fruity perfume. Her suspicions were confirmed when doing laundry that following weekend, when she found your panties in his slacks. They were a pink, lacy kind, something she could’ve seen herself wearing back in college.

Laurie's eyes were brimmed with tears. She knew that they were going through a rough patch, but she always thought they could fix it. For some reason she wasn’t able to confront him about it. She wasn’t sure she’d be able to bear to hear the truth, so she simply ignored it in hopes that it would eventually end.

She started making time to spend with Andy, but was always met with rejection. Even going as far as wearing lingerie to bed, hoping to set the mood, though it would be a waste every time since he kept coming home late at night.

Andy washed off his toothbrush and spoke, not even caring to look at her. “I’m going to be late again tonight, unfortunately I still have that big client.”

That gnawing pain plagued her heart once more. She watched as her husband picked up his jacket and began to leave, not caring enough to kiss her on the cheek and say goodbye.

“Are we okay,” Laurie questioned him, causing him to stop in his tracks with his back to her.

He should’ve felt culpability, sadness, and sin due to breaking his vows. But he felt nothing. Part of him hoped that she would find out, giving him an out from their marriage since he couldn’t fully do it on his own.

“Of course, we’re fine,” he answered, “why wouldn’t we be?”

Laurie felt like screaming at him. She should’ve told him that she wasn’t stupid and how she knew he was having an affair. How heartbroken she was knowing someone else was making her husband happy. She felt like slapping him, hitting him, hurting him just as much as he did to her.

But she just smiled, pushing away all of those emotions threatening to bubble out. “Nothing dear, just checking,” lamented Laurie, quickly forcing the words out so that she wouldn’t cry.

A twinge of guilt reached Andy’s heart. He knew he was hurting her, but he couldn’t find himself entirely caring.

He turned around to face his wife. Slowly trodding towards her, he placed a hand on top of her arm and leant forward, laying a kiss on top of her forehead. “Love you,” Andy muttered, lying through his teeth.

And with that, he exited the bathroom leaving his wife to wallow away in her feelings.

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

The sounds of your wet mouth slurping up his cock filled the space of his office.

Andy had called you in for a ‘personal meeting’ once again, making sure to close the blinds from any of his colleagues' wandering eyes. The second you stepped foot into the room, you were attacked with kisses and Andy’s hands caressing your figure.

“Morning princess,” Andy purred in your ear as he guided your body to his desk.

His affectionate actions made you giddy, “Morning Andy.”

Which led you to your current position; you on your knees, under his desk, taking his entire length down your throat. His slacks unzipped to allow his cock to run free.

Andy was in pure bliss. The warm, wet feel of your tongue gliding down his shaft had him seeing stars.

You raised your head just a tad to suck on his soft head, drinking up all the precum that escaped him. Making sure he felt the more pleasure, you took both of your hands and stroked him off. Your hands glided up and down, using your spit to ease your motions.

Andy looked down at you while you were lost in your actions. You on your knees, your hollowed cheeks, the way your hands twisted and turned up the expanse of his length; he was surprised he didn’t blow his load already.

“Princess,” Andy cooed, his New England accent evident, “Give me those eyes. Look up to Daddy.”

You removed your spit soaked palms from him before looking up. Making sure to lock in eye contact, you slowly descended down his cock, not stopping until he hit the back of your throat. A muffled gargle rang out your mouth, spit flying out and forming bubbles due to your ministrations.

Andy’s head flew back against the plush of his office chair. “F-fuck baby, that’s it.” He had to suppress the loud groans threatening to come due to where they were currently located. Only soft grunts left his lips just loud enough for you to hear.

“Such a perfect little mouth,” his vulgar words only seemed to ignite the fire in you by the dozens, “You gonna let Daddy fuck your throat? Fuck all of his frustrations out on you?”

With your mouth being occupied, all you could do to respond was nod your head, the action causing Andy’s tip to rub even more against the back of your mouth.

A smile made his way on his features, “Good girl, such a good girl.” And with that, Andy proceeded to use you.

You gagging around his length only spurred him on. He bucked his hips, forcing his length even deeper into your mouth. You stroked your tongue along the underside of his cock, stimulating his throbbing dorsal vein.

“Jesus- fuck princess, look at you. Such a good little slut for me.”

Andy looked into your eyes once more and felt his balls start to tighten, indicating his release on the horizon.

He proceeded to rut into your mouth, pushing his entire length until your nose met the soft hairs of his happy trail. The feeling of being used had you moaning around his length once more.

You watched as his forehead scrunched and eyebrows furrowed. His plump bottom lip turned red as he sucked and bit down on it in order to suppress his moans.

“Right- Oh,” Andy kept your head down, suffocating you as he spilled himself into your mouth. “Ah, fuck princess!”

Ribbons of his thick seed ran down, giving you no choice but to swallow.

Andy’s chest rose and fell rapidly, the release taking a toll on him. His eyes were shut, head resting back against his chair as he savored the moment.

You removed his softening cock from your mouth, much to your dismay and already missing the velvety feel of him. Tucking his manhood back into his underwear and zipping his slacks up, you set both of your knees into the chair, straddling him.

There were some wisps of hair stuck to his forehead by dribbles of sweat, which you proceeded to swipe away. You always knew how to turn him into putty in a matter of minutes just by your tongue. It made you feel powerful, worthy even.

But there was also the feeling of guilt. You were having an affair with your boss, a married man. The tales of the husband leaving his marriage for their mistress were slim to none, they would always go back to the wife. But you held hope.

Hope that someday, you might be able to properly be with him, and not have to hide out in the shadows.

You were so lost in thought that you didn’t realize when Andy lifted his hooded eyes and was watching you. Your eyes darted back and forth as your mind was riddled with doubts.

“Hey (Y/N),” he questioned, snapping you out of your thoughts, “Are you okay baby?”

You left out a heavy sigh before resting in the crook of his neck, inhaling the musk of his cologne. Andy rubbed the expanse of your back, waiting for you to confess whatever was on your mind.

“I just-,” you hesitated, “I just don’t know if I can continue to do this knowing I don’t fully have your heart.” Sadness was evident in your tone.

Andy felt his heart ache at your confession. He knew that this topic was eventually going to arise. He would often talk about filing for divorce but was always hesitant due to worrying about how it would affect Jacob.

He sat there with you in silence, the two of you nestled into one another. Andy thought about his feelings for you. How you made him feel young again, wanted, and for the first time in a year; he truly felt happy.

He was in love with you. In the beginning, it was sex-riddled feelings; but now he truly did care for you. The thought of losing you was something he didn’t want to bear.

“I care for you so much more than you might think,” Andy spoke with utmost confidence.

Even though those were words you’ve been waiting to hear, they still were just empty promises.

Andy grasped the side of your face, pulling you out from his neck to look at you directly. “This Friday night. You and I are having dinner at my place. Jacob is heading to a sleepover for the weekend, and Laurie is going on a retreat with her school. It’ll be just the two of us and I’ll show you how much you mean to me.”

You stared intently into his eyes, searching for any sign of doubt but couldn’t find one. A hesitant smile graced your features. “Ok, sure.”

Andy smiled so hard he felt his cheeks start to burn, “It’s a date then.”

“It’s a date.”

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

Laurie had picked up on Andy’s sudden change in attitude fairly quickly. Before he was aloof, always giving dry responses before ignoring her and finding ways to get out of the house.

But now it was the polar opposite, he had been more responsive to her. Asking her questions about her day, how her work was going, it made her feel special. Part of her thought that he had finally come to his senses and wanted to be a family again; that thought filled her with hope.

It was Friday morning, Jacob had already left for school, an overnight bag in tow so that he could go straight to his friends house for their weekend sleepover.

Laurie went down and found Andy in the kitchen, cooking her favorite breakfast. “Honey, what has gotten into you?”

Andy looked up at his wife from the stove, “Nothing, just making sure you eat something before your trip.” He tried to not sound too excited at the thought of her departure.

There was a bit of uncertainty and doubt that rang in her head, but she decided to ignore it and enjoy the rare intimate moment with her husband.

After breakfast was finished, Andy cleaned up after the two.

“So what are you going to do with the weekend to yourself,” queried Laurie.

Andy stopped his movements and thought about you. The weekend he had planned involved him taking you apart on every surface in his house, then finally saying the three words he had been hesitating on telling you.

Snapping himself out of his thoughts, he looked up at Laurie. “Probably just clean up around the house, finish some errands.”

Laurie smiled, seeming satisfied with his answer before heading upstairs to collect her things.

About 15 minutes later, Andy was helping her to her car, stowing her luggage in the trunk. But before he could walk away, she pulled him into a searing kiss.

To Laurie, it felt like she was back in the honeymoon stage of their marriage. She felt passion and excitement due to finally getting the chance to properly kiss her husband after so long.

To Andy, it just felt wrong. It wasn’t your lips. He didn’t taste the usual notes of strawberries from your lipgloss. He didn’t smell the honeysuckle perfume you would always spritz on your body. Most importantly, he didn’t feel that fervor that would run through him when he pressed his lips to yours.

When Andy pulled away, Laurie looked at him and saw him smile down at her. But what she saw was a strained smile, like it pained him to do so. Suspicion clouded her brain once again, but the sound of her phone ringing reminded her of her plans.

Laurie got into her car, with the help of Andy, and drove away.

Once he watched his wife drive off, Andy pulled out his phone to start the preparations for his date night with you, silently praying that everything went according to plan.

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

It was around 7 o’clock, when Andy was finishing the final touches of the meal. Spending some nights with you at your apartment, he realized that one of your favorite meals was lasagna, but you never had the time to make it yourself. So he spent the entire afternoon scouring for the required ingredients and the perfect recipe to surprise you.

He was getting the accompanying salad ready when there was a knock on the door, signaling your arrival.

After parking on the street outside Andy’s suburban home, you made your way to the front door, hesitantly knocking.

As you stood there, you wondered if this might be the night you’ll be able to confess your feelings to him. You never told him how after the 2 month mark of your ‘relationship’ you stopped looking forward to sex and started hoping for the more intimate moments.

You thought that if you told him, it would scare Andy off and that would be the end of the two of you. So not wanting to risk anything, you kept your mouth shut.

When Andy opened up his front door you were taken back. Anytime you’d see him, he’d always look professional. Though there were times when he’d stay at your house and he’d wear just a pair of briefs, this was a different look.

He looked homey, domesticated even. Wearing a green button up and black jeans, all you wanted to do was snuggle into his large frame.

“Hi,” your voice was soft as you spoke up to him.

“Hi there princess.”

Andy sidestepped so that you could enter his home. The second you did he pulled you in and molded his lips to yours, desperate to feel your silky touch.

After a few moments you breathlessly pulled away from each other with a dopey smile.

He intertwined his hand with yours before walking you through the house and into his kitchen. The smell of garlic and roasted tomatoes made your stomach lightly growl. “Since it’s our first date, I thought I’d go all out and make your favorite meal.”

You gasped up at him, “Wait, you made lasagna?”

Your questioning made him chuckle, “Yes baby. You always said you never had the chance to get the homemade stuff so I went out and did my best. All for you.”

The sentiment made your heart swell. You never thought he was paying much attention to your post-coital drabbles, but here he was, proving you wrong.

You connected your lips with his again, sighing into his mouth with contentment. “Thank you Andy,” you said through kisses.

“Anything for you princess.”

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

Laurie sat at the campground, fiddling with her thumbs as she listened to the sounds of children laughing around the fire.

She should’ve been fully focused on the little ones in front of her, but all she could focus on was the nagging feeling involving her husband. There was something about his behavior this morning that had her mind racing.

Her coworker snapped her out of her thoughts, “Hey Laurie, are you okay?”

She mulled over Cara’s question. Everything at home wasn’t okay to say the least. For months she has seen a stark difference with her husband. He stayed out later and stopped trying to pick up the parts of their relationship where she knowingly lacked.

“Yeah I- I think I have a bit of a stomach bug,” she explained to her colleague, “You think it would be a problem if I headed home. I don’t want any of the kids getting sick because of me.”

Cara's face was full of concern at Lauries confession, “Of course sweetheart, head on home. Text me once you’re safe and feel better.”

Grabbing her things, Laurie got in her car and made the drive back home. Hoping that her sneaky suspicions didn’t turn out to be true.

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

The effects of an excellent wine pairing that Andy provided resulted in the two of you making your way towards his bedroom. Both of your mouths and hands made work on the other.

Once the door was shut, Andy lifted you up and wrapped your legs around his waist. The position allowed him to jut his crotch against yours.

Removing you from the wooden door, he carried you to the bed and layed you across it.

Usual times with the two of you in the sheets consisted of fast paced actions but in this moment, you both took your time. Andy peeled your jeans off your legs, kissing your skin along the way. “You are so fucking perfect sweetheart.”

You lifted your shirt off your body, leaving you in just your underwear.

Andy felt your fingers unbutton his shirt and slide the material out from his arms, feeling up his muscles along the way. He shimmied out of his pants before colliding his brief covered cock against your warm mound.

The two of you stayed in that passion-filled moment, kissing and grinding against the other.

“I love you.”

You were so forgone with lust that you didn’t realize the weight of what you had said until you felt Andy’s motions stop against your lips. Opening your eyes, you met his ones that were full of admiration.

“I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have s-”

Before you could finish, Andy interjected. “I love you too (Y/N).”

Your breath caught in your throat at his revelation. The words you were so scared to say came out from him with ease, like he had been wanting to say it just as much as you did. The kiss that followed was intensified with fondness.

Not caring about the articles that still stood in his path, he tugged his briefs down and pulled your soaked panties to the side. Andy was desperate to be inside of you.

With a few quick pumps to his shaft, he prodded your heat before fully sheathing himself inside of you. A delicious and content moan came out of you both.

“Ah yes.”

Andy’s strokes were deliberately slow, wanting to feel every ridge of your tight walls against his cock. Every bump of his cock against your sweet spot had you mewling.

“I’m in love with you princess,” Andy moaned out in your panting mouth, “I’ve been in love with you for so long. Just didn’t know if you felt the same.”

You shook your head at his apprehension, “I’m in love with you too Andy.”

His balls slapped against the curve of your ass with every thrust. Your walls tighten with every drag against them.

“Keep going Andy, please.”

Your sharp cries of desire paired with his heavy pants caused you both to miss the sound of the front door opening and closing paired with footsteps ascending the stairs.

Andy could tell you were close, as was he. His pace quickened into a frenzied assault on your cunt. All that could be heard in the bedroom were the sound of sweat-slick skin slapping together and lewd whimpers.

“I love you (Y/N).”

“I love you too Andy.”

And with your words of affirmations, you both reached your personal peaks. With opened mouths, you swallowed each other’s moans.

You felt his cum coat your pulsating walls, the copious amount causing it to leak out of you. Andy continued to buck into you, hoping to prolong his orgasm.

Though he wanted to savor the moment of you spent underneath him, something in his peripheral vision caught his eye.

Looking left, he witnessed the rage filled expression of his wife.

“Shit. Laurie.”

She threw her bag at you and the brunette, “How could you?”

You pushed Andy off of you in a hurried fashion in order to get dressed.

“Look Laurie I-”

“I mean I knew you were cheating. I found her fucking underwear that you kept hidden in your pants. But you brought the slut home, seriously Andy?”

He was filled with a certain anger at the name she labeled you, “Don’t you dare call her that!”

Laurie scoffed at him, “Don’t call her that? That’s what she is. She knowingly fucked a married man, what does that make her? A fucking home wrecker.”

He stood there seething at her choice of words about you.

“It’s either me or her, Andy, the choice is yours.”

You stood there, fully dressed and about to leave the confines of his bedroom when you stopped upon hearing her ultimatum.

Turning around you locked eyes with Andy. You suspected that he would choose you after the sweet words he moaned out to you, but you watched as he stood there silently.

“Well?” you questioned, dread filling your being.

Andy wanted to say that he picked you, that he felt more love and passion in these past 6 months than he did his entire marriage, but he couldn’t. His thoughts kept traveling back to his son.

He thought about what would happen to him if they separated homes, the effect of their divorce that would have on the 15 year old. So he stood there silently, like a coward.

But his stillness was still an answer in your book. With tears falling down your face, you walked away as fast as you could, ignoring the pleas from the man that you loved begging you to stop.

Making sure to grab your purse, you ran out of his home and into your car. Once in the safety of your vehicle, you freely sobbed; your heart was heavy.

You told yourself that this would happen, that they would always choose their spouse, but you were so enamored by the man that you ignored the warning voices.

Wiping away your tears in an effort to compose yourself, you put your key into the ignition and made the track back to your apartment, alone.

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

Andy sat at the dinner table, nursing a beer while Laurie stared at him.

“Are you going to say anything, or just sit there trying to get drunk?”

He ignored the shrieks coming from his wife as his mind wandered to you. The dejected look on your face broke him. He had caused you to open your heart to him, baring your soul in the process, all for him to immediately shatter it. Shatter the hopes of a life you envision with him, a life you both envision all because he was weakling that couldn’t properly speak his mind.

Laurie rolled her eyes at his silenced self, “Whatever, clean the room up and get rid of all traces of her before Jacob gets home. You had your fun, now it’s over. Let’s just move on.”

She began the trek to leave the house before Andy stopped her.

“It’s not over,” he declared, “I stopped loving you a long time ago Laurie.”

“What did you just say to me?”

“Oh don’t act surprised,” Andy seethed as he got up from his chair. “You haven’t been in this marriage for over a year. Why do you think I got with her? Because she actually gave more of a shit about me than my own wife was supposed to!”

Throwing out the barely touched beer and grabbing his keys, he brushed past his stunned wife and made his way out the door.

“Where do you think you’re going Andy?”

He turned around to face his wife, “To go apologize to the woman that I’m in love with and beg for her forgiveness. Then tomorrow morning I’m filing for divorce.”

She watched as he took off his wedding band and set it down on the table near the front door. And with that, Andy left Laurie standing by the banister with her jaw dropped as he made his way over to you.

.·:*¨ ☼ ⭒ ☽ ⊹ ☾ ⭒ ☼ ¨*:·.

You sat in your bedroom, clutching your pillow with all of your might in an effort to stop your tears, but to no avail. Your body shook as your warm tears fell from your eyes and soaked your sheets.

All you could think about was Andy. How it felt to finally bare your soul to him and for him to utter those intimate words, all to just stomp on your dreams.

In the midst of your breakdown, you heard a hurried knock on your front door.

“(Y/N)! Baby please, let me in. I need to talk to you.”

The sound of Andy’s voice only made the tears fall faster. You thought this was a sick effort of his to break your heart even more, so you ignored his pleas.

Though it didn’t do you any good, considering he unlocked your door and let himself in. You then remembered about the key you had given him a month prior, instantly regretting it.

Andy hurriedly searched through your apartment in search of you. You didn’t have the energy to lock your bedroom so he walked right in.

“You can leave your key here and head on back to your wife. I’m sure you miss her already,” you muttered through tears.

Andy sighed at your sulking state. He went to sit down on your bed and reach out to touch you, but you shied away from him.

“I know you must hate me right now, I wouldn’t blame you,” he carefully began, “But I need you to know that I wasn’t lying when I said that I am in love with you.”

You scoffed at his words, not believing him. “If you really loved me, you would’ve said so in front of your wife but you didn’t. You made me look like an idiot.”

“Oh princess,” Andy murmured.

He knew that you didn’t want him anywhere near you, but at that moment he didn’t care. So he carefully slid into the bed, facing your tear soaked face as you looked anywhere but at him.

You two stayed there in silence as he watched your hardened features slowly begin to soften under his gaze.

“I’m filing for divorce in the morning,” Andy began as he showed you his bare ring finger. “I know it’s just words but I mean it, I already told Laurie. The reason I stayed silent was that I was scared of how it might affect Jacob, getting divorced and breaking the family. But then I realized that what he would want the most, for both me and his mom, is for us to be happy. Yeah he might hate me for cheating, but I believe that whenever he gets the chance to meet the wonderful woman that entered my life and stole my heart he’ll understand.”

Your saddened tears turned into happy ones at his words. A slight smile tugged on your lips which didn’t go unnoticed to Andy.

“The woman who looks at me with such passion it leaves me breathless every time. Who's laugh shakes me to my core with how amazing it is. The woman who I want to be with. And I know what I did hurt you. I made you feel the way your parents did- second best. But if you give me one more chance, I promise you (Y/N) that I will never break your heart ever again.”

Sniffling away your tears, you finally locked eyes with the man across from you.

“How do I know you’re serious with everything that you just said? How do I know you won’t get bored of me now that secrecy is off the table?”

Andy leaned towards you and was happy that you didn’t move away from him again. He traced your lips with his thumb before connecting them with his.

This kiss was what he needed. The taste of your lip gloss, the traces of your perfume, you content moans as you kiss him back. It was what he longed for every morning he woke up and right before he shut his eyes at night.

Pulling away but staying only a few centimeters away, he stared at you with such vigor it made you lighthearted.

“Because (Y/N) (Y/L/N), I am hopelessly, madly in love with you. And if I have to scream it from the rooftops I will. If it costs me my job, then so be it. If I lose the house in the divorce, who cares? As long as I have you, that’s all that matters.”

His words gave you hope. Yes, you still felt a bit apprehensive but you knew with the determined look in his eyes that there was no need for it. So you smiled back at the man with delight in your voice.

“I love you Andy.”

“I love you princess.”

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A/N: aaand that's all folks. i hope you enjoyed this mini series as much as i did.

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